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Posted Mar 28, '11 at 4:47pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Which poem had bad flow? I want to try and fix it. :)

 

Posted Mar 28, '11 at 9:04pm

jeol

jeol

3,565 posts

Which poem had bad flow? I want to try and fix it. :)

I don't know. I didn't write them. I was just saying that writing the first thing that comes to mind is [usually] the best thing to write.

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 3:05pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Oh, I see. Thanks for the feedback! :)
I'm busy studying for a test today, so no uploads for today! I am working on a free verse one though.

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 4:05pm

jeol

jeol

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I'm busy studying for a test today, so no uploads for today! I am working on a free verse one though.

Write a poem about your test? :D

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 4:09pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

I tried that, but I got really mad and the entire poem ended up sounding really corny. Like:
Heart pounding, beating
Like a bouncing ball,
TESTS SUCK

I may have changed the ending slightly.

Also, PANDA.

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 4:48pm

jeol

jeol

3,565 posts

TESTS SUCK

I may have changed the ending slightly.

Also, PANDA.

Haha. That's hilarious. And we all know that Panda's are waay smarter than humans.

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 8:12pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,223 posts

Aw. Tacky, you went from newb to fellow poet.
~eyes shine~
I enjoy them all except for Sounds.
I have a difficult time trying not to rhyme.
It comes naturally and without it, it just doesn't feel the same.

 

Posted Mar 29, '11 at 10:38pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Thanks so much, MoonFairy! :)
And Starcutie, go for it!
Jeol, I'm glad you liked my poem. :P

 

Posted Mar 30, '11 at 5:13pm

TackyCrazyTNT

TackyCrazyTNT

1,630 posts

Anger

The tension tears the room apart,
and the silence stretches far too thin.
The spiteful, hating pairs of eyes,
Reveal the snarling beasts within.

Not sure if I should add another stanza or not. And as you can see, I'm not very creative with poem names.

 

Posted Mar 30, '11 at 5:13pm

MoonFairy

MoonFairy

3,223 posts

Poems don't need names. :D
Another stanza would add on, and it needs to bee added on to.
Get it?

 
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