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Posted Apr 19, '11 at 8:54pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Btw, Legit, its a Haiku, I can't just insert things.
I only get five syllables in the first sentence, 7 for the second
and 5 for the last. Otherwise, it isn't a Haiku

 

Posted Apr 19, '11 at 8:59pm

SupaLegit

SupaLegit

651 posts

...I know what a Haiku is, the fact remains that it was a bit confusing. I understand the format of Haikus, I have written them. At least 3 of my Haikus are on my thread.

Also, yes you can insert anything, if you use the right words, aka synonyms with a deeper, more descriptive definition. Just not everything fits, so you must shape your ideas, thus related words and/or synonyms.

 

Posted Apr 19, '11 at 9:00pm

CommanderDude7

CommanderDude7

2,408 posts

Okay Im going to try my hand at a structured poetry. Mostly I just make things in FLP so dont be hating.

I looked to the west
All I saw was grief and death
Despairing I left

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 2:13am

Endscape

Endscape

1,144 posts

......i thread about haikus yet only wat 3 are present..... have mercy......

Humanity
condemed humans be
civil?, humane?, equal?, lies
....have mercy on us....

p.s. im not religious but still....... as they say karma.. is a "B".....hmmmmm, and excuse spelling/grammatical errors... im in a rush.

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 7:24pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Wow, Endscape, you're good! I like your Haikus!
Please write more! And can you teach me to write as well as you? I have written quite a few, but I think yours are much better than mine!

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 7:52pm

SupaLegit

SupaLegit

651 posts

Well it seems as if this is becomming an General Haiku thread, and not user specified... In which case, I guess I'll post some I have made here too:

Blooming Rain

Tapping, tapping, tap.
Rain comes and goes, ceasing not,
Blooming life for you.

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Summer is Here

Just 'round the corner
Summer days have come so far.
Wake up to Summer.

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This one was more of a joke upon Tacky's request:

Rain & Donuts

Rain makes wheat grow tall,
Wheat makes sticky balls of dough,
Dough makes good donuts.

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Beaches

Walking across sand.
Waves skimming to the shore line
Then retreating back

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Night Approaches

Branches reaching out,
Grabbing the sunset's beauty;
The dark is nearing.

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 8:08pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

Wow! Good, Superlegit! You write good Haikus.
I'll post some of mine later. Please tell me what you think!

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 8:14pm

SupaLegit

SupaLegit

651 posts

Why thank you murasaki, I'm very glad you like them ;)

Joy

Joy makes all our days;
Forget all our stress and pain.
Let joy be your fault.

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 8:36pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,344 posts

That one's good too! I like your Haikus!

 

Posted Apr 20, '11 at 10:34pm

Endscape

Endscape

1,144 posts

mura, thank u for that compliment but i write on a spur of emotions.... they r my best friends when writing haikus, not all r good, but i never see any of them as being "bad" haikus neither, keep that in mind.... hmmmm wat am i feeling now hmmm..

Myself
an empty abyss
hollowed soul with a full heart
internal unrest

see, spur of emotions
take care.

 
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