ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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hypoxia
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'Pine - Crushed Beneath my Feet'

ahhhh, how many syllables is that line?

Bronze
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6 my syllables my man, but I'm sure you already knew that...

shayneii
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Yay... judging today (I think). I don't think we have as many entries this theme though :\\

hypoxia
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Ok, the legit version, hope it's in time.

A Single Sweet Scent
Pine - Broken Beneath my Feet
Great Thoughts Spring to Mind

Maverick4
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Ok, Entries Are Now Closed! Judging now. Be done in a few...

Maverick4
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Teh Judging!

Well, since a mistake on my part, I messed up last weeks Champions exibit. So, heres a fixed one (I hope)

Champions Exibit: Ernie and Bronze

Ernie:

The trees up above
Mock me as I sit seaward
The branches in vain


Bronze:

This boreal is real
City of trees, sea of pines
For miles unseen


The two champions, Ernie from the last contest, and Bronze from the last-last contest. Oh, Doesnt that just make sense...?

Wood Plaque Award: Shayneii

Crisp breeze; autumn air
Whooshing wind, swirling needles;
Needles bathe my feet.


You were going good, till the last line. The flow kinda stoped, and the repeat of 'needles' right after eachother kinda killed it. Still you did rank, right?

Silver Plaque: TerryLasVegas

The sea is peaceful
Cold air rushing through the pines
Swaying in the wind


Pretty Good. You described it really well, and it just worked. And it also seems that those that regularly show up are getting better in their works...

Gold Plaque: DudeGuy45

At the peaceful cove
Millions of pine trees grow
Sit down, take it in.


Its descriptive, and it fits the scence really well. However, 'cove' and 'grow' sound similar, and sorta throw the haiku off just a tad bit...

Platinum-Certified Plaque: hypoxia

A Single Sweet Scent
Pine - Broken Beneath my Feet
Great Thoughts Spring to Mind


This means you've won a merit! Yay! Go as Carlie and tell her you won the 'Haiku Contest'

And as a special prize, you get to decide the next topic. The deadline will be one week from whenever hypoxiz decideds. However, if he/you don't decide by Friday afternoon, I'll have to pick it.

Congratz to those who placed, and those who didn't, good job, and better luck next time.
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The Pond: Alt
The Fruit Tree: GuitarHeroFTW
Mountains: Hectichermit
Through The Haze: Yielee
In a Garden: Bronze
Longest Road: Ernie15
Pine Sea: hypoxia
???: ???
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shayneii
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Blah. I knew my ending sucked lol

At least I at least placed this time. Congratulations to hypoxia!

hypoxia
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WOOT Ty Shayneii

I won

Um, the topic will be...

'An Autumn Day'

Dudettegal54
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Wait. so rhyming=bad?

Why the hell do people do DudeGuy? Dudeguy!

jdoggparty
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Hmm. An Autumn Day.

Left and Right through pathes
Finish detector beeping
SPLODE!!! Finished the maze

TerryLasVegas
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At least I got a mention and thats what makes me happy.

Dudettegal54
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Walking down the lane
I see a leaf pile, jump!
Ouch! A fan on curb!

Ernie15
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Cold, breezy autumn
Leaves rustling, cool winds blowing
Life is just too good

The word "rustling" is two syllables in this poem.

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The sun moves backwards
Letting the trees take a break
The pines choose not too?

Ernie15
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The pines choose not too?


Is that a typo or am I just really bad with interpreting writing?
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