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I need no introduction. Oh, wait, I guess that's a little late. As you may have guessed, this is the infamous Jeol's thread.

So this morning, I was on my way to the co-op I take classes at thinking about my speech, when out of the blue comes a story. About a land named Rhyme. So, in the class I made my speech in after my speech, I started to work on one of my first poems that wasn't inspired by the 'First Line Poetry' thread, a quatrain.

Rhymes of Rhyme - a quatrain.
Once upon a time,
in the land of Rhyme,
rhyming was so prime,
it sparked such a fine time.

There was a man named Pine
in the land of Rhyme
who rhymed so prime,
it made ev'rybody cry.

When the man died,
it made the country dry
for the prime of their rhymes,
and the rhymes lost their shine.

In times since then,
in the land of Rhyme,
rhyming was so bland,
no one ever rhymed again.

Yes, the non-rhyming of the last stanza was intentional. Yes.

I will post other creations and whatnot in the future.

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Redid the HTML5 thingy to work on one canvas. Can't figure out how to make a multi-color canvas though.
http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/3271/finishedj.jpg
I also made a whole webpage with HTML5/Js, still a work in progress, and if I showed you, I'd have to kill you.

jk.

I am dedicated to finishing this poem to submit to a lit mag by our co-op. I'm really bad at repeating words in poems, and it doesn't help there aren't really many synonyms...

Explorer, I

Travelling through the lands,
I will explore each deep crevice.
Everything I will take note of;
Nothing will escape my gaze.

Marching through these unmapped sands,
The desert is not quite so inviting -
I shall continue to seek out land and love,
Wandering the gentle lay of the 'scape.

On I shall move, through realms uncharted.
Though sometimes bland and unexciting,
Lands will be ever contrasting,
No matter where I may gape.

Explore with me this nature unimparted,
Let us set out to the grand vistas afar.
In the unknown, there is no dissent.
Come, escape with me to the uncharted.

Dreams

Dreams are unpredictable;
They produce hopes and fears,
The works of our imagination.
There's no way to hide
From the capricious nature of dreams.

Predictions, memories, oddities,
The mind seems to dwell on;
Some happened, some to be sung,
Some never to come to pass.

Nightmare freak of the mind,
Nowhere to hide from mr. Fear -
Only to pass with a deep breath.

Paradise for the craving mind;
Does not last, despite the soul's will.

Sporadic, uncontrollable dreams.

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Snow

Snow is descending,
White crystals blowing,
Alighting on the frozen ground.

Each tiny flake drops,
Falling aside another
Soon enough, snow
Will blanket the grass.

One, two, three, four,
Too many flakes too count.
The blizzard will soon cover
Every inch of the ground.

Pure white, graceful snow,
Slowly drifting toward the ground;
Whether close or far away,
It blankets all beneath.

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Some photos now. Took a while, one of the photos was too big to upload to IS, had to figure out how to resize it in Elements (a pain). Here you go!

http://img16.imageshack.us/img16/7849/p1090330edited1.jpg
http://img580.imageshack.us/img580/7282/p1090331edited1.jpg

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I tots expected me to find inspiration to write a bunch of poems this afternoon... Didn't happen. Blah. I'll start writing anyways.

Sunlight

Sunlight, gleaming in the eye,
Bright, blinding light, gleaming.
Nothing artificial can duplicate
The majesty of the setting sun.

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Sunlight, gleaming in the eye,
Bright, blinding light, gleaming


The part that gets me is that you repeated 'gleaming' right next to eachother. Wouldn't have been such a problem if the poem was longer, and they had been spaced out more.

Also, the photos are really cool. What effect did you use to get that blurred look to it?
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The part that gets me is that you repeated 'gleaming' right next to eachother. Wouldn't have been such a problem if the poem was longer, and they had been spaced out more.

That's what happens when I don't read my poems closely :P
Also, the photos are really cool. What effect did you use to get that blurred look to it?

The first, I just set the clarity really low, creating a dreamlike effect. The second one I used one of the effects it listed... I forget :P If you really want to know, I'll get back to you when I get on the computer that actually has Photoshop. Oh yeah, Elements was my friend.

Thanks for leaving a comment! Critiques are always welcome.
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I really like the way you described snow in "snow". I felt with the ending like it was going to rhyme. So it felt a little odd that it didn't but that might just be me.

I like the pictures of the lights. Do you have any Halloween pictures to post? I feel like those are more Christmas pictures. I dunno, maybe its just me.

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I really like the way you described snow in "snow". I felt with the ending like it was going to rhyme. So it felt a little odd that it didn't but that might just be me.

Sorry, I don't like to rhyme unless I am really trying to, like for the poetry contest. I can try to rhyme it if you'd like.
I like the pictures of the lights. Do you have any Halloween pictures to post? I feel like those are more Christmas pictures. I dunno, maybe its just me.

No, I'm not really a big fan of Halloween, never participated in anything of the sort, except for last year, and that was just with a bunch of friends. So no, sorry. My family doesn't even do Jack-O-Lanterns. And yeah, they are a bit Christmasy, probably because they are pictures of Christmas light strands.
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Do you do rhyming poetry haha? I need to get the AMW up and running again!

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Do you do rhyming poetry haha? I need to get the AMW up and running again!

Yeah, it's kinda hard to do it single-handedly :P Maybe I could help?

And to answer your question, only when participating in a contest, or I find the words to a poem super easy to rhyme. Most of the time, though, I don't take the time to think about it.
The second one I used one of the effects it listed... I forget :P If you really want to know, I'll get back to you when I get on the computer that actually has Photoshop.

The effect was called 'Pallete Knife'.
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Yeah, it's kinda hard to do it single-handedly :P Maybe I could help?


The more the merrier ^^

I'm the opposite, it's rhyme for me~~
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I dare say, I quite admire your free verses; takes some guts to do it.

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I dare say, I quite admire your free verses; takes some guts to do it.

My free verses? What do you mean by that?
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My free verses? What do you mean by that?

Poems that have no form. Free style.
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Poems that have no form. Free style.

Oh, yeah, I do that a bunch :P Sometimes I give them some kind of form, like the poem 'Dreams' on the last page was 5-4-3-2-1 lines, if you noticed. Other than that, I most commonly do quatrains (is it four lines per stanza or four stanzas per poem? I usually do both because I can never remember). I also do some haiku. Other than that, it's all freestyle, unless I decide to do a nonet, which isn't very often.
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