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THE THIRD TIME IS THE CHARM!

As some of you might already know. I'm Moon. This is my third attempt at keeping a thread alive.

It's totally gonna die,
and I might cry.
But it's worth a try :3

^ Poem of the OP. Please Help the poem prove itself wrong, and don't let it die. Donate your time and feedback to this poor thread, so it can feed it's baby poems. :>


Anyways. I'm not really sure what all this will contain, I just hope there will actually be people willing to help me become better at whatever I try to do. So... I guess that means I will be writing (duh), drawing, and other artsy-fartsy stuff I shall attempt.

So... That's all I have for the OP! I hope that all onlookers will enjoy what I do!

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Woah my post was cut off. Forgot about the whole greater or less than signs cutting posts off. Just imagine a big 'ol heart right here.

As for constructive criticism, I'm quite fatigued right now so my post would most likely be filled with blabbering and sweet nothings, so I'll just shut up and tell you to keep it up. =3

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As for constructive criticism, I'm quite fatigued right now so my post would most likely be filled with blabbering and sweet nothings, so I'll just shut up and tell you to keep it up. =3

Aw, thank you darling~

It is hot outside
But I am frozen.
There is nothing left
to keep me goin.

I am still walking around
And I still seem the same
But on the inside
There isn't a single flame.

I don't make a sound
Cause my heart doesn't beat.
I'm just waiting for someone
To help make me complete.

It's freezing in here
As cold as ice.
I'm waiting for my heart to melt.
But it won't,
Cause I won't make the same mistake twice.

You taught me
That even if something is great,
It will leave just like you did.
Cause it is my fate.

It was great until you went.
You just left me there alone
I will never forget what you did.
So now, I am fine on my own.

I don't need to feel like that again.
It couldn't possibly be good for any condition.
All the times that my heart skipped a few beats.
Boy, you played me like a musician.

So I don't need
A warm heart anymore.
Cause dealing with people
Became such a chore.

I will embrace the cold.
With open arms.
As you once did for me,
With all of your supposed 'love' and charms.

Yet there is still some hope left inside of me
That maybe one day,
Someone will come along,
And my world might not be so grey.
_____

I wish you guys could understand just how much I regret writing stuff like this, but it was a really good outlet for me. So as much as it pains me to put it in my archive, I do think it is important for me to be able and remember bits and pieces of that phase of my life. However stupid that phase may be.
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I do believe this was a winning piece in the poetry contest about... stealth? or ninjas or something. Whatevs

You won't see them coming.
You won't hear them run.
You won't see them hiding.
Cause if you do your life is done.

Stealth is their name
Killing is their game.
If you are who they are after,
Your cries will die in my laughter.

Because I tell them who to kill.
I send them after you.
I am the boss of them all.
I am the master of the skill.

They are my ninjas.
And they are hiding in plain sight.
They will come after you.
Be it day or night.

So when you see a flash of black.
You might have a shuriken in your back.
Or when you hear my call
Onto your knees, you will fall.

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The cliches were delightful, hahahaha.

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Sitting on the oceans shore,
Wondering about it is never a bore.
Will it be calm,
With repetitive waves?
Or will it storm ,
Because it is in a rage?

I go out to the ocean for a swim
Even though it is only on the rim.
And as I try to take a look,
To see if the creatures are like what's in the book,
A get a really big surprise,
OMFG I GOT SALT IN MY EYES!

I turn around to head to back to land.
So I can lie down on the warm, soft, sand.
But then I feel something nibbling on my back.
I flip over,
See a fish,
WTF I'M NOT A SNACK!

I finally reached my destination,
And my short little swim left me in frustration
But I think back on why I was swimming
I realize that it was because my questions were brimming.
I won't blame the water for the time that I had
It was my own curiosity that made me mad.

The Ocean is just a place
Where all sorts of things live
It has so much space
And there is so much that it gives.
_____

Not even going to bother editing the small things that need fixing here. Just bear with me, I am really starting to hate this old work forgive me forgive me

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The wind is strong,
The breeze is sincere,
All throughout life,
We hold our air dear.
We breathe it in,
We breathe it out,
Without air we couldn't talk,
Without air we couldn't shout.

Air makes up you,
Air makes up me,
And we thank it,
By cutting down the trees.
We are killing it,
While it lets us live,
Now if you think that is fair,
You must not know how we could give.

We should recycle,
As a token of our thanks,
So life can go on,
As we give what we take.
Air is sweet,
Air is kind.
It lets our boats sail,
It's what gives life to your mind.

So next time time you take a smoke,
Or next time you throw away plastic,
Remember that you are giving life,
That last one was sarcastic. ;P
Let's keep our grass green,
Let's keep our oceans blue,
Let's keep the air clean,
Because if not,
It will eventually kill you.

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Not even going to bother editing the small things that need fixing here. Just bear with me, I am really starting to hate this old work forgive me forgive me


No way, that one was funny!

Because if not,
It will eventually kill you.


If people wanna know what will happen in the end, they only need to look at Venus :P

Is this last one also an archive?
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No way, that one was funny!

I do remember writing that one and it was quite silly, but thank you darling.


Is this last one also an archive?

oui.
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I think that this is actually the last of all of my old stuff now. Dang.

I'll scroll through my old thread tomorrow and compare it to this one just to make sure that I got everything, but if that is the case then this thread may die a bit. I know I don't do a whole lot of new material, but I will definitely try a bit harder now.

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Aha! Found something old

Keep dreaming,
They all say.
And one day it will come true.
But they never mention,
What you will have to do.

Maybe they don't know,
But at the least they could try.
Instead of leaving you,
Stranded, to die.

Not a hint or a clue.
There is simply
Nothing you can do.

They tell you to dream,
Of impossible things.
Shoot for the moon,
You'll land with the stars.

But they won't tell you,
Just how far you have to go.
They send you on a raft,
Made from the hearts bliss.

That's what they think,
As they send you on your way.
Nothing to be afraid of,
Love will make sure you're okay.

Then you run into a storm,
And it changes very fast.
Turns into a horrid form,
Your raft will not last.
Love is overcome,
By what the world calls hate.
You jump from your raft,
You can't wait for it to abate.

_____

It may not be great, but again I'm open for edits on this. I may start scanning through my old stuff and finding what is worthy to be edited and then my "new" stuff will just be.... upgraded old stuff. Yeah.

Well for the next 2 weeks I will try my best to stay semi-active, but I will be extremely busy so forgive me if I drop off the grid.

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Ah I've found some more old stuff

Laced with poison,
Is this tea.
To give to my love,
Who's as sweet as can be.

You might think I'm crazy,
But everyone sees.
I believe that I am,
Most definitely.

The voices in my brain,
Talking all the time,
No two are the same.
Everyday, more I find.

They tell me to do things,
Sometimes things violent.
No matter the pain it brings,
They'll never stay silent.

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Chocolate birds,
And gum drop trees.
Mint flavored grass,
Candyland dreams.

Cars of sugar,
Houses of cane.
Roads of gingerbread,
Nothing here is plain.

What is this?
It's colored a shade of green.
This mysterious thing,
I'll call it a bean!

Upon a taste,
Not sweet like the rest,
A peculiar flavor,
It's not really the best.

But I'll keep it anyways.
I'll add it to my things.
Things that aren't normal,
Inside my candyland dreams.
_____

I keep finding old (but ****ty) stuff in my old thread. Sigh.

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Once more, something old

Spinning on the edge of the glass
Not caring if I fall,
Just how long will this last?

Dancing around and around again
Strange rhythm and beat
Keeping time within

Jumping up
And falling down
The time spent is time enough

So I spin towards the edge of the glass
I'm happy that what it was
Had time to last

I dance in the air as I fall down
Spinning and twirling
Around and around

Counting the seconds that I have
I go through every memory
Mad, sad, and glad.

Many times my heart did break
Crushed my soul
But it was never too late

I didn't give up, I tried again
Found that same strange rhythm
Keeping time within

And now I leave with a grin
No matter what could've been.

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Many times my heart did break
Crushed my soul
But it was never too late

I didn't give up, I tried again
Found that same strange rhythm
Keeping time within

And now I leave with a grin
No matter what could've been.


My feels are so touched it needs ice cream. :'(
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My feels are so touched it needs ice cream. :'(

Chocolate is best for feels
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