ForumsArt, Music, and WritingHaiku Contest - Broken Bond (page 531, due: Feb 2)

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Maverick4
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Peasant

A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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Maverick4
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Peasant

Without warning, love
Left me, it seems, while I slept.
Tears, like raindrops, fall.

kevin8ye
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Nomad

Without warning, love
Left me, it seems, while I slept.
Tears, like raindrops, fall.


U have a mistake on middle line.

Left (1) me (1) it (1) seems (1) while (2) i (1) slept(1)
EmperorPalpatine
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Jester

while (2)

HowManySyllables, Mirriam Webster, and Dictionary say it's 1. I'll consider it like the word fire, it counts in favor of the participant.
pangtongshu
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Jester

meh


Man..that wasn't even close to the required syllables =p
Max000_Extreme
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Peasant

Frog is not a frog
Because if a frog is a frog
Flies will roam no more

pangtongshu
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Jester

Frog is not a frog
Because if a frog is a frog
Flies will roam no more


2nd line had 8 syllables. first off. Second off...what does this have to do with Silence?
Darktroop07
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Shepherd

2nd line had 8 syllables. first off. Second off...what does this have to do with Silence?

The fly is making noise and by the frog eating it the noise is killed off.
Skeleton_Pilot
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Blacksmith

Where did the sound go?
This is just ridiculous...
I can't hear nothin'!

killersup10
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Blacksmith

suicide quite
blissfullness covers everyone
eternal silence


Is this a proper haiku?

Ernie15
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Bard

Is this a proper haiku?


No, a haiku follows a 5-7-5 syllable scheme. Yours is 4-8-5.
goumas13
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Grand Duke

Pause. Listen softly
Silence surrounds you, quiet
Finally some peace

killersup10
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Blacksmith

suicide peacefull
blissfullness covers all
eternal silence

Now is this one 5-7-5?

acmed
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Nomad

blissfullness covers all


6 syllables.
killersup10
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Blacksmith

suicide peacefull
blissfullness shrouds evil minds
eternal silence


better?

nichodemus
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Grand Duke

Yes.

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