"Hi, Billy Mays here! Woul-" "I'm going to do this in real ti-" "I JUST WISH YOU'D LOVE M-" "Usted apenas aren' ¡la derecha de t para mà mi pequeña mariposa! M-" He turned off the TV. "Jesus, there is nothing on." He grumbled. He went over to check his messages on his phone. "Hey Steve. It's your mother. We are no longer sending you any money. James figured it was time for you to get a real job. Working on that silly website barely making rent is not a jo-" "message deleted, next unheard message" "Hey Steve this is Mac from the site. So far your work has been sub-par and Were gonna have to let you off the sit-" "Message deleted. No more messages" He closed his phone and put it down. There was a slam on the door. Opening the door he sees the Apartment Manager. In his thick southern accent "Look here fella. You need to pay your damn rent your three weeks behind. This is your last week, either pay me or Get out." Steve smirks and says to the Manager, "Why don't you get back to your Larry the Cable guy sessions and leave me alone." Slamming the door in his face. He goes to sit down on his raggedy couch, liting a cigar. He stares at a magnum he kept for protection and looked away, "Life may suck right now. But that ain't worth it." He took a drag. "I don't know what to do anymore." Then the Fresh Prince of Bel Air theme music came up. It was his phone. He answered. "Hello?" "Hi Steve." "Hey Angela." Angela was a long time friend of Steve, they dated for a while but Steve was too much of a bum. "Your going to be at the Wedding right? This saturday?" "Yeah. Wouldn't miss it, wouldn't miss it." The second line under his breath. "Great! Remeber your the best man! You need to pick up a suit. Okay?" "Got it. Suit, saturday. Be there." "Alright! Bye Steve. Take care." "Alright. Bye Angela." He hangs up. He forgot about the wedding and now theres no way could possibly afford a suit. Lost job, although very low paying, can't pay rent. "Well, hell just met the henbasket right here didn't it." He threw out his Cigar. He ran his hands through his hair. "Wait I will ever do, What I will ever do. Well, it's around three. Time to hit the bar." He put on his coat, and left.
End of Part 1 ------------------------ COMMENTARY: Steve is well, Steve. A guy down on his luck with problems. Steve is average. Steve is that guy. Steve is the guy we all see but never notice. Steve is no superhero, Steve dosen't fight Zombies, Steve isn't any kind of hero at all, Steve is a Civillian, at best. Steve is nothing special, Steve is Steve.
Maybe you should like something to welcome the people here and tell them whats going on so that you might get a few replys. about 20 people have looked at this and not replied. i am replying but havent looked at the story because i know it is gonna be something boring. just telling ya.
Hm, i personally like it. Just an average guy named steve. It has potential. The story looks as if it could go in many different directions. Can't wait for the next issue!
And sonam, you really shouldn't judge things without looking into them.
Well, sonam, you can't judge a book by it's cover. I actually read the story, and it's not boring. There were grammatical mistakes, like this bit of sentence-
"Wait I will ever do, What I will ever do.
Did you mean 'What will I ever do'?
Also, some problems capitalizing common nouns. Otherwise, good story. Apparently it's boring to those who don't even reade it, though... *coughsonamcough*
This is more interesting than almost any story I have read so far. Well I might have exaggerated a bit, but it's definitely in the top 4. Don't abandon this.
Okayy.... Due to my ignorance steve part 2 is here. -> http://armorgames.com/community/thread/3738905/steve-part-duece/page/1#post-3740298
Part 3 will be here. All parts will have links connecting them on my about page so If you wish to catch up, that's the place to go. Sorry for the Inconvience.
(Caution: MUST READ PART TWO TO UNDERSTAND CIRCUMSTANCES) After the drinks, after the party, after the strange night, Steve remebers nothing, well he remebers how many Screwdrivers, Russian El Toros, and god knows what other alcholic beverages he had. It was rough. Headache from hell, and the first thing he could say was "Thank god I'm by myself." No note, No number, nothing. Theres a knock on the door. He gets up, puts on some athletic shorts, walks out the bedroom and door and is stopped in his tracks by a horrific sight. Gordon. Or what was left of him. He looks as if he has been beaten, shot, and god knows what else. Steve nearly threw up. "Oh my god, Oh my god, Oh my god.." The knock was harder next time "Open up! It's the police. We had a report of gun shots and screams coming from your room! Either open the door, or we will open it." Steve considered the possiblites. Go to jail, lose celibacy, miss the wedding, or end it. If he was going down it was going to be with a show. The worst that could happen is some casulties in the cross fire but past that, he could live. Or won't. He grabbed his magnum. Reloaded. "I hate to do this but, I am not going to prison." He whispered to himself. He opened the door and fired. Two headshots. "Oh man, Oh man, Oh my god." He dragged the bodies in and locked the door. "Oh jesus. I've seriously screwed up.." He starting thinking "What if gordon's not the only one?" He opened up his closet and out fell the Apartment Manager. "Oh. My. God." He opened his phone and checked his messages out of curiosty sake, first it was his mom "STEVE! What are you doing!? Please pick up the phone! If you stop this nonsense, we'll give you rent! Forever! James even agreed to it! Just please st-" He deleted it. Next message "Steve. It's Angela. Mitch decided it would be better if you didn't come to the wedding. I'm sorry. But I agreed. You have too much going on right now. An-" Deleted. Mitch couldn't stand it. He opened his window. Only to be met with a shot from a police sniper rifle. It was over.
Johan at the bar, closed, by himself, smiled "Great. Two of my worst, annoying customers, never took my advice. This work, may be my best yet. Ha.Ha.Ha." -------------------------- That's right steve is ova. Johan did it all. Steve wasn't going anywhere for me so I decided I would end it in a three part series. What a twist!
