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Maverick4
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A Haiku is a Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

Well, that said, heres the rules:

1) The Haiku must be original (no plagarizing)!
2) It must fit the weeks theme
3) It must be submitted before the deadline
4) It must be submitted for the contest (no using works previously written)
5) One Submission per user
6) The Same User cannot win twice in a row (but there welcome to submit!)

Hopefully oneday the winner could get a merit...

The Deadline will always be a Wednsday, so the deadline for the first theme will be Wednsday, September 2. The theme is The Pond

(special thanks to 'thisisnotanalt'

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GhostOfHorror
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"Winter is finally here" flows better, at least in my opinion.

EmperorPalpatine
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Like a cold area of ice

Still too many syllables:
Like(1) a(2) cold(3) ar(4)e(5)a(6) of(7) ice(8)

Its where I keep all my food

"Its" (posessive) should be "It's" (contraction of "It is&quot.

Winter finally is here!

If you're keeping that particular phrasing, there should be commas before and after "finally".
pickpocket
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"Its" (posessive) should be "It's" (contraction of "It is&quot.

Oh please. you know I hardly ever use apostrophes.

Paradise of ice
It's where I keep all my food
Refrigerator

Happy?
Roxxar123
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The cold air of ice,
Brings a feel of paradise
Paradise of ice.

xXxDAPRO89xXx
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Baron

It's funny how like everyone (including me) is using Paradise of ice in their haikus... Thats a lucky coincedence ^^

Roxxar123
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Farmer

It's funny how like everyone (including me) is using Paradise of ice in their haikus.


Well, it's a perfect 5-syllable phrase. And I thought that we had to use it XD
GhostOfHorror
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Nomad

You don't have to do put the words of the theme in your phrase, it's just a guideline on what to write about.

EmperorPalpatine
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Jester

You don't have to do put the words of the theme in your phrase

If anything, I advise against it because redundancy is redundant.
Roxxar123
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Farmer

You don't have to do put the words of the theme in your phrase, it's just a guideline on what to write about.


I know now. First time posting here, so...yeah. Now I know not to use it...right?
GhostOfHorror
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Nomad

You don't have to "not" use it, I just thought you should know it isn't a requirement.

killersup10
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blistering tundra
beautiful swollensnow flakes
frozen paradise

Maverick4
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Stoic

I can't be bothered
To even attempt to feel.
Apathy at last!

murasaki9
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The deliciousness of redundancy isn't lost on me.
In fact, it was quite hilarious. Mav has broken the spell
so there's nothing to laugh about now.

killersup10
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blistering tundra
beautiful swollen snow flakes
frozen paradise

xerox
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Wtf.. Im not saying "Winter,finnaly, is here!" Im trying to show everyone that the winter finnaly after long waiting is here and i try to discribe it with Paradice of Ice
"Winter finnaly is here:
Paradice of Ice"
See? I dont need to put comas after and before finnaly, because if I do it, it wont make any sense......

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