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Periodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)

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Posted Sep 13, '08 at 1:06pm

DragonMistress

DragonMistress

1,141 posts

Knight

Yup, submissions are now closed! AND I'm going to post this next week's theme... I'm going with a theme again for now, and we'll see how things progress.

I know it's a little late, but now that we've all gotten back into the swing of things, the theme will be school! I've seen a lot of great poetry about this in the past, and I'm sure you can all come up with something great this week. Any style, any rhyme scheme, etc... and since it's such a broad topic, you can feel free to be as creative as you'd like. I'm going to judge the submissions now, so I'll be posting here shortly!

 

Posted Sep 13, '08 at 1:32pm

DragonMistress

DragonMistress

1,141 posts

Knight

And for the winners:

First Place: IqAndreas!
To be honest, your poem made me cry... you win! Haha.

For this week, we have a TIE for second place:

Shayneii and Shark7996

Shayneii, I loved the story! It was wonderful and really well thought out.

Shark... what can I say, that was hilarious! I loved the rhyme, meter, and really everything about it.

Everyone did a magnificent job these last two weeks, I really had my hands full with this one. Keep up the great work!!

 

Posted Sep 13, '08 at 1:38pm

mvpguy22

mvpguy22

331 posts

Congratuations to all the winners, all of your poems were excellently written.

School, huh? I guess I'm going to have to put my thinking cap on. Hmmmmmm.....

 

Posted Sep 13, '08 at 6:54pm

mentorso123

mentorso123

380 posts

I can't rhyme, so this may not be that good

 

Posted Sep 13, '08 at 7:01pm

mentorso123

mentorso123

380 posts

School
mentorso123

Time
on a clock
on a phone
on a watch

watch the time

teacher
talks
explains
asks

watch the teacher

student
bothers
asks
explains
nope,
not me
i don't bother
to bother
during class

watch out

there's no time like lunch time
line
out the door
you know what,
I may just wait outside
okay

watch the clock
and the line

go back
buy food
eat food
talk
walk
talk

watch the time
and your step

class
once more
resume
resume
any other big words?
okay,
it's english class
i wont ask.

watch the time
and the teacher

class ends
teacher talks
"Time to go"
teacher glares
teacher stares

watch the time
and for the bus
even though it's not
even 2 o clock

school
is random
annoying
boring
interesting
painful
tearful

and yes

even

fun

 

Posted Sep 13, '08 at 7:15pm

Shark7996

Shark7996

402 posts

Aww...man...D: I SOOOO thought I'd win this one! I WILL PWN THIS WEEK!!!

 

Posted Sep 14, '08 at 2:01am

kingryan

kingryan

4,440 posts

To be honest, your poem made me cry.


Hmm...I think I should get this girl I know to judge then....my poems always make her cry...

Hmmm...School eh?...

I might do one tomorrow after school...and look for elements then!

KingRyan
 

Posted Sep 14, '08 at 10:50am

cycloolephin

cycloolephin

80 posts

I don't think I'll even try any more poems. I just have a very thick mind.

 

Posted Sep 14, '08 at 7:36pm

adrecka_33

adrecka_33

399 posts

School, a sanctuary or a cell?


She walks down the hall, eyes open wide
Moving her head side to side
Watching, waiting, hoping in vain
Then as expected, in a flash
A hand pushed her books form her hands
They tumble to the floor, and land with a thump
They laughter behind her, goes louder each day
But her mind blocks it out and
Her thoughts pull her away
Everyday is the same, no different, no change
The only think that keeps her, from going insane
Is the dream she hides away, unseen
The bullies walk away, moving on to other games
A single tear runs down her cheek
Her thoughts swirl inside her head
Why me, not them? Why do they cause me such dread?
She lets her thoughts change to
The things she must do that day
She walks into class, and sees the bullies snicker
Something inside her breaks
The only thing that was keeping her at bay
She raises her fist and say "hay, don't just sit there
Lets play" the mock in her voice was clearly heard
And the others were silence by the change in her
Then one got up and laughed an said
"You don't have a chance"
The girl just smiled, she saw the fear in the other girls eyes
The same thing that she used to see,
When she looked in the mirror everyday.
Suddenly the teacher came,
She screeched, yelled, scream
The girls both stopped, dropped the evil gaze
And both walked away.
Nothing happened on that day
That would seem to change anything
But sense that day, she never again
Was bothered by them
See its not that she was stronger, or that she was even taller
It was that she had courage, to stand up and fight
Most bullies at school want an easy victim
But if you show them you're mind is strong, and your not afraid
Then they wont bother, to bug you every day
Remember these words, keep them in mind
Next time you hear nasty words from a peer.


Ok, thats mine, sorry if you find that it doesnt apply. Its just my thoughts in poem form.... And sorry this is the real one not messed up, this is the one i want you to judge.

 

Posted Sep 14, '08 at 7:38pm

shayneii

shayneii

2,688 posts

Wow adrecka... that was actually pretty touching! Good job!