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This is one of my first forums I don't exactly know what I'm doing xD But this is just a little place to put down your thoughts and ideas, and have others possibly give advice, ideas, or improve your poetry (:
So I am going to put one of mine first xD it's an experimental poem, so that's why the form is all weird xD
My mind,
Ideas come flooding in,
They are
s
c
a
tt
e
r
e
d
or on better days
they are
NeatAndTidy
When my mind goes
blank
The ocean hardly reaches the
b a n k
warmer than the sun
as it sits
boiling,
simmering,
for
i
d
e
a
s
Other days
the ocean roars
Higher
then any wall I have
as a block.
Crashing down,
drowning me in
icy cold water,
ideas
this way
and
t
h
a
t
w
a
y
hard to type
f a s t
enough to keep up the pa c e
The ocean is so
crystal clear
I could see
every
idea imaginable
at the bottom.
with such depth
itâs so hard
to keep
treading
to keep
on
going
I fail
to reach the
bottom.
I swim back up,
remembering what
itâs like to
feel again,
as the water heats
up
and turns
m u r k y
once
again
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Just an fyi, given that nature of this part of the forums, people make their own threads to place their work..where they then receive criticisms/remarks on them
So..you can keep this thread to yourself
In regards to your first yet, I haven't had the chance to read it and won't for a bit, but glancing over it I will say that the style is definitely interesting. Will have to see if it works in your favor when I get back and get a chance to really look at it =p
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