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#1 my name is Ben Martinez. i am in a mercanary team rented out by a fellow named billy creel, my merc. team consists of 6 people minus me, Jericho, our ex-raider and heavy weapons opperater, Aaron, my best friend and plasma weapons opperater, Charon, our ghoul, and avid shotgun collecter, Leon, our tactical sniper, Mikail, our russian medik and stratigiser, Mickala, his daughter and sharpshooter, also the backup medik, then theres me, the best gun this side of the pitt, aaron loves animals, i remember on time Mikail almost lost his face b/c of a 'gaui, but aaron stoped it by giveing it a week supply of food and not lead,and now were stuck in the linc. mem. b/c the slavers abbandened it to go to our friends at big town 20 mi. away, now, Jericho, Mickala, and i are hold up, fighting off super mutants with a limited supply of ammo. just my luck. the rest of my crew is held up holding up the rackshamble town that is bigtown, slavers are strong, they use miniguns to mow down weak slaves, they have no heart. 'wait, a mesage from aaron, good news, hopefully' i said reluctantly. we made a primitave cellphone to comunicate far away. guess what? bad news. apperently, the slavers had numbers in the thousands, a total war on non-affilated people no doubt.even worse news aaron has picked up a pet, a domestic rotwiler, just another mouth to feed, not realy, the rots are good at fighting, even after a nuclear war. ' so we gotta kick some ugly tail ?!? and fast !?!'
jericho, who was fireing rockets at the time, couldnt leave his old friend leon behind. so 1/2 hour later we won the battle of the uglies. then we used the sewers to get to big town fast, it took about 1 1/2 hours to get there, and by then the twelve residents of bigtown were droped to 9, only jade, thunder, lafayette, crabs, bittercup, her twin buttercup, my brother, romeo, jericho's brother, tiny (he's 6'9'' , and dash, were alive, lightning (thunder's sister) robo, the mechanic, and mikail's son vladimir, died. - 6/19/2259 will be updated agian after i make another one

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thisisnotanalt
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Hahahahaha, my FO3 character would plow through these guys. Almost losing his face because of such a lowly enemy as a Yao Guai? I kill them with one hit
On HARD difficulty.

Interesting story though. I like it, despite the at times sloppy execution.

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Come on Alt, try and roll with the fiction a little. Yao Guai are supposed to be tough. That being said, one-hit-killing them is not particularly impressive. Anyone with Lincoln's repeater could one-shot crit anything from about a quarter mile.

The story's execution was indeed sloppy. Good grammar and spelling would make it much more readable. Descriptive text could also be improved.

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True. . . .

But losing his face? All you need is a dart gun and they're easier to deal with than a bloatfly :/

Being so low-leveled in the wasteland is worthy of a facepalm.

I always roll against fiction. Realty may be stranger than fiction, but fiction is still pretty dam strange.

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jericho, who was fireing rockets at the time, couldnt leave his old friend leon behind


I don't think this is accurate.
Jericho could only be recurited through a evil Karma and would leave if you became a goody-goody.
Meaning if someone was gonna die.
He was probably going to leave the guy for dead if he was just dead weight.
If your going to make a fangic, which this is, accurate portrayal of Chracters is a must.
Otherwise, Its a good story with potential. Just remeber that portrayal of Chracters in game must be accurate to how the game makes them.
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X( my jericho and FO3's Jericho are different, jericho (FO3) is part of my Alpha team who comes into play later. just clearing that up.

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. . .and according to your yao guai post on my profile, they're different too. This doesn't have much to do with FO3 besides the names, if your' making the characters so different.

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Well, technically the kid from Vault 101 never dies. In the third DLC you don't die and you can join The Brotherhood of Steel. Unless you're playing on the PS3 then you do die.

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i plan to reviel the secerets here=
this is after the 101 kids death.
the guai were experemented on by evclave scientists and all now have steel bones and are under mind controal and have steel armored plates souraunding the guai,like armor protecting the mind controal and makes them extremely deadly.
jericho from my stories and FO3 jericho are different, and FO3 jericho is in a different unit
my units are called the resistance
the bad guys are the slavers (for now)
jericho (FO3) leaves the resistance when we escape bigtown and i find out he left his crew for dead but 3 of them come back and report to our HQ in rivet city and goes to work for the real bad guys ( he was comanding officer of bravo team, my crew is called alpha team, and delta team comes to back us up and helps us escape bigtown even though i asked for alpha team)
we are at war and all the bad guys team up to take us out, besides the super mutants, who are intelegent enough to have a formal government and make alliances thanks to fawkes, he unified and educated them even after they tormented and experemented on him.
vault 101 is open and is now one of our stratigic bases (the overseer died, and amata agrees to open 101 after 101 kid dies)
the resistance has these towns working for them:
megaton-mayor-lucus simms
rivet city-mayor-margarita martinez
tenpenny tower-mayor-gob
(tenpenny gets killed by 101 and the ghouls take over, gob moves there when he pays off his debt to colin and takes charge)
canturbury commons-mayor-uncle roe
underworld- no leader, there is a ghoul council though.
germantown poliece HQ-leader Fawkes, our mutie friends who gave up eating us, slavers ignore uglies
GNR-three dog, our dj and port in the storm
every thing else is owned by the bad guys, poor bigtown
little lamplight is gone, as in irradiated beyond belief

thisisnotanalt
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Ummm. . . .

You should've given us the backstory earlier.

But whatever.

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your right,
X( that is my bad im sorry but i hope that cleared it up a little bit at least

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mikail i am sorry for your loss but....we have to go'' said Jade, the worrywort. '' sir with all due respect i cannot leave my only son behind, dead or alive'' he said to me. Mikail had served in the russian enclave before he came to america, and escaped on a vertibird with schematics for a helicopter we named and made called the SX4. technaclly im the commanding officer and i run a tight shift. " but it takes time to bury,muchless, carry dead bodies out" said Romeo.
" well were going to have to carry them, Greg" i said. "GREG"???? everyone said " yea, my name's greg, laugh it up" he said.no one laughs. exept jericho. Greg? Greg? Ben's bro is named Greg?" he said. "Jericho, you coud grow up in this lifetime" Mickala says. " Nah, i dont think so little girl" "little girl? little girl?! ive carried your butt out of a fire fight more times than you can shake a sharp stick at". Jericho picks up a sharp stick and shakes it at Mickala. Oh, that is it". she said and draws her weapon. A T3X .670 calaber revolver and aims it at Jericho. The T3X .670 cal. revolver was the only one ever made becaus the bombs droped the day it was finished. Jericho aims his weapon at Mickala. The SX4 assult rifle is designed for rapid fire as well as aqua combat, it was made by Robo a year ago. " Thats enough of this insubordination, now, Mickala, if you dont plan on being expeled for killing Jericho, holster your weapon" i said. "but-" i kind of have a superpower, im extremely fast, i am that way because i got exposd to an extremely ungodly ammounts of radiation. just not enough to ghoul-ify me. so i run up to mickala and thrust punch her and take her gun (she goes flying and hits the wall (i have to be rough :/)) then i do the same to jericho and the same thing happens. " alright, now that thats over can we figure out what we are going to do" i said "a little rough, dont you think ? you havent changed a bit" said someone, but not a civilian or of my crew. but who *flashback* i know that voice. the setting is a labratory there are three people Quincy, one of my outcast friends, a guy by the name of Luis Sera, a spaniard and I. "sorry guys, my orders are to extermanate the whitinesses" he aims the grenade launcher at the irradated jefferson memorial pureification chamber, the one where the hero of the wastes died so fresh water would be more plentiful, but it was in vain because it worked for a day and failed. " wait, we can work it out hehe, i mean we dont all need to die do we" luis asked. "your right, i dont know what happened here" Quincy said. then he ran out and as the door shut he shot a grenade at the chamber and "killed" me and luis.*flashback over* "Luis" i asked? " in the fleash" he replied "Luis i thought you were dead"exclamed Mickala. before the whole Quincy cover up, they had an affiar. "luis,L-l-l-luis, the last time i saw you, you had gotten tore up by the japinese veterans at the prosessing plant" said leon, who was shakeing because everyone had assumed he was dead, exept him." sir, permission to speak and act freely" asked Mikail" permission granted"i said. then he slaped me and said " You said he was dead! how could you have not checked"?
" Mikail, i understand your anger and he had no pulse. he was dead" i said " ben, your best option is to use the sewers and go to rivet city" luis said " yes, yes markie would know what to do" leon said "my sister? my sister markie, the mayor of rivet city, she has no combat experiance" i said " But she is good with situations like this" Mickala said. "Yea, and the rain will kill us all, we would be better off throwing our selfs agianst the wall" Aaron says. " you got that from slipknot's psychosocial song that jimmy played yesterday" dash says. Jimmy is the dj for three dog's expanding musical empire, jimmy plays the rock/metal. "oh, someone do enter sandman" said bittercup " but hip-hop is better"says buttercup, the princess " "im done, Aaron, call in all avialable teams, delta should be available, and palm, tell them to use the jefferson memorial bypass tunnels and tell them to bring support weapons, and check on alpha team, if that Jericho costs me more good men i'll lose it" i said "leon, take Mikail up there and do snipeing recon, jericho, you and mickala in the opposite wall, aaron, get those boys here now" i said "ETA 10 minuites"aaron says

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that was #2 and this is #3
this part starts in rivet city and makes its way to bigtown.

"Jericho, you look horible, and where is your team" stingray, our backup and receptionist asked? " i dont know, and i dont care, the pitt got worse and i had to abandon them before we could even get in" jericho said "its not your fault your an incopadent leader, your people get killed every time" said Fats, our beta team leader."say it agian and i kill you and your team, porky" jericho says "what, sad because leon replaced you as scout sniper" fats asked "leon, leon ,leon, that is all people talk about any more because he took my place in alpha team" jericho says " listen, ben needs you guys to use the jefferson bypass tunnel and go to bigtown with all the exploseives you can carry with your weapons" stingray says "i cant go, my teams dead" jericho says " we just got back from huston, but palm team can go because we need backup, my men will be tired, and not at 100%" fats says &quotalm team is in la helping the resistance there, your it, but i'll come becaus you need an extra gun" stingray says. " tell aaron to tell ben that we will be there in 10 minuites" fats says
now we are at big town 5 minuites before fats gets there

" charon, set up the fuses around the perimiter, when backup comes, hook up the explosives then 1 minuite till detionation" i say " sure thing, i wonder if the slavers like fireworks, can aaron help" charon says"only if he wants to,so how about it " i ask "sure, lets jump on it charon" aaron says "Leon, how does it look" i say ! " bad, there are hundreds on this side and more on the other sides" he tells me. i get on the comunicater and call stingray " stingray, eta on backup, oh, your here, well come on up, were ready for the boom boom" i say. "stingray, how are my guns" i ask him as he is comeing up out of the manhole " there done and in better condition than before" he says. he gives me the stingray devilfish mark 1 and 2, there are only 3 left in existance, mark 1,2,and 3, stingray has the last one, that is why we call him stingray, its the only gun he uses. " awesome job stingray, ive never seen a .50 cal in better shape, hey, wheres Jericho" i ask "im right here " jericho responds "not you jericho, captin jericho" i ask fats " he went awol on the pitt mission, only three came back not includeing him" fats responds " darn that jericho he cost me more men, i want his head on a platter and fed to.... hey aaron, wheres your dog" i ask? " oh, yea, KILLER, here boy" aaron says. " holy cow, aaron its more beast than dog, hes huge" i say. the dog,killer is as big as mickala, who is 5' 10" and 110 lbs
" all ready for detionation, sir" charon says "alright, everyone, into the hole" i shout! so now everyone is in the tunnel and we encounter stray slavers and we cant afford any casualties. " shhhhhh, bogies off the left flank" aaron says. ".........speak english aaron" i say. " slavers down the tunnel to the left, behind us" he says " fire at will" i say
" GO,GO,GO" someone shouts GHHA, im hit" leon says " mikail check him out, Fall back"i say " the bullet went right through him, sir" mikail says. leon gets up and we fall back until we get to the exit and go to rivet city, we let secureity finish up the rest of the stray slavers. " uhh, charon, did you ever detonate" i ask "no, but watch in that direction" charon says. he pushes the detonation button and you can see where the explotion took place, it lookes slightly red and bright. " stingray, any word on leon, we have been standing on the third floor for half an hour" i ask ont the third floor rec. room there are me, stingray, luis, fats, the beta team medik edwin foster, alpha team jericho, and christian, the sniper from delta team who led the remnants of delta from the pitt to rivet city. jericho had left, and left a letter from him to me it read:

ben, you went soft, when i was a raider, we killed everyone, men, women, and kids, when the resistance formed, you were cold blooded, like me, ive left in serch of the brotherhood because they are as cold blooded as me, i hope we can settle our differences man to man
- Jericho

" he's not doing well, you may need a new sniper, mikail and mickala are doing all they can, but with vladimir dead, there morale is down, im sorry.........also we need three people to go to the pitt and assassinate the brotherhood leaders down there, palm is stuck in L.A. and beta is takeing some time off, delta needs a leader, that leaves you guys, alpha team."stingray says " who is allowed to go"i ask? "you,aaron, and one other person, you'll be lightly equiped, and no resistance armor." stingray says " okay, i'll take you and aaron stingray, well leave in half an hour"i say with a smile on my face

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"Alright, to the armory, we will be traveling lightly, Aaron, mabey we can visit the old house we were raised in" I say. "We left our first guns in that safe, and i still have the key, Stingray, andy news on Leon" Aaron asks? Stingray was about 6 feet tall and had black hair in a neetly kept ponytail, and barely showed any emotion at all, looked disturbed. Then he spoke "He's dead, Mikail did everything, cause of death is described as a shot to the liver, he bled out, he was a fighter, most men would have not been able to get up after that" "He was a good man, Ben, but we can't stay for the funeral, Vlad, Robo, and the other one will be burried tomorrow" Aaron says, with grief in his voice "I know, we cant miss this oppertuneity to put an end to the brotherhood's grip on the pitt, tell Fats to take the rest of my crew, after the funeral to Virginia beach to test out the water skis and boats the mechanics there have sold us that they restored, they are vital if we are to dominate this threat" I say. "So what are we going to take to the pitt arms wise"Aaron says "A assult rifle, two side arms, and our concrete cammies as armor" Stingray says. Then a serin, we are under attack. "Stingray,get on the intercom, deploy all avialable units, i want beta and alpha in the trenches, get the snipers on top the ship, boys, lets send them back in a body bag" i say. we had made trenches i front of rivet city, because of the oncomeing threat of the brotherhood, and to protect thge citizens. Me and Aaron rush down the stairs and out the door and hurry to the trenches. Fats and the rest of beta, which i ammended to delta, were already there, the snipers are in place, but where is alpha team i thought to my self. A bullet whizzed by my head, then a mortor hit the trench in front of me, causing chaos to Aaron and Fats, who were on the ground. A whirling sound filled the air, a helicoptor? No, well yes, but not one of ours. It landed on our heli-pad, and a African-American man steped out of the helicoptor and ran inside with about six or seven other men. "Who is that" Fats said? "I dont know, but lets hope there friendly" Aaron says. The rest of delta team had advanced on the, "Wait, there not brotherhood, or enclave, or talon"Fats points out. They had brotherhood armor breast plates, enclave helmenta, but with talon colors. "Mabey the curcuis hit town" Aaron says "but heavly armed and with that outfit" Fats askes? Another mortor hit the trench in front of me"team, set up mortars, fire at will, Brooklyn, take command while i sort out the details with these guys" the African american man says" Hi, my name's Brandon, i am part of the outcasts of talon, the others are on the way, from the brotherhood and enclave, they have about sixty men, we could only spare what you see" this 'Brandon' guy says. "Nice chopper" Fats says "thanks, do you know who they are" Brandon asks"No, all i know is that i've almost been hit twice by a mortar, but my name is Ben Martinez"i say. "Aaron Meadows" Aaron says. "my names Scott, but everyone calls me Fats" Fats says. A mortor goes off about five feet from me. "I see what you mean, Brooklyn, how long on our mortars" Brandon shouts. "We have a serious problem, our medik, got hit, he's dead"Brooklyn says. "Well bag and tag him, you know the routuiene"Brandon says. "Where is Alpha team"i shout? "right here, sorry were late" Mickala says. Then i hear i scream of agony"Ghaa" Someone says "God, Ben they got Mikail, right through the head" I hear Charon say. "NOOOOOOOO, Dad" Mickala says. she jumps right passt me but i grab her leg and she falls in the next trench. "Let me go, Ben they need to pay" She screams." i cant lose any more men, not today, not you, i promised Luis"i say"Jericho, take her inside and put her in a holding cell, i can't take anymore risks, Bring out the rocket launcher on your way out"i say. more helicopters can be heard in the distance "Theres our backup, do you have any more helipads" Brandon asks?
"No, but they could land behind them, if we out flak them, there surrender would be quick" Fats says "I'll radio the orders in, Cheng, tell them to land behind them,"Brandon says "Okay"Cheng says "Walleye, Walleye, this is Romeo, Four Seven in the D, We need you to pigtail around"Cheng says. Then when he says the last word'around' and a bullet ricochettes off the hull of the ship and hits Cheng in the back of the head. " Oh god, holy crap"Brooklyn says. "Listen, Brooklyn get on that squack box and get them those cooredenates now"Brandon says.Then, of all the things that could happen, it started to rain."Why is it raining, wet bullets misfire"Charon points out. "Dont worry, if we advance now and push back the, the, enemy, we will push them to the river, they will surrender"Brandon says "Walleye, this is romeo, how many bogies are hot" Brooklyn asks "about 10 are left romeo, i repeat, 10 left"Walleye says. "Hold on"Jericho says. He fires a rocket right into the middle of the cluster of enemies. "Charge"I say! we fun to where the cluster used to be, and only one is still alive. "Who are you"I ask.
"We are the brotherhood of the cult, you can't win"The guy says.I get out my knife and put it agianst the guys neck."I'll ask you one more time, what is your name"I say."John, more of us will come,you cant win"He says. "Oi, Ben i think he belongs in the looney bin"an austrailian man says. "Who are you"i ask?"My name's Aaidin, i'm the best assult trooper us talon outcasts have"Aaidin says"Brandon, do you have to go back to base"I ask? "No, talon outcasts have put us and the rest of our backup here permanantly, we will defend and protect the ship, and troops are being deployed to your outposts, like
Megaton and Canturbury commons"Brandon says."Alright, Brandon, i feel i can trust you enough as a leader to hold down the fort while were at the pitt"I say "The pitt, no, you cant go there, its to dangerous, brotherhood all over"Brooklyn says. "We have to, and, besides, me and Aaron grew up in the pitt"I say. "Alright,mate, it's your funeral"Aaidin says.we leave for the pitt now. *three days later* "Its about time, where close"Stingray points out. i look up and there is a sign that says
'brotherhood property, all trespassers will be shot on shight' "Shhh, boys, into the river"I say. we all jump into the river
and it smells horrible, like raw sewage and decaying corpses in a blener with rotten moldy cheese. "Oi, i think i'm gonna be sick"stingray says.Stingray throws up. "Ben, we need to go north to get to our old house"Aaron says. to be continued

i'm going to take a little break from wrighting them for a week or so.

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