ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

5299 3121980
Maverick4
offline
Maverick4
6,800 posts
Peasant

A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

  • 5,299 Replies
daleks
offline
daleks
3,766 posts
Chamberlain

The round is over EnterOrion but nice haiku.

acmed
offline
acmed
3,517 posts
Nomad

Okay guys.... WHAZZUP!?!?!

Though many people say that my personality is the cause of this thread nearly going down the toilet, we must #YOLO!
(no yolo, I'm sorry)

Nothing has changed...

except for my judging....
and dudeguy co-opping as a judge with me....
and Gantic on the verge of hacking my account with explosives....
OKAY!

If you did not place, please hit it up on my profile. Not dudeguy's. Mine's cooler.

Neither me or dudeguy will or can be participating in the contest, because we can basically choose our own theme... So yeah.

We had 11 poems.

So let's rock this boulder... hehe, boulder, rock... no?

_____________________________________________________________________

5th Place: jeol

The flaming water,
Billowing, gushing, burping -
Sea of molten rock


It was a pretty good scene. I applaud that. Maybe next time try to stretch your vocab a little. Not too cliche. But good job.

4th Place: CheapCheap

The water flaming
Red and orange reflects off blue
How did it happen?


I like the question of this one. What did happen to make the peace go? Way to keep it interesting! Keep it up!

3rd Place: killersup10

hatefull inferno
burning inside sanity
embers smolder hope


Nice wording. I really like the way it's put together. You put a rather destruction scene into beautiful words... I LOVE YOU... I mean, uh, the haiku...

2nd Place: Jazmoon

Flame tempts, course with fire
bottle laughs, gurgling with glee
Morning, i'm reborn


I think the flow through this one was fantastic. The words were spread out just enough for me to feel the full effect. Nice one Jazzy!

1st Place (non merit winner...): aknerd

A drowning phoenix
Caught in eternal rebirth
Born knowing its end


SINISTER. I LIKE IT. DIE PHOENIX. Nah. But the emotion did catch me, and it caught my attention as the winner for this round! Yours really has the heart in it all. Here! Take this... self achievement!

_____________________________________________________________________


Nice one fellas! Good job to all!

So, uh, dudeguy45 will be judging you guys on the theme: Love and Go Seek. Due July 13th.

AHHHHHH! FRIDAY THE 13TH!

RUN and good luck!

thisisnotanalt
offline
thisisnotanalt
9,821 posts
Shepherd

Though many people say that my personality is the cause of this thread nearly going down the toilet, we must #YOLO!


It's not your personality. Your judging just blows ****.
EnterOrion
offline
EnterOrion
4,220 posts
Nomad

The round is over EnterOrion but nice haiku.


Judging by the fact you called me by my full username, you must not know me. Please, just call me Orion.

Yes, I know I was late. It wasn't entirely necessary for you to explain that.

It's not your personality. Your judging just blows ****.


What a terrible thing to say!
daleks
offline
daleks
3,766 posts
Chamberlain

Please, just call me Orion.

I will try to remember that. I am bad at names though.
It wasn't entirely necessary for you to explain that.

O, OK. Just most people don't know if they post late. Didn't want you getting mad that yours didn't count.
GhostOfMatrix
offline
GhostOfMatrix
15,595 posts
Herald

Though many people say that my personality is the cause of this thread nearly going down the toilet, we must

The key words in Gantic's post was lackluster judging, which it still appears to be. You're writing two short generic sentences for each poem. I could do that and I'm terrible at poetry. Put some more thought into it like Fallen, Maverick, and Frank used to.
acmed
offline
acmed
3,517 posts
Nomad

Okay then. Badger me. I won't be judging every time, so I guess I'll learn from dudeguy who will be judging this round.

nichodemus
offline
nichodemus
14,991 posts
Grand Duke

Tip: Analyse the poetry itself, and not just give some skimpy comments. Don't appreciate the diction? Why? Was it too generic? Vague? Not impactful enough? How was the rhythm, tone, imagery used? Might be stretching in a Haiku, but they are still possible to talk about. Treat the poetry as someone you have to interrogate. Go in depth.

GhostOfMatrix
offline
GhostOfMatrix
15,595 posts
Herald

Michael is full of
love and hate, searching for his
dear sister Laurie.

Jason was loving
till he drowned at Crystal Lake;
now he pursues kids.

Yes, I referenced famous horror films. Yes, I know that I can only enter one haiku. I'll try to make a better one some other time or decide on which of those I want to enter.

Jazmoon
offline
Jazmoon
561 posts
Peasant

Thanks for second n.n i do want this comp still to continue merit or not and i hope people still take part. The fun and creativity in writing poems should be the reason people enter not a silly merit, but it dose encourage people to join in which is good.

CheapCheep
offline
CheapCheep
240 posts
Nomad

Story of OUR lives

Love is like a book.
When the beginnings look bleak;
They end happily.

Yay, I placed. (4th, but whatever...) I was waiting for this kind of prompt. (Still not my best poem but again, whatever) Right now, I have a crush on a girl. I've been trying to write that perfect poem/story but attempts fail.


Anyway, i'll keep trying!

killersup10
offline
killersup10
2,739 posts
Blacksmith

3rd....


Killersup's closest thing to thinking of love in a poetic form


cutting hearts daily
ripping emotions apart
deathly love come here.

murasaki9
offline
murasaki9
1,388 posts
Blacksmith

Oh my blackberries!! My haiku abilities must have gone bad. I didn't even place. Next time.

Now to try again!! DD

Love dropped down and died
Hope flowed away to find it
but it was lost, gone

Jazmoon
offline
Jazmoon
561 posts
Peasant

Seek venture my sweet
Palpation of thy heart beat
let fly, dread to fall

bit soppy but i gave it my best shot XD

aknerd
offline
aknerd
1,416 posts
Peasant

This tree held by fire
Caressed branches fall and burn
As flames yearn for heights

Showing 4336-4350 of 5299