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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'
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Be good then you're good
Be bad then you will be bad
Good or bad?choose one
To many friggen wolves on one page, too confused!
Who is judging?
Who is judging?
Me. The current round ends in 25.3hrs, so get 'em in. Murasaki gets the next round.
Be good,Christ loves you
Be bad,devils will get you
Good or bad?choose one
@Lee_Blade
Please confirm which one is your final entry before the round ends.
Well, now that the round's over, I'll count that last entry as your final submission, unless you state otherwise before I'm done judging, which should be Friday.
I'll probably get it done before Friday because there are only 10 entries this round (unless I missed someone's). Murasaki controls the next round, so I suppose she could give the new theme early in case some of you want to draft your poems (but don't post them until the next round officially starts).
In the meantime, make sure I've got everyone's:
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pangtongshu
Blood dries on his knife
We curse, despite our hunger
As he hands us bread
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marton96
Though I am not nice
Cheer and spice and happy things
Always make me smile
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nichodemus
She teases in red,
Giggles with faux innocence,
Tugging at my tie.
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MagicTree
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Rather, nice?
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xerox
Naughty or just Nice?
There are presents for you all
Santa do not cares.
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killersup10 (CAN'T WIN THIS ROUND!)
A bloody soaked shirt
Small armies terrorize them
The fat man in charge
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xXxDAPRO89xXx
You naughty or nice?
Better make up your mind soon!
Or coal you shall get!
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Maverick4
Friend, what have you done?
Innocent blood you have spilled,
To placate the crowd.
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Arceus12
Good, good or bad, bad,
If you're good nobody cares,
But cops will get you.
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Lee_Blade
Be good,Christ loves you
Be bad,devils will get you
Good or bad?choose one
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Killersup never got his bucket of oranges as his prize from last week....
Take your time Emp.
Well, it seems I a little late posting the NEW theme. So, here it is:
Restoration
But like Emperor said, don't post your poems until the new round starts: OFFICIALLY, in other words, wait until you see the results of this round and you see me post the due date for the ensuing round.
Restoration? Hmmm i should think on that. I keep on failing in making haiku so this time im gonna make few of them and combine the best parts for more dramatic results.
Hopefully, copying from Notepad will work...
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pangtongshu
Blood dries on his knife
We curse, despite our hunger
As he hands us bread
Ah, the kind executioner. A tasteful twist on the theme. I like the overall imagery. It's difficult to paint a picture in so few words, but you did.
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marton96
Though I am not nice
Cheer and spice and happy things
Always make me smile
The alliteration was good (Make Me sMile). I like the uplifting simplicity of this one. There are plenty of 2 syllable words that could've filled the space for 'not nice', but 'not nice' seems to be the most fitting.
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nichodemus
She teases in red,
Giggles with faux innocence,
Tugging at my tie.
Woah now. Well, my internet security was blocking the thread for porn due to 'naughty' in the title anyway, so whatever.
This has a great flow due to the alliteration (shE tEases; fAUX innOcence).
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MagicTree
Blazing fire, chilled ice,
Between the edge of two worlds.
Naughty? Rather, nice?
The sharp contrast really illustrates the theme. It depicts the Yin-Yang balance of our choices. Very nice.
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xerox
Naughty or just Nice?
There are presents for you all
Santa do not cares.
*does not care
Other than that, it reminds us that this is a time of generosity for everyone to enjoy. And that reminds me of this.
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killersup10 (CAN'T WIN THIS ROUND!)
A bloody soaked shirt
Small armies terrorize them
The fat man in charge
Who is "them"? "Bloody soaked" doesn't make sense. "Blood soaked" is the usual expression, but the syllable count would be off.
Anyway, I see that you went for the Naughty side. This reminds me of Stalin and his Secret Police. Very naughty, indeed.
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xXxDAPRO89xXx
You naughty or nice?
Better make up your mind soon!
Or coal you shall get!
I don't know how one could recite this without using an east-coast mobster accent. It would've been far better if the adverse consequence was abstractly implied instead of directly stated.
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Maverick4
Friend, what have you done?
Innocent blood you have spilled,
To placate the crowd.
I can't help but be reminded of Mark 15.
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Arceus12
Good, good or bad, bad,
If you're good nobody cares,
But cops will get you.
This feels incomplete, as though it needs another line to convey the meaning of the last line. I understand that you meant "but if you commit a crime, cops will get you", but it's much better if the full message is in the poem itself. Condensing a full idea to 17 words or less is a challenge. Rise to it.
Anyway, I like that it shows the one-sidedness of society doing too little to exemplify good behavior, and instead focusing on the negative. A good idea, but unfinished.
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Lee_Blade
Be good,Christ loves you
Be bad,devils will get you
Good or bad?choose one
A very blunt, black-and-white interpretation. I would've preferred a Paradise Lost twist instead.
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And the winner is...
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Maverick4
This was the sort of interpretation I was hoping for: Something that, to some, was considered good, but to others, bad; it exemplified a pitfall of the Principle of Utility with elegance. Well done.
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Maverick4's poem will be proudly displayed in the about of the account HaikuContestWinners, at least until an official archive is made.
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The next theme, as chosen by murasaki9, is: Restoration. She will be judging and will give the due date soon. Have fun, everyone!
My Thanksgivings winner is still not on the page.
Thanks for judging again~.
My Thanksgivings winner is still not on the page.
Fix'd (or at least it should be).
Thanks for judging again~.
Anytime.
Oh, and
IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT THINGY!!!
For me, school starts in a little over 2 weeks. It shouldn't be much trouble because these don't take very long (at least when there are few entries), but I'll be searching for another co-judge again. If you are interested in the position and you'll have the time and can show that you have a decent understanding of poetry and can interpret deeper meanings in it, please massage me, and also send me a message.
I will not massage you, but I can take a couple of rounds before my army service starts in February.
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