Forums → Art, Music, and Writing → Periodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)

I liked the judging this time. It's better to include positives and negatives. I loves the detail you put into it, and quoting parts of the entries was fantastic. You could still try and exhaust every aspect of each poem though. It sounds hard, but by doing so the writer will completely know what he or she did right and what he or she did wrong. In all respect, I wouldn't be surprised if you read Xzeno's huge post on acceptable critiquing in the AMW forum, which is something that a lot of people could learn from. It solved my biggest issue with your judging, which was nearly all positives. I know you were trying to be nice, but, frankly, it's nicer if you give feedback on what could be improved upon! All in all, much better. Keep it up!

I've seen wolf1991 judge in the past and I'm all for it. However, I don't want to see a huge cycle of judges. I'm more comfortable with a cycle of 3 judges, and after 3 rounds for each judge the cycle would switch to 3 other judges and recursion. I haven't been able to make any submissions yet, but I'm writing one for the current topic.

Even though I'm not going to be judging this next round, I'm going to at least start things off by choosing The Solar System as the next theme and setting the deadline to Wednesday, August 8 unless there are any objections...

I'm all for Wolfie taking this one.

Sal, who all do you think should take it, if only 3?

Skeleton, that was marvelous. Learning more already

I guess I'll contact the others. Nicho, Tacky, Wolf, Oreo and moi. We'll figure something or another out, unless Sal has a better idea?

Sadly I think Tacky is too busy living, and I dunno if Nicho is alive :< But we shall sort this!

I'm indifferent on who judges. You have Nicho, Tacky, Wolf, Oreo, and, er, you as referred to as "moi" listed. Nichodemus has been using his phone to visit the forums so I don't think he'd be willing to make huge, detailed reviews. I haven't seen Tacky much, and I hardly know her whatsoever. Couldn't really say. Wolf is up, so that's 1 for sure. I think Orion said he'd be willing to judge, but, probably because of me, I solemn know what he's talking about. Probably 2 there. With you, that makes 3, so 1 full cycle is achievable.

I don't know, maybe after each of you judges 3 times, we could see if Nicho and Tacky are up for judging, and Skele could fill up that last spot. I think it would be better if the cycles were made up of smaller groups, so people could have longer breaks.

I guess it was all just a matter of knowing what I was supposed to do as a judge... now that I know how to do it properly, I'll be glad to step in if and when I'm needed. =)

HOW IN THE HECK DID I GET 3RD PLACE! THAT WAS THE WORST POEM I HAD EVER WRITTEN!!

I agree that the number of judges should be limitted to 3-4, furthermore I suggest a two round rotation instead. Three rounds is simply too long in my mind, especially since I will be returning to university in Septemeber, as such two rounds is far more managable.

Nonsense, I typed out my literature essay on my phone before; I just dot feel like doing it for now.

Anyway yes, good job Skele.

solar system... ima gonna sit this one out. cant think of any un-cliched material to write about

We've no restraints on
The space-time continuum,
And yet we sit here,
Limited, for now, by Mars.
And Jupiter. And ourselves.

skrew, im gonna rip off/refrence a bunch of far more talented people than me on this

in order from our sun
The one who warms a summer's day,
for which was compare
to a lady fair ,
Is the planet mercury
who sends letters to roman gods.

Next is paralandra
also known as Venus.
this planet's hot
and for that's not
because it's name is Aphrodite.
mostly its just because the temp is o're 800.

and third is planet earth
Silent, and mostly harmless.
that's really all that can be said
about something who's inhabitants
want her Dead
by all obvious appearance.

next in line is Bloody Mars
the taking place of Rekal.
the movie wasn't bad, but i swear i will never get that three tit chick out of my head as long as ever i may live.

Moving on is massive Jupiter.
the writhing gaseous mass.
it puts out more than it gets
of heat and light from old Apollo.

sixth we find Saturn.
rings with rime encrusted.
though it's still unsure as to what
has frozen in their trusses.

next in line is Uranus
and really all that i can say
is that it gets in the way
cuz i want to speak of Neptune.

deity of the sea, with trident firm in hand.
Neptune is a bluish form
that sits tween'st seven and pluto.

And last is pseudo planet pluto
a glory for alliterations.
one thing that can be said about it
is that it can be discerned.
that on its shores you are,
when e're you feel it's distinctive bark
and then you know
that "we on pluto!"

i did it for humor and less for beuty. cudos to those who get all the refrences and i hope i chart this time. i expect i'll be the only one to use this tongue in cheek method, but then mine refrences so much that it's no longer origonal, and it's not particularly well written. oh well i still hope i win.

And Waluigi returns, if maybe for a brief time.

A massive ball of flaming gas
lights the black abyss.
A centerpiece, quite hard to miss,
even in one quick pass.

Around it hurdle lumps of rock,
circling without end.
Their paths, a never-ending trend,
with no place for to dock.

This 'solar system' of planets and sun,
one great agglomeration,
I dare say, with trepidation
has an importance of next to none.

For these giants are just dust
in this great universe,
And so myself I most coerce
that living life is not a bust.

The rhymes got worse at the end. I guess that's what I get for being off poetry writing for all of several months.

Round closes tonight at 11:59pm EST. Judging will be later this week.

Its me again. the great thinker. what shall i write about today? hmmm... i know! how about the solar system! great idea TopRank_, why thank you TopRank_. well anyway, here goes

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a gauntlet of diamonds.
rubies, emeralds, sapphire.
in a darkness. weightless.
black. like a ravens beak
giants that defy description.
round. glowing. eternal.
are they gods? fickle gods.
composed of dust, gas, and fire.
they are not gods.
they are but mere disciples.
the true master. is far more frightening.
beautiful. a raging inferno. without the rage.
a topaz. far larger than the would be gods.
far more powerful. an intensity beyond mortal description.
is it a god? among the others. the gentle, incredible giants. yes.
this fire. a globe of raw energy in its purest form. the master. the god.
the god is benevolent to those partway between far and near.
the god is spiteful to those nearest.
and the god is uninvolved with the ones furthest.
is anything else? is the god all encompassing? is this heaven? no.
for the god among giants.

is a speck.

Gah...judge please.......

Gah...judge please.......