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Posted Jul 19, '12 at 11:13am

Darktroop07

Darktroop07

668 posts

@Acmed well DT07 started the dictatorship mura just supported it and became the dictator >.>/

Change
I take one step back.
I think of my past life.
It is time for change.
~DT07

 

Posted Jul 19, '12 at 12:16pm

CheapCheep

CheapCheep

170 posts

Change
I take one step back.
I think of my past life.
It is time for change.
~DT07

I believe the middle line should be 7 sylabbles but the line has only 6. Not trying to be a critic however you may want to fix that.

 

Posted Jul 19, '12 at 12:38pm

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

CC's right. Middle line's 6. Not 7.

I just feel like I'm
Stuck in the middle with you.
Trapped in the insane.

 

Posted Jul 19, '12 at 12:54pm

Darktroop07

Darktroop07

668 posts

I believe the middle line should be 7 sylabbles but the line has only 6. Not trying to be a critic however you may want to fix that.

That's what I get for posting in multiple places at the same time Facepalm
Change
I take one step back.
I take the alternate route.
It is time for change.
Happy >.>

 

Posted Jul 19, '12 at 12:58pm

acmed

acmed

1,921 posts

Do we have to do the theme? Cuz I'm not.

Insanity laughs.
Labrats fight over the food.
The world has come to.

 

Posted Jul 20, '12 at 1:54pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Do we have to do the theme? Cuz I'm not.

The theme is for Darktroop. If anyone wants to follow it they are welcome to but I guess I'd rather they didn't if they feel resentful about it.

  Haha, bless your soul
You think you're in control
Maybe you're crazy...

 

Posted Jul 20, '12 at 2:49pm

Darktroop07

Darktroop07

668 posts

The theme is for Darktroop.

Mine mine alone >.>
Alone
Seldomly sought out.
Easily forgotten by time.
Seeing mundane life.

 

Posted Jul 21, '12 at 9:04pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

The theme is for Darktroop.

Mine mine alone >.>

Hahahaha!!

 

Posted Jul 22, '12 at 9:33pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

I should write according to the theme.

Alone.

I am all alone
please don't leave me here alone
Or I will die, lone

 

Posted Jul 22, '12 at 11:00pm

CheapCheep

CheapCheep

170 posts

Alone

None shall comfort pains
Recieved when living alone
From an empty world.

 
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