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DragonMistress
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First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.

Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:

It must fit the week's theme.
It must be submitted by the deadline.
It cannot have inappropriate language in it.
It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).


Also:

The poem must be created for this contest
A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!)
Only one submission per user will be accepted

As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.


OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
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adrecka_33
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Oh and the ending date is... June, 15th. Tell me if you think it should be long.

Parsat
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Kingryan: Jupiter obviously, with the moon of two vowels being Io.

I already guessed alt's on DevArt correctly, but I'd rather keep it a surprise here at the moment.

Mine was painfully obvious, but I was doing it more for the poetry anyway. If anyone can guess the significance of the epigram, though, that'll be my challenge.

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Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipisicing elit, sed do eiusmod tempor incididunt ut labore et dolore magna aliqua.


Ah, I see. However the fact that you are talking about something random in Latin doesn't really intrigue me...

I discovered that a few weeks ago...

Alt...is yours Earth? I don't think so. That's why it is Neptune....the one on a side since and floating in the other direction...
thisisnotanalt
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Incorrect KR is incorrect.

LufffiStudios
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Planets

Eight planets
Right now there be.
Goddess of beauty,
God of the sea.

A lover of war,
A likeness to Thor.
A milky tan color
Wraps the god of agriculture.

A messenger,
The king of trade.
Off to deliver a message,
Goodbye he bade.

In this line of Romans
A Greek will stand.
Maybe quite lopsidedly so,
But he shall stand.

Although a dwarf,
He deserves some mention.
Planet status arguments,
There was much tension.

And finally came life.
A vast, glorious land.
And before you knew it,
The planet was manned.


I didn't really want to do the riddle-play for a particular planet, so I just did a small easy, easy one for each.

adrecka_33
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HAY I actually remembered it was today, I might actually get it judged on time YAh.

adrecka_33
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Ok, everyone here we go again (and again) its funny how fast it creeps up on you. Anyway there was a lot of good entries but not many, I suppose that was my fault because I picked the topic. I am still not sure of the topic yet, I will tell you what it is later today. But anyway

The winner is: JereN
Yes I said JereN

Between

Between the planets I float,
with only my suit and no star boat.
The strong radiations from the sun,
are the most perfect way to stun.

The emptiness of space has one bad thing,
your screams will not be heard by any living thing.
Yet this is the place where all of us will end,
and we ourselves will us there send.

Alone in this place all must be,
no home nor loved ones for us to see.
This is our place and there's no coming back,
because we did not respect the natures pact.

Peace and harmony we will not see,
only pain and torment for us there will be.
This is the cause of our creed and selfishness,
and because we lack the empathy and goodness.

So as long as we continue to live this way,
the empty space between us will stay.
As long as we don't give the sacred oath,
between the planets we must float.


JereN you really surprised me this time. I loved the play on the fact that we are destroying the world. And how that may push us to seek refuge in space. Plus it had a good rhythm and flow, the words came smoothly even though you used some big words. Though next time try and focus a little more on the topic. But this was close enough.

Second place goes to: thisisnotanalt


By what measurement do you entail,
charged gas, an energy trail.
One large planet embattled with a moon
unbeknown to us, the energy a great boon

Chilling storm rages
throughout the ages
surrounded by sentry, weary guard
broken by not mace or fauchard.

a jealous accessory bestowed
less grand, unknown
what one doesn't know can't hurt
yet still offers no comfort

a clash with a cobbler, many years ago
has left it bruised, less worse for wear although
king of the copycats, it's namesake from
I bet not knowing what I'm talking about makes you feel dumb

So now, I ask
decode this cryptic message, and in eternal light you'll bask!

Mostly because I have yet to figure out what it is. I keep reading it over and over and its like on the tip of my tongue but I just cant get it. Also I loved the many metaphors you used.


Third place goes to: LufffiStudios


Eight planets
Right now there be.
Goddess of beauty,
God of the sea.

A lover of war,
A likeness to Thor.
A milky tan color
Wraps the god of agriculture.

A messenger,
The king of trade.
Off to deliver a message,
Goodbye he bade.

In this line of Romans
A Greek will stand.
Maybe quite lopsidedly so,
But he shall stand.

Although a dwarf,
He deserves some mention.
Planet status arguments,
There was much tension.

And finally came life.
A vast, glorious land.
And before you knew it,
The planet was manned.


I really liked your poems. And yours happened to be the last on I judged so it was cool how it sorta summarized everything I had read. With of course a few extra details that made it yours.

Now for the honorable mentions:

Parsat and Kingryan, for easiest to guess poem.

Though easy, again I loved the metaphors it creates a picture in your mind that really makes your poem special.

Estel, I would have to say that yours was the Medium poem.
I couldnât guess it right away But the more I thought about it the more I could figure it out.


Shortest: sonam
This just proves that short poems are just as good because I loved your poem.



goumas13, If there was a fourth place it would be yours. Your poem had such a nice feel to it.
mokomonkey
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I jumped from planet to planet,
Searching for the sun.
Sadly, I was blind,
And couldn't see what I'd done.

All the spheres I'd stepped on
Were now riddled with holes.
Millions of lifeforms, squashed,
Down to the tiniest soul.

Maverick4
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@ alt:

is it jupiter? or saturn?

Maverick4
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no wait! its teh planet Uranus

im serious

thisisnotanalt
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I'll just tell you guys. . . .

It's Jupiter.

JereN
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OMG I won :P

*faints and dies*

goumas13
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I am starting to learn, I think that until 2058 I will be almost good as William Blake.

wistress
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Plus it had a good rhythm and flow, the words came smoothly even though you used some big words.


I liked the poem also, however, I am struggling to find the "big words" in the poem. In fact, I personally don't see any big words. I know this sounds rude but I just feel it has to be said. This is the reason I didn't write a poem for this weeks contest ... oh well .. life goes on ...
adrecka_33
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Well, If you dont like my judging i would be more then happy to let someone else judge. I miss writing poems, for this, and judging is not fun when people constently complain about when, why i chose that person, why i didnt metion them and so on... I will continue to do it as long as is needed though.

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