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Posted Mar 20, '11 at 12:15pm

daniel1570

daniel1570

30 posts

yo dude your poems are like awesome!!!

 

Posted Mar 20, '11 at 12:48pm

LivingToDie

LivingToDie

272 posts

This cold, barren wasteland,
Is the beginnings of your heart,
Bathed in the blood of man,
Frozen over from the very start.

My favorite one of yours so far.
It just made me go into deep thought while reading it.
Nice work, man.

 

Posted Mar 20, '11 at 1:01pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,230 posts

I like the last one as well.
But what nags me is you used real then surreal in the other.

 

Posted Mar 20, '11 at 2:24pm

Neef

Neef

86 posts

what nags me is you used real then surreal in the other

Heh, ya, I couldn't think of anything else.

 

Posted Mar 20, '11 at 2:26pm

LivingToDie

LivingToDie

272 posts

You led me to the end of my rope,
And kept me going with the promise of hope.
I couldn't believe that you were real,
I thought that this was all too surreal.
I have been alone for so long,
And I desperetley wanted to be wrong.

It seems that you forced it to rhyme too much, poems are meant to have a good flow, that seemed a little thrown together.

 

Posted Mar 20, '11 at 2:42pm

Neef

Neef

86 posts

Eh! I made it go backwards TToTT

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 8:34pm

Neef

Neef

86 posts

This poem was overdue to be posted.

Now I've gotten bored with you,
like some old toy i threw you aside,
You thought that i was a fool,
And so you went and tried,
to find where I hid,
you found me,
and heaven forbid,
I threw a fit.
I yowled
and spit
and scratched
and hissed
and clawed
and...
missed.
you picked me up,
off the ground,
while i tried to move around,
out of you clutches,
I meowed and fussed,
and when you tried to pet me,
I guess i should have warned you that day,
you were just rubbing me the wrong way.
My sharp pointy claws,
connected with your face,
And i scratched it raw,
Right on that mushy place,
you screamed and dropped me,
onto the living room floor,
and then i bolted out the door,
trying to make my escape,
when i heard your voice,
"Get back here or i'll make..."
That was what i heard,
till it faded into the distance,
not another word,
after all of that resistance.
Only a little while later,
did i wish for you to cater,
once again to my every need and wish,
I wanted my tuna and fish,
in a bowl on the floor,
so i scratched on the front door.
when it opened I really wished,
that you wouldn't look that pissed,
Because where would i sleep if not the foot of the bed?
and what would i do if my steak was red?
How could my box be clean,
when you were not even to be seen?
So i sat there at your feet,
at my usual seat,
like a good little kitty,
and hoped that you had some extra tuna fishy.

April Fool's Day Poem

Quiet,
Sneaky,
Like a fox,
I shave your head,
while you're in your bed,
and steal all your socks.
Silent,
Keen,
A Prank Machine,
Slithering like a snake,
I switch out the concrete,
for the dough in the cake,
so you'll sink,
into the rink,
when you try to skate.
Quick,
Clever.
Like the rat,
That I hid inside your hat...

Happy Fool's Day Everybody!

 

Posted Apr 1, '11 at 9:47pm

Neef

Neef

86 posts

I'm on fire!
Speaking of fire...

Lava

Fire that Flows,
That Shrivels as it Grows,
Burning Heat,
That Darkens as it Glows.

.... inspiration is for armatures.

Death

Death passes and breaks,
is cold and corrupt,
Leaves blackness in its wake,
and the healthy corrupt

Conflict

Eyes convey depression,
while a smile hides her true expression.
Her mouth always trying for elation,
But her lack pupils tell of ****ation.
The truth hiding behind a mask,
and not a very good one at that.
Obvious conflict shows on her face,
when instead of a frown i see a smile in its place.

Steam Engine

Steam into fog,
sooty black,
turning cogs.
Click-clack,
of the gears,
rusted metal,
over the years.
Cra-----ack,
Breaking,
Stopping,
Making,
Popping,
Noises that fill the air,
Water seeping through the cracks,
Swelling;Hear it
when it snaps

Untitled Poems

Floating,
Gently,
on the water,
looking up at the moon,
drifting,
slowly,
away from shore,
staring,
gazing,
at the stars,
bright,
shining,
in the sky,
there they tempt me,
to join their flight,
but i don't,
Cuze if i do,
i know i wont,
come back down.

Gooey Warmth and Creamy deliciousness,
To eat with out sharing is total maliciousness,
But if i was in your place,
knowing your food attraction,
I would rub it in your face,
Just to watch your reaction.

You know, I just bored

 

Posted Apr 2, '11 at 12:50am

Neef

Neef

86 posts

All these poems are 100% original (obviously) and I would appreciate if you didn't take them with out giving credit, thanks.

 

Posted Apr 2, '11 at 12:54am

tegan190

tegan190

614 posts

Awesome poems man! keep up the good work :)

 
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