A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
Well, that said, heres the rules:
1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)! 2) It must fit the weeks theme 3) It must be submitted before the deadline 4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written) 5) One Submission per user 6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)
Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...
The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond
A lot of the entries were too similar to really stand out, so here's the top 5 in no particular order.
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kevin8ye
Darkness fills the world Invaders raid the city All that's left is death
This does a good job of describing abstract desolation. When a nation rises against another, no good comes from it. My only complaint is the last line. It's a bit awkward. Something truly finite like "Only death remains" would have been better.
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IC4I
Rise up my brother! Our time to fall is not now. It is yet to come.
A great depiction of comradery. It reminds me of WWII when the Russians had to ration ammo to one soldier and guns to another. It acknowledges the inevitable without being dismal.
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shock457
My heart is in vain, I shall rise from the ashes, With a pure of heart
This reminds me of Batman: taking a bad situation as a reason to better yourself and create change.
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rayoflight3
*****s be oppressed. Finna cap an ofay's ***. We ain't playin', son.
Although I'm not really a fan of the language, this reminded me of the riots in England last year and accurately expressed the views of the average punk.
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ProfessorOak
Hold your sadness in Another day gone to waste It becomes too much
This really portrays the bottled-up emotion that precedes unrest in any situation.
Hmm strange, All the Haiku I've seen in Japan, is about going around the meaning, and at the same time reaching to the heart of the problem. They usually have strange meaning and the lines are not connected with each other, but at the same time they are in a simple way. Any haiku that has a meaning and you can understand it because its written too obvious, i just cant accept it as a haiku. I've learned that for good haiku, the last phrase is most important. It grabs the whole meaning, and underlines the first two lines of the haiku.
Btw my haiku reminds is about the French Revolution..About the poor who walk on the streets, and they uprise from the darkness, to stand against the rich They want to reach the sky, but are oppressed and in pain, by the royals. So anyway, the poor are sick of paying so much money so the rich to live heaven... But now that i think of it my haiku has a repeating element on the second line, that removes the meaning of the third.. I should have noticed that earlier...
Ignore the fact that I Double posted and that I'm now committing the terrible act of Triple posting. I forgot to give the deadline. Two weeks to get everything in. Contests ends November 12th, 2012.
