I have enjoyed the complexity and depth in your work wolf of words, but you need more then poetry.

in my current state forgive me if nothing but poetry is placed

A mental block?

Cool poems bro!

A mental block?

A severe emotional upheaval. Those who have read more of my work within the poetry contest will notice a reoccuring theme recently. Heartbreak. The denouncement of love and other such things.

You can pray and hope your world doesn't burn, but there will always be a fire. It's what you do with the ashes that count.

life will always return to the soil no matter how scorched the earth is.

**READ! So below is something I'm working on but I don't know where to take it or what to do with it. ADVICE WOULD BE HELPFUL!

Break. It's a word that echoes through the mind of everyone at some point. Break. No one really considers the word, no one really thinks of the meaning. To break is to be in need of repair, and God help me I am in need of repair. Look at where I've landed myself, on some downtown Toronto sidewalk with people passing me by in the pouring rain. Hell, they don't even see me. They're too focussed on their own lives, too self centered in their bubble of...of ***** I don't know! But, here I am, 18 and broken. Broken so d*mn badly I might not be able to even be repaired, and if I could be, what would I be? A former shadow of who I was? Some stranger I don't even know? Christ...best to remained broken I guess. I guess that's where you come in, whoever you are. Yeah, maybe you'll listen. One word of warning though. Break.

Powerful stuff.
it sounds like a narrative monologue would be a good way to keep it. but add some roundabout description of the person your talking to. you also might be wanting to add recalling memories and flashbacks.

I don't think you've chosen a very powerful word to write about. Everybody knows what 'break' means, and I have found myself considering the word before, so that kinda ruins your fourth sentence. Plus, it could also mean 'to take a break', and because it has a second meaning, it takes away the impact of your writing. Unless you'd put something like ''it also means to take a break. When will anybody give me a dam.n break?''.

I like the middle part, however. I find using simple ideas often have the greatest effect. You haven't loaded up your paragraph too much with gabble, it flows well. I particularly like the phrase 'some downtown Toronto sidewalk with people passing me by in the pouring rain' because it subconsciously gives you a lot of needed information without forwardly explaining the situation in some rant about the weather and people these days.

''broken so dam.n badly I might not be able to even be repaired'' -  The way you've worded this sentence kinda ruins the flow, maybe just change it around a little. (for ex, ''broken so dam.n badly I may never get repaired'')

Finally, in my opinion, the work 'break' as a standalone at the end really doesn't do it for me. It doesn't end in a satisfying way. It doesn't even make sense to be honest, why is break a word of warning? It would make sense to me more if you ended by saying ''a word of warning though; we all end in the same way. Broken.'' or words to a similar effect.

All in all I hope you continue with the idea, you've captured my interest!

What a bitter place this is
Where good men will find no rest
And, with their hearts still beating
Shall have them shattered upon the floor.
What good have you done?
Except give me a sickness of false hope
That, as the fool I am
Shall keep in my mangled heart evermore.

You are a very good writer, I like the fact you dont use dirt basic words, our student teacher when doing poetry always uses basic words.

Im not very good at poetry, so it may not mean much but i couldnt really find a flaw in it.