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Oh, geez, writing block. Time to do what I always do...LOOK UP POEM TYPES!!! XD

Imagery? Sonnets? Couplets? I've been saying I'll do a Sonnet for a while...maybe I'll do that. :P

Just do anything Tacky, anything you've wrote has been good.

Awww, thanks, LTD.

Ideas!!! XD

There are four different kinds of Sonnets. (As researched on the Wiki)
The Italian Sonnet consists of the rhyme scheme a-b-b-a a-b-b-a c-d-e c-d-e
The Occitan Sonnet is a-b-a-b a-b-a-b c-d-c-d-c-d
The Shakespearean Sonnet is a-b-a-b c-d-c-d e-f-e-f g-g
And finally, the Spenserian Sonnet is a-b-a-b b-c-b-c c-d-c-d e-e

I think I'll do a set of poems on the Seven Deadly sins, so here they are...

Lust: Greed of a more...ahem..adult kind...
Gluttony: Excessive desire for food, or its withholding from the needy...
Greed: A "rapacious desire and pursuit of wealth, status, and power
Sloth: Lazy-ness, indifference, Failure to utilize one's talents
Wrath: Rage, hatred
Envy: Insatiable desire for immaterial goods.
Pride: Desire to be more important than others.

This will be tough, since Envy, Greed, Gluttony and Lust are a lot alike. :/

The Mirror

Her skin is as clear,
As the mirror she holds,
There isn't a smear,
On her skin, pale and cold,

She pores over the glass,
Smiling at her own face,
She thinks she has class,
But she's only a disgrace.

She'll waste away there,
Like Narcissus the vain,
Putting on airs,
In front of the pane.

For now she sits, vain, atop of a tower,
Perhaps soon she'll be turned into a flower.

Wow Tacky I never knew you had such nice poetry
I used to know better when I was younger but maybe Ill give it anothertry.

That is pretty good, but it seems like you wrote tower then tried to find a quick rhyme, using flower. It doesn't fit quite right, and I'll get back to you on what it could be.

Your comments make me feel warm and fuzzy inside.

Moon, I still haven't heard from you...I couldn't think of anything else to rhyme with flower...

Anyways, here's the one for wrath.

Smoking Bones

Smoking bones from my fiery wrath,
How I have gone down a wretched path.

What, in my future, do I see?
My anger has gotten the best of me.

Those whom I love, I've hurt beyond repair,
I've gone up the devil's stair,

The mistakes for which I must atone,
Are all I see in these smoking bones.

For now she sits, vain, atop a tower,
soon she'll lose her imagined power.

Better? That's the only word I could find rhyming with flower.

I actually really like the smoking bones one, well done!

Yeah Efan said it better.
There we go.

And Smoking bones is awesome, but you can say "stairs". Makes it make more sense.
Or,
Those whom I love, I've hurt beyond repair,
I sit at the top of the devil's stairs.


Something or another like that.

Thanks for the improvements.

about vanity or whatevr was better no offense to anyone.

Since I'm lazy, I think I'll just substitute the Fasting poem for Lust. Which probably means I should do Sloth next...

I don't know what this is. Free verse? Every line if four syllables though. :P

Chains

I could say that
The only things
that bind me down,
Are these shackles,
Incandescent,
And heavy chains
Invisible.

I could say that
I don't help you,
Because my hands
Are tied down by
Strings that cut and
Rusted gears that
I can't control.

That I'm now bogged
By a whirlpool,
That renders me
Unable to scream
Unable to think
Thoughts made by me.

But

There are no chains,
No rope, no string.
There are no gears
That control me.
No snarling gyre.
My thoughts are mine,
Rotten and crude.

If only there were
Chains, ropes and strings.
I would have a
better excuse
For being the
Pathetic thing
I am today.

Oh, nice one tacky, but 'but' doesn't have four syllables :P

I really like this stanza:

There are no chains,
No rope, no string.
There are no gears
That control me.
No snarling gyre.
My thoughts are mine,
Rotten and crude.

Oh, nice one tacky, but 'but' doesn't have four syllables :P

Never mind; I wrote a poem for the poetry contest today XD
I'll do Greed tomorrow and Envy the day after that. Then I'll have to think up of some new ideas. :P