ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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hypoxia
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For thy brown giant
A mighty foe to every
Nothing can compare

shayneii
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Majestic, pronounced, great.
Undisturbed, peaceful.
Sleep; hibernation.

Meh... not that great this time...

dudeguy45
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Entries closed. Imma take a swing at judging. >.>

dudeguy45
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Ok, the judging is in!

I'm going to give everyone medals!


10th Place:


Howlett!

My honey is yuck
It tastes like my foot
and it smells like muck.

The ryming kinda throws it off. And no honey is yuck.

9th place:

Owen135731!


Bears use camouflage,
They're the ninjas of nature.
But then...Boom! Headshot!

You said it yourself... and ninjas are quick. Bears are lumbering.

8th place:

jaza_m!

My fur is sticky
From eating to much honey
I am not pooh bear.

Very little context clues, and you can never eat too much honey.

7th place is off to:

jdoggparty!

Three scratches engraved
BEARS! Wait, whats under the scratches?
Oh, my fingernails

DOH! Middle line is eight sylables. Plus I liked your first version better. Still, there's nothing like being alone in the forest a seeing scratch marks on a tree, and hearing heavy breathing behind you.


6th place goes too:


yielee!


In The Berry Bush,
The Sound Of Bears Approaching!
...crouching down to hide.

I would'nt croutch. I'd run.


Wood (5th place):


shayneii!

Majestic, pronounced, great.
Undisturbed, peaceful.
Sleep; hibernation.

Very nice description, but not much to the theme.

Bronze (4th place):

TSL3!

The bear sleeps 'til spring
For then it will awaken
And eat the salmon.

Not only salmon! Could of replaced some words to fancier words, like instead of "eat", "gouge". Queer.

Silver (3rd place):

hypoxia!


For thy brown giant
A mighty foe to every
Nothing can compare

Very little to relate to the theme, but if you know it, you definetly hit the description nail on the head.


Gold (2nd place):


marioman327!

Storm of long, brown hair
Majesty mixed with terror
I will not survive

Once again, if you did'nt know the theme, you would have trouble guessing, but if you did, excellent.

SUPER PLATNUM! (Winner):

choazmachine!

My porridge is gone
The honey is now empty
Culprit sleeps soundly

As someone said, this is excellent. Again, I would run away from my house. Just tell Zophia? or Carlie you won the Haiku contest. Also, pick the theme by Sunday.


Sorry in advance if this post looks... ugly.


HAPPY HAIKUING!

TSL3_needed
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Queer.


Gaywad.

So I'm assuming I did good for my first haiku in years?

I could swear some of these have their syllables way off. Just a thought.
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Where is my champy xzibit? :..(

Congrats for winning the award named after me TSL xD

dudeguy45
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OK, I'll pick the theme.

Pristine Mountain Spring.

TSL3_needed
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Cold and running clear
It seeps through the mountain air
Only to be drank.

I can do better, but okay.

Owen135731
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I swam in the spring,
I glanced ahead; Waterfall.
Death from jagged rocks.


The last line of mine are always depressing

choazmachine
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Sweet! I can't believe I won! Then again the most simplest poems can be the best.

Thank you dudeguy.

And I guess I'll submit another poem, though I can't win, I still can place well:

Serenity:

The woods run bountiful
The water is crisp and clear
Lair of the angels

choazmachine
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D'oh! I coulda picked the theme?! Ergh, if only I known I could...
Oh well, I like this theme.

I swam in the spring,
I glanced ahead; Waterfall.
Death from jagged rocks.
The last line of mine are always depressing


Do you wish for me to critique your work?
howlett
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Looking from the mountain tops
The water crystal clear
With a waterfall above

dudeguy45
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howlett, the syllables are 5, 7, 5. Your first line is 7.

marioman327
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Ataraxia
Liquid crystals shroud my woes
Drenching me in peace

Owen135731
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Do you wish for me to critique your work?


I couldn't care less. I put very little effort and time into these.
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