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Here is a thread dedicated to my work as a writer. This thread will mostly be filled with my poems which vary in theme but I try to fashion myself after my favourite poet T.S Eliot, who I believed captured human nature in his words. I aspire to do the same. Please feel free wo citique and review my work. However, simply saying "I like it" is not good enough, as a writer I must grow and develop so I beg you readers to give me a reason as to why or why not you liked the poem. To start off I shall provide you with one of my personal favourties.

These Are The Boring Bits

Call life what you will,
A joke,
A curse,
A gift,
An adventure.
Take from it what you will,
Joy,
Sorrow,
Love,
Hate.
Lose yourself in it
Find your purpose
Or,
Find nothing at all.

A man asked, "What is the meaning of life?"
A woman told him, "Whatever you make it to be."
A child asked, "Is god real?"
A parent told them, "Only you can decide."

Personal opinion is what we use to guide us,
The opinions of others are what lose us.
We can never be certain
That we are certain of anything
Because of change,
And because things stay the same.
What makes sense one day,
Will confuse us another,
And so it goes on.
People tell others to:
Get in line,
Grow up,
Get our lives straight,
Who told these people these things?
And why tell us the things that broke them?

Is it human nature to be unhappy?

Two men sit on a bench,
In a park,
Under a tree.
They talk about family and friends
They talk about work and dreams.
One man says, "It is a waste of time to dream,"
The other says, "Yes, but to have dreams is not."
Dreams are what the world is made of
Bad dreams,
Good dreams,
Lost dreams.

Hope is never far off,
As the old die,
The young are born,
The young grow,
They become old,
The old die.
But while they are young,
They change the world.
Some for the better,
Others for the worse.

Inspiration is a dream.

The only inspiration in life is life:
What to do?
How to do it?
Can we change the world?
How to change the world?
Is there purpose?
Are we real?
Or a figment of imagination?
All questions do not need answers.

Call life what you will,
These are the boring bits.

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Thanks for the critique Linda. I know it need work, a lot of it, I wrote it in five minutes XD I'm mood to write shorts.

Little Smile

Dream a little smile for me
And place it on my face.
Find a little hope for me
So that I can escape the place.
You tell me you have problems
Don't you know I have 'em too?
You say that yours are bigger,
But that's only half true.
You've wasted time once again
You've brought me to my knees.
With cruel words thrown at me
You barely hear my pleas.
Can't you see I'm drowning
In this ocean of despair?
The waves are closing in on me
I'm gasping just for air.
So before you condemn me
To some unjustified doom
Dream a little smile for me
so that it may light the gloom.

MoonFairy
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The last line doesn't seem to fit. But other than that it pwned as usual.

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"The terrifying thing about madness is that it is indiscernable from sanity."

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Pictures

So many pictures on the floor.
Dust and the dreams scattered...
Bittersweet, bittersweet
It all seemed right
We ruled a house of cards...
Bittersweet, bittersweet
The house fell down.
Only to scatter pictures...

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Oooh that's strange. I like it, but it's...obscure. I can picture the scene perfectly in my head.

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Why Louis Carol is No Longer Relevant[b]

Don't burst my bubble!
Quick quick to the zidery doo
Only that shall save the bubble from trouble.
Oh dear, oh my oh what have you done?!
Another few moments and my bubble is
Done, gone for kaput evermore!
No joy for me, tears will flood this floor.
And drown drown all shall be drowned...
All because, you bursted the worsted of all troubles
You friend...burst my bubble.

Now sit back, relax and have a quick seat
I'll start from your head and work to your feet.
What's that? oh my! You're starting to leak
Don't worry, don't fret We'll be less than a week!
Too long you say? Oh dear oh no!
Oh well, too bad you'll just have to go
The quickest of quicks and speedys of speeds
Have no fear I'll look after your needs.
Now, dear "friend" ignore my laugh
It cackles you say? I gahuff and galaff?

Hehe what fun and soon to be double.
Oh dear my friend I've burst your bubble...

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Isn't it "Lewis Carrol?"

wolf1991
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Yes That's part of the joke

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In a mean way it is a funny poem.
Not to be mean to you wolf, but your sense of humor is.... strange.

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Well, Moon, recently you were debating whether he had a sense of humor or not, so I guess this is a victory for you...

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Did neither of you pick up on the fact that the friend is in a bit of a problematic situation and that the speaker is possibly insane?

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Victory? How so? I don't remember talking about wolf's humor.
Icy, just try it once, say "lol"

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Did neither of you pick up on the fact that the friend is in a bit of a problematic situation and that the speaker is possibly insane?

Well Duh. That much is obvious Wolf.
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Pft well since we're Ms. It's Obvious today what's the bubble?

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My guess? Sanity. Mr. Freaky Sense Of Humor.

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