ForumsArt, Music, and WritingPeriodic Poetry Contest - Theme: Touch of Truth (Page 390, due Jan. 28)

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DragonMistress
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First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.

Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:

It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).


Also:

The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted

As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.


OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
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ManUtd4life096
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Consciousness??? STROPP!!! I want better theme NAO.

Gantic
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I would like to change my entry. I'm not liking my faux-minimalism. Break the mold. Break the mold! I feel like I'm stuck in a rut.

Never a Perfect Thousand

One door opens
Echoes a nine hundred ninety-nine doors
The room without windows
One door closes
Echoes a thousand and one doors
The room without windows
One door opens
Echoes a thousand and one doors
The room without windows
One door closes
One sound
One window

Strop
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Consciousness??? STROPP!!! I want better theme NAO.


Beggars cannot be choosers

And I like this theme >:
kingryan
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When's it getting Judged Strop?

KingRyan

adrecka_33
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I think it is the 19th of this mounth

Strop
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The 19th sounds like a good date, my super-busy 10-hours-a-day-at-the-hospital schedule notwithstanding.

MOAR ENTRIES PLZ

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MOAR ENTRIES PLZ


Working on it haha.
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"I Doubt":

Five senses rule my being.
Am I to trust those, which guide me?
An adage tells me, âI am.â
Am I to trust the words of another?
That which cannot be governed by human instinct
Falls into place

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Blah, sorry for the double/triple post...Might as well clear up the bad code from copy & paste.

"I Doubt":

Five senses rule my being.
Am I to trust those, which guide me?
An adage tells me, "I am."
Am I to trust the words of another?
That which cannot be governed by human instinct
Falls into place

Estel
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Man, I have not entered this contest in quite some time! I thought I'd like to throw one out there (:

Fight the thoughts

Going black, going red,
Consciousness leaving my head,
my mind, and body,
leaving me for dead.

Fight the thoughts racing through,
like animals breaking from the zoo.
A terror to think of,
you would be afraid too.

Lights off, lights on,
nothing to concentrate upon,
except for staying awake,
At least until dawn.

Morning comes, time for the sun to rise,
you notice that you are still alive,
for now.
Just don't close your eyes.

Strop
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Since I'm working in neurology I could go on and on about this:

All things being considered in the mind's eye,
The whole being greater than the sum, or so we say,
But what of the lady who ate half a pie,
And turned it around and ate half again,
And turned and ate, and turned and ate,
Until half of whatever half was what remained,
And such existence was this lady's fate,
Not to us, but to her, was it all the same.

Adapted from The Man Who Mistook His Wife For a Hat- Dr. Oliver Sacks. I'm recounting Dr. Sacks' account of a lady with a non-dominant hemineglect- the term used to describe where a person's perception of one side is impaired. I've seen this in stroke patients who are completely unaware of half of their bodies. The case Dr. Sacks here mentions though is slightly unusual. The lady would literally do as I have described above because out of any half she would remain unaware of the other half, and this applied not only to eating a pie, but also to dressing and makeup and other activities.

Consciousness is a funny thing.

adrecka_33
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Estel i really like your poem/ the style of it.

Parsat
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Pretty nice poem, Estel. It had a very interesting rhyme scheme, and I think that it hit upon the survival component of consciousness rather well. It could have been improved by a more consistent meter, but otherwise it was pretty good.

Estel
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I'm the worst with meter xP

That last part stanza, third line, could have used a few more syllables, but I let it be (:

Parsat
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I agree. Meter is the hardest part, but if you can get it down and combine it with a good rhyme, it is really awesome. That's why people like Shakespeare or Robert Frost are so greatly admired, for their use of meter.

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