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Posted May 1, '12 at 10:59am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

1,113 posts

Cool Beans! People are entering!

MY ENTRY:
Da wolves sneak
For it is the prey peak.
They hunt and defend
But a message they must send,
Is that we live east,
and we are BEAST!


Ok, crap poem, but i'm not good at doublets.. so yeah ^^

 

Posted May 3, '12 at 11:15am

ExitPath97

ExitPath97

46 posts

what is a doublet?can somone tell me?

 

Posted May 3, '12 at 3:34pm

Roccess

Roccess

247 posts

what is a doublet?can somone tell me?


A new rhyme every two lines.
 

Posted May 7, '12 at 1:26am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

1,113 posts

Hello? We have like three entries and the deadline is tuesday... this really got old- fast... ;O SUBMIT PEOPLE!

 

Posted May 7, '12 at 2:44am

SenorCactus

SenorCactus

22 posts

My Haiku

I'm bad at Haiku
They need lots of syllables
refrigerator

 

Posted May 7, '12 at 3:54pm

Roccess

Roccess

247 posts

***Not my entry***

The Bridge of the Over

A bolt of energy,
A breeze from the sea.
A breath as dark as shadows,
A home that everybody knows.
A garden endless,
A vow that a happy one said.
A soldeir battle hardened,
A metal worker that will mend.
A wine that will make you dreary,
A walker, never weary.
A one happy as the sun,
A hunter, a lonely one.
One smart as clouds above,
One who only believes in love.

Okay another poem on Olympia. Every line represents a God or Goddess, in no particular order. From the top, these are the ones written about:

Zeus, Lord of Skies
Poseidon, Lord of Seas and Earthquakes
Hades, Lord of the Underworld
Hestia, Lady of Hearth
Demeter, Lady of Harvest
Hera, Lady of Marriage
Ares, Lord of War
Hephaestus, Lord of Fire
Dionysus, Lord of Wine and Grapes,
Hermes, Lord of Travellers
Apollo, Lord of the Sun
Artemis, Lady of the Hunt
Athena, Lady of War and Wisdom
Aphrodite, Lady of Love

 

Posted May 9, '12 at 5:51pm

Roccess

Roccess

247 posts

Deadline was yesterday. Is anyone judging?

 

Posted May 10, '12 at 12:51am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

1,113 posts

Deadline was yesterday. Is anyone judging?


Murasaki is the judge... she is probably just busy or forgot. Let me go get her ;)
 

Posted May 10, '12 at 12:55am

Schmiddy1234

Schmiddy1234

1,113 posts

Okay guys, that was a really lame turn out... only three entries o.O But as i always do, here they are Murasaki:

Jazmoon
Howls by the wind
Run, canter, slant gaze to fall,
Fur glazed, swept by chilling call.

Roccess
Arctic Wolves
Look, in the snow,
It's an Arctic Wolf you know.
Don't see it, not abnormal,
It's as white as you should be oral.
The darkest it gets is grey,
But eyes blue to black they say.
In a white wonderland,
They look insignificantly bland.
It helps them escape their enemies,
But it's the cold that keeps them away from fleas.

Schmiddy1234
Da wolves sneak
For it is the prey peak.
They hunt and defend
But a message they must send,
Is that we live east,
and we are BEAST!


Yay we all got top 3 :)

 

Posted May 10, '12 at 10:48am

murasaki9

murasaki9

1,396 posts

Here are the results of this contest
Format: Doublets
Theme: Wolves


Third Place - Roccess
Arctic Wolves
Look, in the snow,
It's an Arctic Wolf you know.
Don't see it, not abnormal,
It's as white as you should be oral.
The darkest it gets is grey,
But eyes blue to black they say.
In a white wonderland,
They look insignificantly bland.
It helps them escape their enemies,
But it's the cold that keeps them away from fleas.

Not to steal your thunder or anything but this poem is somewhat colloquial. The construction is clumsy at times but the alliteration is beautiful. You make third place for your description, rhyming and alliteration. Keep trying!

Second Place - Schmiddy1234
Da wolves sneak
For it is the prey peak.
They hunt and defend
But a message they must send,
Is that we live east,
and we are BEAST!

Second place for thee, Schmiddy, my friend. Your rhyming is perfect and your alliteration is a subtle touch to such a casual poem. You grab second place for this work of art that seems somewhat hurried. Good work!

First Place - Jazmoon
Howls by the wind
Run, canter, slant gaze to fall,
Fur glazed, swept by chilling call.

Congratulations, Jazmoon!! You are the winner of this round. Your alliteration and assonance is cleverly integrated. I also noted a touch of consonance with the two words 'gaze' and 'glazed'. Your entry deserves first place for its fine wording and concision. Good work! Keep it up!