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SonnyDude
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Character Of a Person


Once there was a family of a boy, mother and father who lived in a town. They had a horse. They were very poor as they were the only people in the town who didn't own a car. They also had a garage which was in a deplorable state and their horse was an eyesore (Not good looking) Itâs hooves were spread wide apart which showed their poverty and the boy was ashamed of it.

The name of the boy was Jack. His mother was a very good person. She never let them feel that they were poor. She new the secrets of using brightly coloured curtains and painted in the right places. This gave the house a better look. She always told her family members that living on little inculcates moral values and if they had character, it was preferable to wealth.

His father was very generous and very honest. Though he got a moderate salary but he spent half of it for supporting his relatives.


Once there was a gala night of the country fair. There was very excitement as the winner of the Shining Buick(an expensive and a good car.) was going to be announced in the lottery. Time of waiting had ended and the winner was Jack's father.

The whole family was very excited and went to home but Jack decided to come late because he wanted to share his joy with his friends.

But when he returned home he saw that there was no sound of celebration and the house was dark. He was confused.

He rushed to his father to share his joy. But....He was shocked of his father's reaction. When he came to hug his father he pushed him away and snarled at him.

When he asked his mother that was the problem, she answered that his father had bought two tickets. One for his Boss and the other for himself. To distinguish between them he marked a small letter 'K' on ticket no. 348 on it's top right corner. The judges did not saw it and told the name of the buyer i.e. Jackâs father.

As his father was very honest, he was feeling depressed that should he give the car to his boss or keep it with himself as he had bought the tickets?

The boy was small and thought that it was an 'open and shut case'(a problem which can be solved easily). He thought that his father bought the tickets so the car belongs to his father not the boss.

His father was not practical about his family and had made the decision in his honesty. He ringed up the boss and told him the truth.

His boss was Jim Kendrick who was a millionaire but he was selfish and greedy. He owned a dozen cars. Instead of offering the car to Jack's father, he sent two chauffeurs to collect it and compensated for it by giving a box of cigars.

When the boy was small he didn't understood his father's decision but when he grew up he understood that by giving the car to the boss his father had proved that he had more character than his boss...

Thanx for reading
~~~SonnyDude~~~


If you were at the place of the boss, what would you have done?? Comments are welcome!!

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Zega
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It's good, but a little confusing...

SonnyDude
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Tell the confusing part and I will clear your confusion.

Zega
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When he asked his mother that was the problem, she answered that his father had bought two tickets. One for his Boss and the other for himself. To distinguish between them he marked a small letter 'K' on ticket no. 348 on it's top right corner. The judges did not saw it and told the name of the buyer i.e. Jackâ??s father.
As his father was very honest, he was feeling depressed that should he give the car to his boss or keep it with himself as he had bought the tickets?
The boy was small and thought that it was an 'open and shut case'(a problem which can be solved easily). He thought that his father bought the tickets so the car belongs to his father not


So many words, and no commas...
SonnyDude
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So many words, and no commas...

So man words?? I didn'y understood this question.

No commas?? Tell me where I have not used a comma and where should I use them.

Zega
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No commas?? Tell me where I have not used a comma and where should I use them.

I'm not gonna get tired talking to you...


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SonnyDude
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Yes.

VoteSocialist
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emotional


I hated it!
SonnyDude
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Wasn't it emotional for a family who had to give away a thing which they badly needed??

VoteSocialist
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Wasn't it emotional for a family who had to give away a thing which they badly needed??


What is "a thing" they gave up?
Zega
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That happens to me too... Sometimes.

VoteSocialist
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Pfff go back to AddictingGames Sonny.

Zega
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Zega you are not giving cars sometimes.


I can't since I don't even have a car. :P But I mean I give away things I really need.
VoteSocialist
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If they lived in a socialist economy then the rich guy would have to give some of his money to the poor guy and everyone would be happy except the rich person!

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1. Grammar and spelling should be fixed.

2. I don't know if the story is touching. I didn't feel emotional.

3. I too don't have a car.

4. I'll keep my eyes open.

VoteSocialist
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I mean I give away things I really need.


Like what? Your baby teeth? Your world of Pokemon?
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