ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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thepossum
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Curiosity,
Supposedly killed the cat.
But, cats have nine lives.

Critique?

FallenSky
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Honestly, I can't really guess how I'm going to judge that. At the moment however I find it clever; clever in a funny way.

So yeah, thanks Avorne for the theme, this is going to be incredibly hard being objective and constructive on such a theme...

Don't worry, I still like you Av

wolf1991
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Desire

Show me how to love.
For I have fallen to grief.
I'm yours, forever.

Zaork
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I'm not even gonna mention trees this time

Novelty of thought
Suppressing introspection
Convoluted mess

Saving123
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It rhymes, nonetheless, it is very true...

I am not a ****
Just a very bad artist
Hail Lady Gaga


That's right I didn't notice that singer rhymed with Bieber too bad.
There are no longer many god musicians. We are running out of Talent soon I will win a Grammy, for being the most awesome-est person alive.
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I wish to change my Haiku. *Important*
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[b]We are selfish things
Anything is permitted,
even murder is fair.
HahiHa
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Er, my creativity runs flat on that subject.. there's so much to tell, yet nothing really important

Saving123
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Too much to fit into a certain amount of space. Like trying to update your Facebook status.

pHacon
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Curiosity,
For knowing what we are does
Not make us less so.


Replace with:

Curiosity
For power lies in knowledge.
Seeming salvation.

This is what happens when I put down the first crap that comes to my mind.. I need to start thinking a little first.
Graham
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Herein lies your gate,
enshrouded amidst martyrs.
Will you find the key?

Saving123
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Now that I think about it I think that I might end up with either "The Prince Award" or the "Machiavelli Award". Seeing as to my haiku is connected with Machiavelli's theory that humans are self-centered and that they should do whatever they need to so that they are successful. Even if it means lying to the public, or stealing, cheating, even murder.
Or something I don't pay attention to my history teacher. Last years teacher was better but I can complain all I want nothing will happen.

FallenSky
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Seeing as to my haiku is connected with Machiavelli's theory that humans are self-centered and that they should do whatever they need to so that they are successful. Even if it means lying to the public, or stealing, cheating, even murder.

My my...Are we going to make some philosophy here?
What about it, what do you think? Can you conceive such a concept as true altruism; do you believe altruism even exists?
Why am I writting this for in your opinion ^^?

Saving123
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Actually wouldn't it be selfish not selfless to do what ever it takes to get to the top? Machivelli said that "A prince never lacks legitimate reasons to break his promises."

Saying that you should do whatever you need to even if it involves getting your hands dirty.

Or maybe I'm lost here.

(Confused)

dudeguy45
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a tree surrounded
by dunes and an arid world
a haven in hell

Graham
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What about it, what do you think? Can you conceive such a concept as true altruism; do you believe altruism even exists?


The problem with altruism is the emotions associated with it. You get a sense of pleasure from seeing others succeed from your help, as if you're succeeding as well. You help people for the emotions associated with it; selfishness.

^Totally just saying this off the top of my head.^
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Peeplot makes a poem now.

Humans are liars
Don't believe a word they say.
Everybody lies

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