ForumsArt, Music, and Writing"The End of All Time" by Valkyrie

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valkyrie1119
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I walk into a changed world. An eerie silence seems to ring in my ears, but I hear nothing.

The world is quiet now.

The last small poisonous waves crash against an irradiated shore line. I hear a sizzling sound as the acidic water burns the sand to a charred black.

Memories, they're a blur. A fusion of reality and sub conscious creations. I hear voices. They say things...strange things. I hear something like "...geo-magnetic reversal..." and "...the end of all time..." and "...the storm of the cosmos..."

It doesn't make sense.

I climb a cliff with a flat top and stand, looking out. In the center of the ocean, now a dry flat land, is a massive crater. Those voices, I hear them again.

"...the end of all time..."

Civilization is gone now, and I am all that's left. I can't remember my name or where I was born. I don't remember what happened or how it happened or if things were always like this.

In a quiet world, I listen for answers.

It is the voices who answer me. But all I hear is one word, in a raspy, whispering voice: "Tunguska. Tunguska."

Suddenly, the world around me erupts into flames. A blinding light followed by a tremendous explosion have consumed time and space in an exploding void. But as a powerful rush wind destroys everything around me, I remain, rooted to the spot, unharmed by the destruction that could destroy worlds.

"...the end of all time..."

But then the scene melts away in a blur of light and darkness, and an eerie wasteland greets me with a silence. I walk out into the alone, the nothing, the void, and all the while, the voices ring in my head:

"...the end of all time..."

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valkyrie1119
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What is it? No one has anything to say about it? I just wanted some constructive criticism, that's all.

goumas13
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It's a bit pessimistic and sad, but it's quite good.
My opinion is that you used too many adjectives at the begging and that's a bit oxymoron, cause I think you want to pass an image of simplicity, that there is nothing as you say "I walk out into the alone, the nothing, the void".
That's what I think.

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