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Posted Apr 26, '12 at 3:38pm

Roccess

Roccess

176 posts

It's of all the odd and scary things in life. Again, by no means is it happy. It is named off the Roman god Nemisis, Goddess of misfortune. Also mentioned in the story: Janus, god of buildings, the Fates, who decide how long someone lives, how healthy and rich they'll be, etc., and Fortuna, goddess of Luck. (Fact: Janitor came from the god Janus, god of buildings, if you see, Fortune came from Fortuna, Fate coming from the Fates, and the meaning of Nemisis also came from the telling of these gods. True story)

Nemisis

A silence.
A river.
An arrow being pulled out of a quiver.
A fire.
Out of the reach of water.
The scene is pure slaughter.
The fire burning the woods;
Souls drowning in the stream.
Hell, it seems?
The bow releases.
From a perspective, it looks like a dart.
That perspective is head-on; it reaches my heart.
The souls drowning and burning.
The statues of Janus and Fortuna crashing.
The boundaries of the city are ashing.
Back to I.
Heart with two cracks.
By love and by feeling of an axe.
"Fortuna, Fortuna.."
"Fates, mine?"
There were nothing but signs.
The arrow I withdrew.
Not caring about pain.
I could by no means be sane.
I swim the river.
To Nemisis.
Where my last revenge trget is.

 

Posted Apr 26, '12 at 6:30pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,342 posts

Here are the results of this last contest.
Format:Haiku
Theme:Cats

Third Place - MagicTales
I have a kitty
Rainbows come out of its tail
I called him Nyan

Even though you are third place you poem distinguishes itself from the others in that it makes no use of colloquialisms. Your strange but colorful use of one word imagery is very tasteful. Good job!

Second Place - Rocess
Kitty
The cat is little,
Playing with a ball of yarn,
It's cute and furry.

It has yellow eyes,
It has gray fur and black paws,
But the tail is white.

He can climb rocks, trees,
He can catch squirrels, rabbit, mice,
Can here prey from far.

He is muscular,
He has good agility,
And very smart :D

Despite the irregularity in your usage of pronouns and a few grammatical errors your haiku quadruple is well organized. It starts by enduring the reader to cats. Next, it describes what a cat might look like. Next, it tells what a cat can do. And lastly, it states a cat's strong points. Good job!

First Place - Schmiddy1234
Cats
Cool little creatures
Running, pouncing, gobbling.
Furry lil' caress.

Congratulations on winning the contest. Your use of alliteration, assonance and consonance is very charming. Good job.
Reward for first place: A Good Warm Feeling (Given by and ONLY by Murasaki9)

 

Posted Apr 26, '12 at 11:11pm

MagicTales

MagicTales

5 posts

Thanks a lot for the comment and third place, murasaki!
And congrats on winning, schmid :P

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 12:25am

Homework

Homework

15 posts

Hi Scmiddy its Homework. Oh and whit is the prize?

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 12:43am

JeffK3

JeffK3

292 posts

This I poem by JEffK3

I like chiken
Yes I do!
It's not turkey
which tastes like poo!

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 1:33am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

887 posts

Hi Scmiddy its Homework. Oh and whit is the prize?

As of now the prize is a warm feeling from murasaki ;)

Thanks a lot for the comment and third place, murasaki!
And congrats on winning, schmid :P

Thanks MagicTales! And congratz on getting third!

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 8:49am

MetalHeart

MetalHeart

214 posts

Ok this is weird
I thought the prize will be a merit !

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 9:56am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

887 posts

Ok this is weird
I thought the prize will be a merit !

lol if more ppl come and we get more popular it WILL be one ;)

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 3:30pm

Roccess

Roccess

176 posts

DRAT! Second! Schmid, I challenge you to a one-on-one poem on cats. Any cat poem, no specific category. You bit me from behind with the Haiku.
(I'm not really mad xD And you don't have to join, I just thought it would be cool and I'm dying to get that poem out finally.)

 

Posted Apr 27, '12 at 8:09pm

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,342 posts

Thanks a lot for the comment and third place, murasaki!

You're welcome!

Ok this is weird
I thought the prize will be a merit !

Are you serious?? Absolutely not. I'm the judge.