First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.
Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:
It must fit the week's theme. It must be submitted by the deadline. It cannot have inappropriate language in it. It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).
Also:
The poem must be created for this contest A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!) Only one submission per user will be accepted
As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.
OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
Here be the depths that we have crawled To wake on this broken shore. Where blood has run and men have cried Forgotten hopes, dashed dreams and more.
Blasted iron sky, that once was iron blue When we sang beneath the waves. When dreams were far and we were young And drowned men spoke of haunted graves.
Where rhythm beats a lost on lonely hearts And the days are nothing new to us So that we are tempted to crawl onto blasted shore So that these metal workings be wonderous.
Ah sweet and bitter taint that was once us. Once where things we above us, when we were new. When we hid beneath the sea, the cold hearted mistress That stole our souls and made us pay our due.
Oh, but we be wiser now. For the years have passed us. And this forsaken land shall we haunt And give those who hold life dear something to dread. Something to make there lives seem to be a taunt.
Where in the ramblings of our minds, Of our hearts and souls that be forfeit. We will ponder no more our underwater prison Of that place we shall forget.
We pray you heed these dakr words well We pray that you know our cause For we will walk on this dead shore forever now And should you see us, your life shall pause.
Was a great job from you, SirNoobalot. Good first time judging, wolf, but next time get something more substantive out so that we can really get a grasp for your poetic insight.
>.< I apologize for the rushed job I spent so long deciding I ran out of time to justfiy everything. If I get the chance to judge again I will make sure I have ample time and give a full justification for each placing. Once again I'm sorry.
Here's my submission, it's the most spontaneous and visceral poem and wrote and...it does not rhyme. This is my first non rhyming submission, I hope it won't be the last ^^. Seeing how I'm not english, the spontaneity resulted in a poem with not much impressive vocabulary or syntax. I guess I'm cut to be an English minimalist ^^.
Here goes...
You are all alone in the crowd; Unhindered by the bureaucrat's rhythm However hard you desire not to go Your thoughts are on the treadmill of you feet For you dance that step in a sluggish fashion
A day like any other, but not less special; You did not dream of never waking up So upon that marvelous night of emptiness You build the base of a succesful journey Men at work, drink your coffe, drink it
And as the metro follows its course You ponder why you were rewarded With a night of dreamless sleep Just enough thinking to make you dense; Which is very few, almost naught in fact
All the thoughts they made you miss That station so important So you wonder where you'll end up; Surely in a coffin if not at work But a little change might not hurt
As the metro stop, free from all its people You descend as the last of them robots Wind yourself up and climb the stairs To a sunny beach nearing water Is it worth living the same day over, you wonder
You take off your brown and shiny shoes To feel the life between your toes The churning warmth of the earth Melts into refreshing cold As you march into the sea, never to come back
What will the boss say? What will your colleagues think? You don't care as your nose fills up And all becomes terribly white Surprisingly blank...
You slowly open your eyes, in an hospital bed Your muscles weak from months of sleep The woman sighting vacantly near Let go a scream of surprise And start to cry as she rush towards you
Doctors flow in the colorless room promplty To witness the miracle And as you're clueless, you think; ''That first breath tasted like I just passed a few minutes underwater...''
No, I liked your poem. Just reminded me of that book, is all (it's a piece of classic American literature).
Ah well, aside from Poe and Bukoski I'm not well versed in American litterature. I'm sorry, I didn't mean to coerce you into saying you liked it; it wasn't my intention. I'm not even sure if it can be qualified as legitimate poetry; even though I know about traditionnal poetry I'm not well aware of the rules and ethics pertaining to unrhymed poems ^^.
And you're quite the reference for poetry on Ag, so of course I'd be intimidated if you didn't like it *wink*
Seeing how I'm not english, the spontaneity resulted in a poem with not much impressive vocabulary or syntax. I guess I'm cut to be an English minimalist ^^.
Fallen, you remind me of Cenny with your doubt of self. You've got better English than 80% of Americans, honestly.
Fallen, you remind me of Cenny with your doubt of self. You've got better English than 80% of Americans, honestly. srsly, it's making me depressed ;-;
Ah well; it's just that I'm often impressed by the vocabulary and the average quality of the poets here. I try my best but sometimes reading posts from Parsat or Gantic for example makes me realize I don't know that much about the use of that second tongue of mine. Anyhow, I'm sorry to make you depressed; I just wanted to point out that I couldn't come up with great words as easily and as fastly as the common folks around, especially while being spontaneous ^^.
Wow. I failed. Big suprise. and Wajor, thanks for sayin that lol well gol dang I don't have anything to enter with how busy it has been. It sucks that I'm not a total regualar on AG anymore just cuzza stinkin school. :/ Maybe next semester I can get back on more.
