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Twiction Contest -- The Greatest Story Ever Told (page 11, Due September 9)

Posted Aug 4, '12 at 8:20pm

killersup10

killersup10

1,789 posts

Well that sucks.Killersup was hoping that this contest would be going for a while longer.Tis a sad day indeed.

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 5:10pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

2,082 posts

No, i just became busy at the same time. I adopted the master sleep schedule wherein you just take naps so you both spend 10 otherwise productive hours sleeping and are always tired. So I'm not going to be artful or write a judging in limericks or anything fun like that.

You fail. You all fail. Cen wins I guess for being on topic at all. But I won't hold it against him; he's eligible to win next round because it's a no contest Everyone loses.

BUT NOT EVERYTHING IS SORROW AND DEFEAT! We have the next theme.

We're going to try technical constraints again in a little bit. For now, we're doing more of our feel good best work, genres... sort of. This theme is more a trope than a genre. But oh, it's much more than a trope. It's my favorite trope. It's a trope that characterizes much of western literature and indeed the human condition. It is the story of becoming and being, of self discovery, of the meaning of life. It is not merely the greatest story ever told, but it is, in a way, the only story ever told, in millions of different ways since the dawn of humanity.

The Hero's Journey is the theme. So whatever that means to you, 140 or fewer characters by 14th of August.

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 10:25pm

aknerd

aknerd

1,276 posts

Hey, I used a thesaurus and stuff! By middle school rules, that means I deserve at least a B-. And I mean, really, so what if my palindrome didn't use proper grammar, syntax, or, well, verbs? Stupid verbs. And the letter H. What is up with that? Why is h so unidirectional? Stupid H.

Also, protip: try taking eight consecutive one hour naps every 16 hours.

 

Posted Aug 5, '12 at 11:34pm

killersup10

killersup10

1,789 posts

His unholy book by his side, the man set off into a unknown hell that will forever change him. With his poetry book in hand he will prevail.

yeah......

 

Posted Aug 7, '12 at 6:11pm

Salvidian

Salvidian

3,950 posts

The gallant knight donned his fantastical sheath and set out to dominate his to-be forsaken opponents. He'd not known the journey ahead...

139 characters. :D

 

Posted Aug 9, '12 at 4:12pm

Cenere

Cenere

12,941 posts

Knight

I wrote about this story telling method once. I don't recall it going very well. Perhaps because the entire form annoys me a little with its happy-go-lucky plot outline. Sure, it's the outline of many big adventures and stories, but it is too easy of a play on the well known in my opinion.
Oh well.

He had come from a humble home, now facing the dragon to win a princess. But adventure was not his thing. He threw down his sword and left.

Not the most optimal way I could have told that story, but it will have to do for now.

 

Posted Aug 9, '12 at 10:27pm

killersup10

killersup10

1,789 posts

He had come from a humble home, now facing the dragon to win a princess. But adventure was not his thing. He threw down his sword and left.

That was really simply worded,but......really well written.Quite strange indeed 0.o

 

Posted Aug 10, '12 at 2:34pm

aknerd

aknerd

1,276 posts

Really, you were asking for this (though probably not):

Born in the throes of great sorrow, he now lives on in tacky billboards. He was too much, too much for one. We eat our heros made to order.

Get it? (And yes, that is how you spell the plural of that kind of hero, to save you the effort of checking)

 

Posted Aug 11, '12 at 7:04pm

flip_pride

flip_pride

20 posts

"I hope I'm not late for work...", was the last thing he had said that morning. Now he's in a giant pig demon's stomach saving the world...

 

Posted Aug 15, '12 at 4:29pm

Xzeno

Xzeno

2,082 posts

Not sure if lack of interest in theme... or if judge missing killed contest.

The Dead Mentor Award goes to: Killersup! Killer entry, bro! His unholy book by his side, the man set off into a unknown hell that will forever change him. With his poetry book in hand he will prevail.

Oh man, an unholy book? This isn't very heroic. However, this entry almost nails word for word one of the core concepts of the hero's journey. The hero's undertaking effects some sort of internal change, which is the "point" of the story, with the external events merely being the method of delivery. I liked this entry because it doesn't take "hero" too literally, mixing in darker images for a shockingly original take on- wait, poetry book!? This is just Dante's Inferno with some of the names changed, isn't it? Oh Ksup, trying to pull a fast one on us.

The Ragequit Award goes to Cenere! After *****ing and moaning about the topic, Cen came out with this: He had come from a humble home, now facing the dragon to win a princess. But adventure was not his thing. He threw down his sword and left.

Does this look like the hero's journey to you?
...
Yep, me too. It is. It's just the hero's journey. Atypical plotline, with a tinge of irony, but the core of the story isn't denying to trope. Humble average person rises to a great task (note that this entry most strongly represents the "hero goes to war" version) and has some salient moment of self-discovery. This entry is actually the best example of a simple, straight forward hero's journey. So HA!

Anyway, the reason Cenere does well in these things is because he knows how to show, not tell. He was conveying a simple concept, but he did it by showing the crucial, defining moment of internal transformation our hero had, which isn't easy. By using action instead of exposition at the crucial moment, Cenere made something that can be called readable in a tradition sense. The rest of you should look into showing and not telling too much.

Our advanced story tellers will note that Cenere TOTALLY TOLD about the dragon instead of really showing it. That was a-ok here though, because it brings the focus on the moment of the story that is shown, i.e. the "point." Anyway...

The Hero of the Lore Award goes too...
*looks in envelope*

Really? Really? *sighs* fine. Whatever. Just give him his stupid gold medal already. He can have it. The winner was... AKNERD! YEAH! YOU GO MAN! IT SHOULD FEEL GOOD AFTER ALL THIS! Especially since you probably deserved it last round, I just literally didn't read your entry. Oh well, no one ever claimed this contest was well-run.

So yeah: Born in the throes of great sorrow, he now lives on in tacky billboards. He was too much, too much for one. We eat our heros made to order. As always, Aknerd makes a clever pun and does something cute for the round. Now, a great man once said that you don't win by doing clever and cute things. You instead win by... having a large, well composed army. The analogy kinda breaks down here, but the point is doing normal things right is the most consistent way to win.

But man, I thought Aknerd's was hilarious. Since second place was also a kind of jokey entry, I gave first to the one I thought was cuter and more clever.

So that wraps up this round. Which brings us to the next theme, which is... oh geez, what is it? Well when in doubt, just go with Natu -oh we already did that. Oh man. I really didn't think this through. You know what? Screw it. Love. We're doing love. Whatever. That's a good theme. Because really, Love and Death. What else is there? I would do Love and Death, but I've already seen The Notebook and don't want a bunch of first person widower whining about how great she was. So the theme is Love. Due the whenever you get around to it or August 22nd. Whichever comes first.

 
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