Meh... Just trying my hand at making Sonny's story from Sonny 1.
Chapter 1 - The Ship I thought i was going to die... But then i see a sudden flash of light... Then a voice calls out to me, "Wake up Sonny!" shortly after that a staggering attempt to talk comes from Sonny, "Ugh..." once again the voice talks to him, "We have to go now Sonny" Sonny replies, "W-who are you?" the mysterious man responds, "I'm Luis, Do you have a weapon?" Sonny looks around and finds a pipe. He grabs it and asks, "How about this pipe?" Luis replies, "That will do! Grab it and come with me!" they climb up the the stairs of the ship and ascend to the deck... Suddenly, a man with glowing red skin approaches them. Sonny asks, "Who's he?" Luis replies, "He's no longer human, He's a zombie. Prepare yourself!" Sonny says, "Prepare myself for what?" suddenly as Sonny talks to Luis the zombie lunges at Sonny but Sonny quickly reacts to the situation and hits it square in the face. The zombie staggers backwards and makes another attempt at a lunge, Sonny holds up his Pipe and hits the Zombie 3 times in succession. It finally drops dead lying in a pool of blood. Luis says, "Good job Sonny. But be prepared, More of them are on this ship..."
I liked it, but I would like to see your dialouge seperated from the discriptive areas.
Also, that part would be easy to write since it was basically the opening movie of the game. So your real test will be the areas with not much story.
Also, I want to write a background story on Galiant the Palidan, his rise from a soldier to a general, then being asked to command the ground forces of the ZPCI. Don't know if I have time for it though, so if you want to you can write it Riou.
Sonny's Journal - Day 1 Today i fought some kind of zombie... Luis explained to me that it was called a "Metabee" but i still don't understand how Luis can explain these things to me even though he's blind, Oh well. Right now were looking for a way off this cursed ship, The Ship's in a complete state of wreck, The floorboards have large holes, the control room is completely demolished, and the motor won't start. I gave Luis the idea that we could be able to swim through the water towards shore but he said that we would eventually drown because we would become tired.
