The meaning is pretty solid, to me the story seems to zone onto somebody who lives in an agricultral community, and then for some unknown reason is brought into a city; only to be disappointed by the whole greyscale blankness of it.
I really doubt anyone else sees it that way, but oh well.

In the first line, the syllable check is off (7 instead of 5), the second line is fine and in the third off by one syllable (6)

Its a good start for a first haiku, alot better than my first. :D

The meaning is pretty solid, to me the story seems to zone onto somebody who lives in an agricultral community, and then for some unknown reason is brought into a city; only to be disappointed by the whole greyscale blankness of it.
I really doubt anyone else sees it that way, but oh well.

Oh, thanks! That was a great description of the meaning. Even I haven't seen it like that.

In the first line, the syllable check is off (7 instead of 5), the second line is fine and in the third off by one syllable (6)

Oh, I thought it was off. I used a syllable counter to check the words, but I actually thought it was wrong.

Do you have any tips of counting syllables?

Its a good start for a first haiku, alot better than my first. :D

Oh wow, thank you!

Hm... I'd like if people suggested me themes for the haikus.

And once posts without haikus aren't supposed to be here, lemme see one...

A Happy Day!

Happy birthday man
may happiness always follow
your steps, through all tasks!

_

Inspired by the fact that today is the birthday of a friend of mine.

Comments, please?

Ah, and sorry if the syllable count is wrong again.

Well happy birthday to your friend!
Syllable-wise, its ok, except for the 2nd line, where you have 8 syllables instead of  7.

The cool part about poetry is that it can really be about anything. However, regarding haikus, they tend to focus more on nature. Keep that in mind, and always look around outside for inspiration.
Just a  tip, but keep up the good work!

Sry for DP but no one has posted today, so i will!
It was actually last night when i thought of this haiku, im always open to constructive criticism, dont just say 'you suck' 'cuz I already know that! :D
Pond
A lake in late June;
Its surface reflects the sky
And her azure bliss

(I tried to add some good techniques of writing poetry, like alliteration in the first line, but alas, its hard to fit stuff like that into a haiku because of the limited space.)

Something lurks nearby
A dark, sinister presence
It's a guy named Phil

Sadly it's not me.
since you almost described me.
My name isn't phil.

thank you Murasaki9 for the invitation to post here :)

You're welcome! And welcome to Haiku Land! Thank you for your contribution!

There is but one hope
and that is that this world lives
on and on for now.

What's done has been done.
There is no returning to...
Our wonderful past.

Do you have any tips of counting syllables?

I'd recommend searching the words on a dictionary site that shows the breaks in pronunciation (like dic-tion-ar-y).

Walking through the woods;
A page! "Don't look... or it take-!"
Slenderman appears.

Well, welcome back, Emperor!

TGIF, Kids
Enjoy the weekend, it's here
but, not for long, sad