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This is my very first time actually posting in the Art, Music, and Writing section. So, yeah... I don't really know what is allowed allowed here or not.
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Mysterious Killer on Halloween
It was Halloween in a small town called Arixo. Many young children are out Trick or Treating. A kid walks to a red house with blood marks, skulls on the ground and dead bodies. This kid was named Jake. Jake was 8 years old and loved to explore places. Now, Jake thought all of the stuff around the house were props. But they weren't. As he knocked on the door, a spider went on him. He threw it off. The door opened, but there was nobody there. He called out "Hello?" Nobody answered. He takes one step in. He is dragged inside by someone and then the door locks. Jake's parents wondered where he was. 2 hours after Jake was dragged inside the house, his parents find him dead in front of a red house. The same red house from before. The next day, it was on the news. Everybody in town was told to look out for anybody suspicious. 1 hour later, a 32 year old man named Lucas, visits the hospital. He went to the bathroom. He heard noises. Lucas ignored them. Then, he sees a large man in a dirty coat with blood stains on them. He was wielding a knife. Lucas was thrown across the room by the large man. Then, he was stabbed right through the head. The large man dragged his body to his red house. He left Lucas' body on his lawn. The next day, it was on the news. Police have no idea what is happening. The police are ordered to search in a red house for any information. It passes 2 days. They haven't come back. Their corpses are left on the roof of the red house. The population of this town has been decreased by 7. There are only 23 people left. After weeks, many people are slaughtered by the large man in the coat. The only one left was a young lady. Her name was May. She was in the public restroom at the park. The door was kicked open and then the large man in a coat appeared. He gave a sad face to May. He started to cry. He lowered his knife and spared May. He took his knife and stabbed his heart. And fell to the ground. The man in the coat was actually May's long lost father. Now May happily lives in Florida. But she still remembers that moment...
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Comments please! ^.^

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plokkey
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It's actually pretty good. Entertained me for a little while :P


Yea really. I actually liked it because it was pretty short, but lacked quality.

Also I forgot to say don't make your sentences too long.
SoulHack117
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I really like the Mysterious Killer on Halloween story, Really love stories like that ^_^ make more like it!

sporex
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Well, I'm gonna make a different kind of story.
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Random World - Part 1

Narrator: In the world of Random, well... Everything is random. But the only place civilized is the town of Kora. No one has explored farther than this town. But, two friends go on a journey to explore the Random world. Their names are Rex and Brandon.

Rex: Okay Brandon. Go to your house and pack up your stuff! We're leaving to explore!

Brandon: Okay. Geez... Don't be in such a hurry.

Rex: HURRY!

Brandon: Shut up... Okay. I got my backpack.

Rex: Alright. Let's go!

Brandon: Shouldn't we get some weapons?

Rex: Uh... Yeah! Okay!

Narrator: Rex and Brandon enter the shop.

Rex: Hello! What do you got?

Merchant: Let's see... I got a sword and a bow and arrow set.

Rex: Okay, we'll buy 'em!

Narrator: Rex and Brandon buy the dagger and the bow & arrow set.

Rex: Okay. Let's go Brandon!

Narrator: Rex and Brandon equip their weapons and walk into the forest.

Rex: There's nothing here!

Brandon: There's someone here... Someone or something is here...

Narrator: Rex and Brandon encounter a bunny lizard!

Rex: Alright! Our first battle! I'll slash it with my sword.

Brandon: That idiot. He can't just attack like that. He doesn't know what it does.

Bunny Lizard: ROAR! I'M GONNA BREATHE FIRE ON YOU!

Rex: AHH! Come one Brandon let's go!

Narrator: Rex and Brandon fail in the fight with the Bunny Lizard. After 5 minutes of running, they find a dark, cold cave. Water drips from the ceiling. They can't see anything. What will happen?
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Characters and Side characters

Rex - He's loud and energetic. He wields a secret power within him that few people know about. He likes to be the boss but he doesn't think most of the time.

Brandon - He's calm and collected. He spends most of his time playing chess. He has an IQ of 228. He is the smartest person in the Random world.

Merchant - He sells weapons in a store.

Bunny Lizard - Bunny Lizards are aggressive and will not hesitate to burn things. They have a lizard face and a bunny body.

parrot657
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I lawled a lot on the end. Not specially a great piece of modern writing, but I found it funny :P.

sporex
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I lawled a lot on the end.


You mean the Bunny Lizard said roar?
plokkey
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I like it better, sorta. You should ease the transition between different settings. It's like BOOM, they're in the store. and BOOM they're in a forest fighting a bunny lizard. Describe the store or the merchant more, describe the forest more. I like the description at the ending, it was good.

parrot657
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You mean the Bunny Lizard said roar?

Yeh, imagine a bunny lizard saying roar I'm gonna...
GuitarHeroFtw
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Shouldnt this topic be considered as spam?

RaptorExx
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Shouldnt this topic be considered as spam?

Why?
It's like BOOM, they're in the store. and BOOM they're in a forest fighting a bunny lizard.

That was funny for some reason...........
Yeh, imagine a bunny lizard saying roar I'm gonna...

I know lol.
parrot657
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Shouldnt this topic be considered as spam?

uh.... why? It's sporex writing stories... that's allowed.
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Random World - Part 2

Narrator: Rex and Brandon find a cave. Dark, and cold. What will they do?

Rex: Hey Brandon, should we go in?

Brandon: Hey, why don't you figure it out yourself?

Rex: What? You mean go inside?

Brandon: Yeah. I'll back you up.

Rex: Okay. I'm going in.

Narrator: As Rex enters the cave, he's spots a trail of boogers.

Rex: Boogers? What the heck...

Narrator: Rex follows the trail of boogers...

Rex: AHH!!!!!!!! BRANDON! COME HERE!

Brandon: What is it? What's happening?

Narrator: Rex and Brandon find a young boy in rags picking his nose.

Brandon: Who is he?

Rex: I don't know...

Booger Boy: Hi! I'm Booger Boy! I live in this cave.

Rex: Wow. You're weird.

Booger Boy: I'M NOT WEIRD! Booger Slingshot! Go!

Narrator: Booger Boy ties up Rex.

Brandon: Hey Rex. I'm gonna go outside.

Rex: WHAT? Don't leave me here!

Narrator: What will happen after Brandon leaves?
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Characters & Side Characters

Rex - He's loud and energetic. He wields a secret power within him that few people know about. He likes to be the boss but he doesn't think most of the time.

Brandon - He's calm and collected. He spends most of his time playing chess. He has an IQ of 228. He is the smartest person in the Random world.

Merchant - He sells weapons in a store.

Bunny Lizard - Bunny Lizards are aggressive and will not hesitate to burn things. They have a lizard face and a bunny body.

Booger Boy - A lone boy in a cave. Not much information available.

GuitarHeroFtw
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uh.... why? It's sporex writing stories... that's allowed.


Oh right, its just that i thought it was just random stuff.
plokkey
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Again, still a little quick on the events, but I don't mine this story is hilarious.

Why does Brandon just leave like that? o.o?

parrot657
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Again, the story is hillarious. I was like wtf is a booger :P.

RaptorExx
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Lolz the end made me laugh when Brandon just leaves like nothing.

I was like wtf is a booger :P.

Lolwut!?
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