ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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dudeguy45
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I think shayneii is inactive ATM... *ugh* I really don't want to judge.. how about a guest judge?

dudeguy45
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WEll? Guest judging? Anyone?

Bronze
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Fine I'll do it. I'll judge on Tuesday if thats ok.

whimsyboy
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Whispering softly
I am here, prepare yourselves
It comes down gently

That's my official one...
...lol it's such a fail...

SilentQ
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I've made a better one~!

Powdered snow always,
Never blizzard, never hail,
Unending wonder.

DD

Maverick4
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Just popped in to see how things are going. Thanks SHayneii and Dude/Alex. Debating with my morals and ethics whether (weather...) or not I should enter. But anywho...

Keep it up m8(s).

Thyll
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A cold, brutal chill
Bite, but flames light up my heart
Beauty, Glory; Snow

Thyll
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I just had to fix it...

A cold, brutal chill
*Bites, but flames light up my heart
Beauty, Glory; Snow

Bronze
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Judging...now!

All entries after this post are void (even though I highly doubt one would be entered).

If you only submitted an 'unofficial' entry I'm gonna judge it anyway, it still has a chance to win.

*DISCLAIMER* I'm not a pro at haikus, if it appeals to me and fits into the theme it has a high chance of winning.

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GO GO RANDOM HAIKU ENTRY MADE IN 3 SECONDS FREE STYLE IMPROVISATION!

The snow is falling!
It is very very cold!
IMPROVISATION!

jdoggparty
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I haven't been on this for a while. That shouldn't effect my haiku.

A Green Christmas sucks
There has to be snow somewhere
Maybe the North Pole

SilentQ
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JDoggparty, whats up?
Don't you know entries are closed?
Read the post by Bronze.

YAY FOR MORE IMPROV.

dudeguy45
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I bless you, bearded buddy.

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Unexpected entries are unexpected XD

Bronze
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This was tough. many of the entries that didn't place arguably could of placed. I'm confident in my first 3, but may of the ones after that could of been interchanged.

*Sorry it took so long, I did a lot of other things at the same time.

The 5-5-5 Award: jaza_m

A white bed of snow,
Blankets the soft earth
Its time for deep sleep

Nice imagery and such, but that is all null when your second line has 5 syllables. COME ON MAN!!

The Snowday Award: Dudeguy

wake up at 9 clock
think your late for school, but no!
witness the whitness

Nice Haiku BUDDY! I can remember the feeling of a snowday and this is one of the Haikus that could of been interchanged with any of the ones that placed.

The Icy Roads Award: Owen

Children are playing.
Making snowmen is so fun.
The cars skid and crash.

Good overall haiku, but I'm not a fan of haikus changing overall subjects. Some people like that, and you did it well, but it just isn't my style. AND this haiku could of fit into any snowy/winter day, not necessarily the first snow.

The First Day of Winter Award: enterorion

The sweet frigid frost,
Its icy crust glitters,
It's winters first day.

Lets be straight and simple, this is probably the best written haiku of the whole bunch. A beautiful choice of words and great imagery, BUT it isn't even about snow.

The Winter Wonderland Award: SilentQ

Powdered snow always,
Never blizzard, never hail,
Unending wonder.

I had a tough time with this one because I really wanted to place it. The only thing that kept it out was that I feel like it is just about snow in general, am I wrong?

Warming by the Fire Award: Thyll

A cold, brutal chill
Bites, but flames light up my heart
Beauty, Glory; Snow

Just like enterorion's in the fact that it is very well written, but even though it mentions snow, I just feel like it is about winter.

The Wood Award (5th): Howlett

Look out the window
Seeing the snowy pathway
Run outside and freeze

Haha, that is so true. One could argue that this is just about snow in general too, but I feel like the word choice was done correctly. I can feel the excitement of the [child] all the way up to the point until it realizes how cold it is. Now I ask you, if this was say...the second snow, would that child run out to just get frozen again?

The Bronze Award (named after me - 4th): Mario

Too early to mourn
Too late to anticipate
Wish it was summer

No it doesn't mention snow, and it could probably just be about winter, but I also felt it was a good emotion for the first snow also.

The Silver Award (3rd): Adios

The sun has left now,
The grass is under a veil.
This is the first snow.

The only guy to literally put THE FIRST SNOW. Its well done and straight foward, and sometimes simpleness is better than complexity

The Gold Award (2nd): Whimsy

Whispering softly
I am here, prepare yourselves
It comes down gently

Can Haikus use personification? Well this one did and there is no doubt that it is about the first snow. Very well done and there is no doubt that it is about the first snow and it only missed out on winning by about...I don't know...one percent.

And that leaves...

The Platnium Award (1st - Winner): Devoidless

Resplendent snow falls
Taken away whilst I sleep
Reminded of you

The snow brings so many emotions, whether it be sadness or happiness. Void's haiku is darkly beautiful and well written. Now I can see that it might not fit the theme perfectly, but lets look at the word resplendent. When I think of the first snow, I usually think of very clean (shiney) snow. This is also a reason why I feel like Void's was deservedly first, because he conveyed the theme so subtly, which left him more room to elaborate on other things such as emotion. Basically, he fit a lot in such a little thing.

Congratulations Voidy, I wonder if you are gonna give the merit to yourself...Oh and pick the next theme!

*Sorry about my pickiness to the theme, I learned that from Cen and Zophia, so blame them!

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