REVIVAL
What has a thousand fingers yet no hands.
Stretches its tendrils from earth to sky.
And bares its presence longer than you or I in the passage of time.
Trees?
[quote=Salvidian]So yeah. This morning I woke up and brushed all the nasty, crusty filth from my eyes and collapsed into my bathtub. I wasn't drunk or anything, I was just a little tired.Now, unfortunately, I had a freaking bump on my noggin the size of New Jersey. It felt like I was getting slapped repeatedly. But no, this wasn't any ordinary slap. This was a slap from god**** Jesus telling me to get up and shower. So I fumbled around with whatever I could grab, knowing not of what the hell I was touching. I managed to dump shampoo all over my legs and fall over for the second time, all before the water was even on. I finally found the knob and twisted it harder than God twists the solar system. Before I could come to even the tiniest realization, I had lava pouring all over my body. I quickly turned something and found a very unpleasant feeling. I don't know what because at that point I slipped again and couldn't keep my conscious together anymore.[/quote]
I liked this, would be a nice part of a story for a character's personal thoughts.
One thing..the simile with god twisting the universe seems very out of place..mostly due to the fact that it is such an extreme and powerful metaphor..and is the only simile with such strength. Mixed with the fact that the simile is for such a mundane tax..it doesn't sit right.
[quote=HahiHa]A world of night, light and dark,
Black and grey, but not only:
Shadows dancing wildly about,
Nuances telling epic stories
Of skirmishes in the outside world.
Colours you say? Hah. Too easy;
A master he who goes without.
Reading not the specks of light
But inbetween deciphers truth.
Focussing on interactions,
Dark aesthetics, echoes of light.
He wanders the world with eyes closed,
Seeing its beauty as noone else.[/quote]
A free poem, eh? I can tell..it has the sort of sporadic and excitable feel flow to it.
In my opinion..a free poem is a great choice for the subject. The lack of uniformity gives a heightened sense of awareness with the subject of blinded.
A random thing..the colon doesn't seem to fit =p
[quote=SunMoon]Whatever blurb she said[/quote]
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[quote=Lolpopop111[Can I join? Im probably too late and in a wacky time zone but if i still can i'd love to join! Im a passionate poet and drawer...
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