Tell me how if you think my writing is any good. (btw I am not very good with names so any suggestions would be welcome)
The sound of steel on steel filled the air the ground exploded and the smell of burned flesh filled john's nose. As the body of his last victim fell he surveyed the battle field. Dead that thought echoed around his mind over and over his friends, men that he considered brothers, lay with their precious life blood spilled all over the ground. Grim acceptance filled him they had all known before they ever started drawing the battle plans that most, if not all, if them would die this night. As he turned back to the fight John just hoped that this desperate battle had bought them enough time.....
"Hurry" panted Nick as he came running up from behind. "They realized we are here." Abandoning any further attempts at stealth the rest of the men took off running if they could just make it to the door. "Halt. Go no farther" yelled the captain of the guards appearing from a side corridor. "You go on" said a smiling nick "Just make sure you tell them to include my name when they make stories about us" "You've been a good friend nick" announced Austin. Turning away with the half of the men he was in charge of he set of running with the bundle securely tucked under his arm that had cost them so much to get. They managed to get out the back doors undeterred and to the appointed field as the sun was setting. Watching the smoke from the battlefield spin lazily into the sky austin heard a voice devoid of emotion behind him. "Do you have what we came for?" demanded the voice who belonged to a man appearing of his middle years. "Ya I got it" said ausin roughly. "Very good" replied the man let me see his face. Austin set down the bundle gently and unwrapped it to reveal....a sleeping baby's face.
Now If this is no good then I won't even bother continuing to write it critisism i welcome but please no "wow this is crap" posts thank you
