I am writing a book here is the prologue I hope you like it. -------------------------------------- In the year 3056 we are under the rule of a corrupt humanoid leader named Voltar. Voltar is the ruler of the whole galaxy and lives on the comet Hicto. One day some space pirates were crossing into our galaxy, Voltar insisted that they were a threat and declared war on there galaxy. We are losing badly and our supply of solders are running low. In 3087 everything would change for me. "It's all his fault!" I screamed as solders barged into our house to take there new recruit. "No please! Take me instead not my son!" my mother screamed as tears were swelling up in her eyes. "I'm sorry ma-am we are under the orders of the mighty Voltar himself" one solder said as he grabbed my arm firmly. "Thats what worry's me" I said "Come along boy." "No please not him!" I beg of you take me instead!" "I'm sorry ma-am." "MOM!" I screamed as they dragged me outside to the spaceship. Here in this ship my fate would change. The soldiers dragged me onto the rocket strapping me into a seat. "And don't try to escape ya hear me?" said one of the soldiers I slumped down in my seat trying to grasp what was happening. Nothing felt right. My stomach was stirring angry tears running down my face. My hands shaking. I couldn't understand a thing. "What's going on?" I said aloud
CHHPFFOOO Went the rocket ship as we lifted off I gazed out the window and saw my mom grieving on my crying brothers shoulder. "This isn't right." I said with tears stumbling down my face. "...Aaron?" said a familiar voice. "What who's there?" which was a dumb question for me to ask because the rocket ship was full of new recruits. "It's me. You know. Hemon your old buddy from middle school." "Hemon?" I said "Hey it's great to see ya buddy! Come sit here." I said while patting the available seat next to me. He jumped through the air and floated all around the rocket ship by now we were well out of the Earths atmosphere and there was no gravity so we could jump and walk around as we pleased. "So how have ya been Aaron?" "Eh not so great. I'm terrified of war and I just got drafted." "Well. Sometimes you have to overcome your fear in order to-"
KABOOM "Whoa! What was that?" I said while almost jumping out of my seat. "Hang on folks it's gonna be a bumpy ri- OOAH!" "Pilot!" screamed one of the new recruits. I looked over my seat and saw space pirates boarding our ship. I have a bad feeling about this.
If they would, thoadthetoad would have noticed that I wrote almost exactly the same comment as him.
Actually Thoad is just putting another problem out of the world. Not that the soldiers are too calm, or act too calm (or seems too calm), but simply that there should be more variation in the language. Capitals would probably only work in comics, variated language should be something you should concentrate on.
