First, I will post the overall rules, and then I will post the specifics about this week.
Original rules, as stated by Ubertuna:
It must fit the week's theme. It must be submitted by the deadline. It cannot have inappropriate language in it. It cannot be stolen (if you plagiarize, we will find you).
Also:
The poem must be created for this contest A user cannot win two weeks in a row (though everyone is welcome to submit every week!) Only one submission per user will be accepted
As we all know, the winner will recieve a merit, and their poem will be featured on the _Poetry_ page.
OK, on to this week's topic...Again, we are having a style instead of a theme. Also, this week we are having TWO WEEKS to do it, instead of the usual one. Why? Because this will be an EPIC poem. Or, rather, a parody of an epic poem. Generally, epic poetry is very long, and tells the serious story of a heroic figure. Well, this week, the epic figure is YOU! Write a long poem (I'll leave the definition of 'long' up to you, but give it a good go) about the heroic story of you! It can be silly, serious, whatever... just have fun with it. You have two weeks, so have a great time!
There is no set style for this contest, just so long as the poem fits the theme. So its your choice whether you want to write a rhyming or a non-rhyming poem.
The flowers bloomed in the flowing field; The endless sea met the sky above; The secrets of nature were revealed In our wonderland of hope and love.
But as our thoughts were limitless, So was our curiosity, And when our innocence transgressed, Our world was shattered instantly.
For years we wandered and explored; Yet we would return nevermore.
Simplicity itself. It is a rather lovely poem that reflects the theme extremely well. My only comment is that it was not longer, I would have loved to see what this could have turned into, yet, as it is now, it is well written.
Utopian Hell, Knowledge for happiness. One mistake, salvation?
Fall into imperfection, Awareness of truth Agony and Sorrow experienced.
Yet, life is true. Worth living. A life complete.
An interesting take on the theme. I enjoyed the contradicting phrases you placed in there, such as "utopian hell". Well written, though the rythm was off at times I found.
1st Place and Merrit Winner: Nichodemus
Paradise Lost?
I remember your harsh barbed words, That ripped through my starry fantasy, As my rash love tinted and blurred, My vision of earthbound reality. When you casually tossed me away,
Leaving me marooned on my isle of despair, Wistfully building dreams for another day, Desperate oath to love I did swear. I bitterly resented my Paradise lost, Your chilly silence left an eternal frost,
All my begging and pleas I did exhaust, Only then did I accept my dying cause. The banquet of fives senses you conjured, Vanished in a twinkling of my now open eyes, As your smile twisted and honey voice demurred,
A vapid succumbus without your disguise. My shattered illusions of blissful felicity, Squeezed my still regretful mind, Disgusted with my thoughts of toxicity, Yet I'm done with lies and your kind.
Sweet words right from Belial's script, A vengeful fox worthy of Beezlebub, One more cruel then bloody Moloch primed, Outstripping Satan in his realm of wrath. Tell me now dear, how much have I really lost?
This was...interesting to read. I feel this catches on to Milton's work with a great deal of accuracy, though not in the same tone as Milton. Further more this poem made me think of Adam regreting his choice to fall along with Eve. For this also carries a tone of an almost regretful God, especially in the last few lines, but that may be a misinterputation upon my part. Either way, fantastic.
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Well folks, I once again apologize for my extreme lateness. However, I should be done reasonably on time next round. So without further pause...
Joyous words are all abound Trees plucked like feathers from the ground Many ornaments hung side to side Oh what an occasion, it's Christmas time!
'Tis the holiday season and all we see Are Christmas gifts of toys on TV Why no one remembers Hannukah is beyond me Aren't we all equal? From sea to shining sea?
Across the street, about 10 yards or so My family is ready to go For it's the first night of Hannukah no where near done Tonight we light candle number one
Back in the date of Judah Macabee We were persecuted, we were not free However we rallied under him, that brave Jew Tonight we light candle number two
Macabee in Hebrew means "hammer" All his enemies he would "slammer" Fast as a butterfly, stinging like a bee Tonight we light candle number three
Oh! Today is Christmas what a surprise! All other families are awake before the sunrise In the Christmas spirit they rejoyce Caroling in a very loud voice
Back to the Hannukah part...
Tonight we light candle number four When we heard a mysterious knock on the door We opened the door very wide And we heard this... "JINGLE BELLS! JINGLE BELLS! JINGLE ALL THE WAY!!!!!" ...back to our latkes, oh so fried
Night number five and my brother got a new toy boat We all enjoyed some sufganeyot (look it up) We sang and danced and did a jive And then we lit candle number five
It's time for the 6th only to more to go! How fast did this season flow Our relatives leave, it gives me a twitch But for now let's light candle six
The party is here for this joyous night Not a morsle was left, not even a bite We celebrated the Macabees who faught and went to heven And then we lit candle seven
Oy vey! It's the final night! I'll take my leave, if that's alright I have some family to send on their way A good holiday, yes a good day.
So at the end of this holiday season I don't ever see a reason Why Hannukah has been left off the news Do we not matter? Why not the Jews?
Not an object was stirring not even a mouse When a great hannukiah lit up the house Though its candles were big, it had gentle light It spelled out "To all a good New Year, to all a good night!"
Wow, this is the first time I have semi-ranted in poem form...
Christmas time is coming Advertisements all around In class, Religious kids not making a single sound This is the Jews time to be bad Their time to misbehave And all the other kids Wanting to be Santa's fav. Having too be good All of the time Because saying almost anything Is a complete crime Praying not to be on the "Naughty" list Having nightmares about Santa Raising his fist Doing all the "good" makes you want to run away Is santa making you his prey? But the presents are worth it right? Not if you stay up all night
I know it's not that good. Don't need to tell me that.
Did anyone aside from jeol read the freaking theme of my post? The theme is A Christmas Carol, as in based around the novel/movie/whatever media form you've seen it represented it. You know...Scrooge!
Wolf, if you can't judge this time, I don't mind judging I did judge two or three times in the past if my memory serves me correctly. I'll still enter though.
Wolf, if you can't judge this time, I don't mind judging I did judge two or three times in the past if my memory serves me correctly. I'll still enter though.
Okay. I'll accept that. It would help because this week is when all my exams start. Just make sure people stick to the theme. So far on jeol has an entry that qualifies.
The theme is A Christmas Carol, as in based around the novel/movie/whatever media form you've seen it represented it. You know...Scrooge!
Mr. I'm-Biased-Against-Other-Holidays
I simply meant your own representation of the Christmas themes and holiday, as in a christmas song like carolers. Thus said, I declare my poem to still be valid, as you were not clear in the theme what you meant.
