It's been a while since I've made another story. I'm going to improve this story. The other one was short so I'll make this one a bit longer. Ok let's start.
Failing in School
Tom's parents always had to wake up Tom from his "Beauty Sleep" because of school. He really hated school. He wasn't really a good student. There were 3 days left until school was over. His teacher told everyone in his class including him that "We will have tests on the last three days" Ms.Fitz told them that last week. Tom was lazy. He got an F on everything. Tom was in 4th Grade. His teacher, Ms.Fitz was the most shrieked in his school. Well, to the story instead of the about.
Day 1- Until school ends-Misery
It was 7:00 morning and his parents had to wake Tom up as usual. "Wake up Tom!" yelled Mom. Tom woke up and got ready. As he ate breakfast, Dad asked "Do you want to be a stupid man? Tom". "Dad thats ridiculous", Tom replied. Tom finishes his breakfast and walks to school. He walks because his school is so close to his house. As Tom walks into class, Ms.Fitz said "testing time". Tom marked A,B,C,D on every test.
Day 2-Until school ends-Still Tom did everything as usual in the morning. Mom said, "Do better!". Tom was like blah blah blah. At school, the same same thing. A,b,C,D,A,b,c,d............
Day 3-Finally the last day-Math Test passed
"Pass this time", Dad said. Tom ignored him. In class, Tom had a C+ in math. He know the basics. Ms.Fitz said, "it's just the basics". Tom saw easy questions and marked only one answer. At the end of the day Ms.Fitz gave Tom an A on his math test the other two he got an F.
Suprised His mom and dad was happy.
The End
Tell me how it was? Needs Improvement? What you liked?
Well, not to be rude, but alot of the sentences are fairly simple. Try to add mor adjetives. Describe things. Is Tom tall? Fat? Grouchy? Is the school big? Small? And alot of your sentences start the same way. Tom this, Tom that. VARIEATE!
