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Posted Dec 7, '11 at 5:40pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

You could make your first line your title; its the same way Emily Dickinsons poems were titled.

I'll have to remember to try that next time. Thanks for the suggestion.

And your ego should be boosted, you are very talented.

Thanks! But don't tell my ego that, as he might get an inflated view of himself.

Yes, my ego is large enough to warrant a seperate entity. In hindsight, perhaps not one of my best ideas...

 

Posted Dec 10, '11 at 7:11pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

Idealistic

Roll up your banners!
Throw down you arms!
Why can't we all have peace?

Sheath all your weapons!
Dull all your blades!
Why can't we all have peace?

Knowledge is Power,
But Power is Money.
Why can't we all have peace?
Can't we all have peace?

 

Posted Dec 14, '11 at 6:05pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

The Ballad of the Beggar

A lonely coin lives in my cup;
Rags lie upon my head.
No food nor drink have I to sup,
And stones make up my bed.

You meant not to stroll on this street,
But now you're here, indeed.
You quickly move your booted-feet,
And ignore those who plead.

My voice pines like a dieing flute,
But you hear not my call.
I see all of the destitute,
But you see none at all.

Now hark! And hear the orphan cry!
Hear how the widow weeps!
Do not ignore the poor who die
Alone within their sleep!

I do not mean to make a fuss,
But shackles bow your head!
For Scrooge dwells within all of us,
And all of us are dead.
__________
Wrote this for the poetry contest. The theme was Charles Dickens' "A Christmas Carol".

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 4:58pm

Alexistigerspice

Alexistigerspice

655 posts

Wonderous works of prose and poetry?
HA!
I scoff at that.  SCOFF.

Now on a more serious note...
Good job. Relatable topics with nice flow. Yummy reads.

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 5:01pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

Wonderous works of prose and poetry?
HA!
I scoff at that.  SCOFF.

D:

Good job. Relatable topics with nice flow

Thanks!

Yummy reads

Yummy like the sammich you're making me right now?

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 5:11pm

Alexistigerspice

Alexistigerspice

655 posts

Thanks!

No problem.  Now write a poem about how you are making me a sammich.

Yummy like the sammich you're making me right now?

No, yummy like the one you are making me, and like the mocha latte you were supposed to have fetched for me by now.

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 5:14pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

Your halucinations about me being subservient to you were... humorous, at first. But now I am seriously concerned about your mental well being. Not what I care about you at all, no, but because such a mental state interferes with your ability to serve me.

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 5:20pm

Alexistigerspice

Alexistigerspice

655 posts

Just face it, Mav, I'm never going to serve you or anybody else. 
Like I said, I am Alexis, servant to no one and ruler of all I survey, which is EVERYTHING.
Now put that in your juicebox and suck it.
Then write a pretty little poem about how much it hurts to be servant to some random AG chick.

 

Posted Dec 29, '11 at 5:24pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

3,707 posts

Ruler of all you survey? But my kitchen doesn't have a window...

 

Posted Dec 30, '11 at 4:24pm

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

887 posts

i like ur poetry. i like it more now with the ryhming!

 
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