ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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acmed
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Congrats to the winner



There is no winner yet.
Alexistigerspice
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No rush bruhh. I like writing words in a poetic fashion.

AiceX
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There is no winner yet.


Sorry for being illiterate..

*Pregrats to the winner.
acmed
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Alright guys, sorry for the delay. Progress Reports soon, so teachers stack on the homework. Yaaaaay.

Alright. This week's theme was The Battle Begins. Very cliche, acmed. Very cliche...

20 entries this round. Really good. I'm proud of you all. FREE IPADS FOR EVERYONE!!!!!!

Back to seriousness (Wow! That's a word!), if you don't place in the top 5 and want your haiku to be commented on, go to my page, post your haiku, and I'll will be happy (more like forced) to tell you how much you suck at poetry. (:

As Freakenstein would say, FUS'RO'DAH! (let's judge this mothertrucker)

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5th Place: jeol


Came in formation,
Prepared for war, all crying -
"We are the elite!"


'We are the elite!' I like it. You put it into YOUR words, not anything cliche about a battle. You did good, but I think you'd place higher if you made the scene more detailed/larger. Good job!

4th Place: nichodemus

Abandoned lover,
Stabbing a faltering heart,
Now my enemy.


I liked how you twisted the theme a bit. The wording was good, the flow was really nice, and stuck it at the end. Continue to do good nichodemus!

3rd Place: KappaSig658

Eyes fixed on our foes.
No thoughts, No moves; We wait 'til
our 'trump sounds the charge.


A little cliche, but I really liked this one. The plot is simple, but it's detailed and very interesting. Keep it up!

2nd Place: Graham

It was a quiet
morning, and with the first shell,
I bid them, farewell


Wow. Again, I love the way you use the words in your poems. It makes me want to hug you. That's how good the flow and the wording was. Keep going. You're so close to a merit!

1st Place Merit Winner: Llamasushi

Sadness, sorrow, grief
Longing for mother, she weeps.
I sow destruction


This one was beautiful. The flow was better than all I've seen this round. You showed the battle, not in action, but in emotion, and I really liked that. Be sure to contact a mod and ask for a merit! GOOD JOB!

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I'm done with you people. Good.

Alright, let's see. The next due date will be on December 19th, and let's make the theme... Snowing of the Angels. You can make sense of it however you want. Good luck! Stay in school! Drug free! Woo!

nichodemus
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You will see how my works revolve a lot around love and rejection.

MagicTree
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Glittering angels,
Their kind voices soothing me,
As I celebrate

Maverick4
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How gently they fall.
Wings whisper in the breeze;
Oh so delicate.

Meh. I might change it later on.

GlimmeringStars
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Awkward theme for me.
I'll try work on something before the deadline.

daleks
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Meh. I might change it later on.

You probably should change it. The second line seems to only have 6 syllables by my count.

I am thinking of trying out this thread. Tough theme though.
daleks
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Coming from above,
Beautiful beings with snow,
Making this world white

Maverick4
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How gently they fall.
Wings whispering in the breeze;
Oh so delicate.

Thanks Daleks, for pointing that out.

nichodemus
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Pale and white she sobs,
Bittersweet an angel weeps,
Cradled in my arms.

Seashark001
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They fall from above
Singing their sweet song of joy
As they come to us.

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Cascading heav'nly
noise reaches ears of mortals:
A joyous noise sounds.

I'm really starting to get into the habit of dropping syllables.

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Like snowflakes they fall
Landing on rosy cheeks,and
Bless us with a kiss.

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