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Posted Apr 23, '11 at 7:41pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

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Oh, that's funny. CommanderDude, your haikus are good. By the way, has anyone checked out the link I posted? It's haiku related. [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=weaWoXIeG_I]

 

Posted Apr 23, '11 at 8:55pm

CommanderDude7

CommanderDude7

4,745 posts

Fixing Link
Ill watch it now.

 

Posted Apr 25, '11 at 7:49pm

Maverick4

Maverick4

6,889 posts

Best example of Haikus, all in one easy to find location? The Haiku Contest! Enter, and mention you'd like feed back. Or contact recent winners for advice. Yours aren't that bad. Like you said in the OP, Practice is essential. I sucked a poetry in general, and practice has helped me get way better. (Anybody who's familiar with Little Big Box understands this) Good job, and Keep it up!

 

Posted Apr 25, '11 at 8:23pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,396 posts

Thank you, Maverick4. I'll be sure to do that.

 

Posted Apr 26, '11 at 4:57am

Endscape

Endscape

1,244 posts

the art of practice
as said "practice makes perfect"
learn, young apprentice.

 

Posted Apr 26, '11 at 5:41pm

CommanderDude7

CommanderDude7

4,745 posts

Words like knives slice my flesh
Snick and snack they cut me deep
Leaving only bone

Just a gloomy little one I thought of watching the rain.

 

Posted Apr 27, '11 at 9:03pm

KingLemon

KingLemon

617 posts

haha I practice haiku'ing on my facebook
here's some:
~Exactly!~
Paradoxical
Impossibilities are
Very Redundant

â~Chained Sins~
One by one it grows
Heavier and heavier
Ever bound to you.

â~Black Panther~
Silence stalks the night
Preying on those who dare mock
the darkness outside

that's just 3 of the 75 I current have made xD
Idk if you can see them, they should be open for everyone to see but if you want to check them out here's the link

 

Posted Apr 28, '11 at 12:42pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,396 posts

Thanks Kinglemon, I like your haiku's.

 

Posted Apr 28, '11 at 12:44pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,396 posts

Here's a haiku I just thought of:
Victory

Victory is mine
Let us them never forget that
I will always win

Mwa, ha, ha?

 

Posted Apr 28, '11 at 7:21pm

Ernie15

Ernie15

13,670 posts

Knight

Let us them never forget that


I think one of those pronouns needs to be kicked out of that line. Whether or not you choose to leave "us" or "them" in the poem depends only on whom you really feel should not forget that victory is yours.
 
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