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Parsat
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This is a bit of a forum game, but at the same time it has the capacity to result in a bit of poetry, so it goes here. I'm going to supply a line of poetry, and the following poster is to create a poem using the line I gave as their first. Along with their poem, they supply a line for the next person to write poetry on. No restrictions on the type of line or poetry; just keep the line open ended.

Here's the first line:

A mountain pokes out awkward in the mist

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slayguy8
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Just gonna stand there
pausing, breathing, thinking,
just gonna stand there
while everything moves
just gonna stand there
then i move just like that

ok...........

as the bird chirps

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As the bird chirps
Millions are massacred
As the wolf howls
billions are born
As the Whale sings
Multitudes will mourn
As the Eagle shrieks
Legions will laugh

But as a baby cries
None will notice
As Silence falls
All will arise
Humanity is Always
Last to listen
Our voice obscured
Our ears estinguished

It kind of makes sense... I guess.

The last can was empty

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The last can was empty
The town goes hungry
Soon the plaqe hits
No immunities no cure
death is among us
no one will ever be safe
only because the last can was empty

quiet goes the fox

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Quiet goes the fox
Creeping through the brush
Quieter the rabbit
Whom it will soon flush
This game of fates
This tale of two souls
Means nothing overall
As the universe foals

Nonexistence is rampant
Nihilism abound
Everything but none
Making a sound
A screech in the distance
The howl of the wind
The rabbit is off
His life will soon end.

As far as I can see

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As far as I can see
There is stupidity
How can that be?
Why so simply
I am looking at me

The sun blazes in the sky

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The sun blazes in the sky
On our skin
Sunburn

Today

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Today
A compromise between
Yesterday and
Tomorrow

Now
Sweeping between
The concrete past
The liquid future

Here's a tricky one (maybe)
He burned the flower with malice

Parsat
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He burned the flower with malice
God's creation, destruction his
To a sooty, soft abyss.

Next line:
What element do I find my desire?

Parsat's note: Wow! I've seen poem challenges like this done before in other forums with good turnout, but I never reckoned it would attract so many people. Keep it up! I was wondering what everyone would think to a digest or newsletter of sorts of the best lines and poems in every 10 pages (100 posts), posted here? Keep posting your poetry, but let me know what you think.

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digest or newsletter of sorts of the best lines and poems in every 10 pages (100 posts),


I was actually going to suggest just such a thing...

Question:
May we add punctuation to the first line?
For instance, could I write "What element do I find, my Desire?"

This changes the meaning from asking which element you desire to asking someone else (your desire) which element you find. Subtle, but important.

Anyway, just wondering.

You're totally setting up a "earth wind water or Fire?" second line, so I'm going to do something else because I'm cool like that.

What element do I find my desire?
Does the court of Law call my name?
But there can't be room for another liar
Perhaps a boxing title I shall claim
But the pain too deep, and me a crier
Medice, Ah! To remove other's pain-
But I lack the knowlege this does require
Shall I lead a victorious campaign?
But while goal's may be high, my laziness higher
There is but one place where I can reign:
At Mickey D's, in front of a fryer.

New line:
It was the slow death of a million papercuts
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It was the slow death of a million papercuts
the next one hurt more than the last
the feeling of slowly bleeding out
you didnt picture this to end this way
all because of a million papercuts

hey thats my pizza

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Hey thats my pizza!
Why dont you get your own?
What do mean Im selfish?
Just leave me alone!

The warrior stood alone.

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The warrior stood alone
his heart cold as stone
killing everything in his path
everyone is feeling his wrath

is there anyone to stand
to rid him from this land
is everyone scared of this man
people believe that i can

i am not afraid of this man

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ok sorry next line is

what is this thing

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What is this thing
I cannot touch it
Nor can I see it
Yet it holds sway
over my very soul
This intangible thing
That dominates me
This thing is love.

The sky of grand azure

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Just a few clarifications.

The most essential thing in the lines given are the words. As long as their meaning is not completely impaired by changing punctuation, you can feel free to change it and give yourself that flexibility. By "meaning not completely impaired" I mean a "eats, shoots and leaves" kind of thing. Generally speaking this means internal punctuation in the line shouldn't be changed.

Also, as a courtesy, bold the line that you supply so that it's easy to pick out.

If there happens to be a conflict where two people write about the same line at the same time and supply different first lines for the next person, it's up to that next person which line they want to start with.

The sky of grand azure
glimmers like a polished vein
of turquoise new exposed to
oxidizing air.

We take a piece and wash a piece,
but it is never as pristine as it was.

Many a sleepless night I found

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