ForumsArt, Music, and WritingTanka Contest - Theme: The Sky (p.6)

68 23218
DrElmer
offline
DrElmer
552 posts
Shepherd

Some of you may be asking, what is a "Tanka"? Unfortunately, Dr Elmer cannot give you the answer off the top of his head, so he decided to ask Wikipedia for help.

Tanka consists of five units (often treated as separate lines when Romanized or translated) usually with the following mora pattern:

5-7-5-7-7.
The 5-7-5 is called the kami-no-ku ("upper phrase&quot, and the 7-7 is called the shimo-no-ku ("lower phrase&quot. Tanka is a much older form of Japanese poetry than haiku.


Thanks Wikipedia!

Now that you know what this "Tanka" thing is, let's look at the guidelines for the contest.
-Must follow the 5-7-5-7-7 syllable scheme.
-Must be in English
-No foul words that might make Dr Elmer cry
-It must fit the theme
-It will not win if it does not meet the deadline
-No exceptions!

There is currently no prize for this contest, but Dr Elmer and his super Tanka henchmen are out to fix that.

Dr Elmer (you may know him as DrElmer because armorgames does not allow underscores or spaces) will be the judge unless he says otherwise. He will appoint a new judge when there are expections.

Dr Elmer has no ideas for themes, unfortunately, and he needs your help. After a normal round, the winner would pick the next theme, but there haven't been any rounds yet and Dr Elmer is drawing a blank. So if you could please help him decide a theme, that would make him so happy and it would allow you to submit all your wonderful Tankas that you've got bottled up in there.

  • 68 Replies
adios194
offline
adios194
818 posts
Nomad

Rigid, dry, and bare.
There is small vegetation.
What you see is fake.
Time means nothing now.
When will you fall dead?

Grim, but fun.

adios194
offline
adios194
818 posts
Nomad

Oh! I messed up, I thought you said 57555. Ill redo it.

Rigid, dry, and bare.
There is small vegetation.
What you see is fake.
Time is of no essence now.
When will you leave this sad place.

Teeheegirl123
offline
Teeheegirl123
164 posts
Nomad

Lying on my back
Too weak and thirsty to think
Heaven awaits me
For I'm being swallowed by
By the eternal sand of time

adios194
offline
adios194
818 posts
Nomad

When is judging?

brianholmes
offline
brianholmes
8 posts
Nomad

Camels have trampled
Bitter winds have kissed my face
So misunderstood
Do I not show you your heart
Do I not glimmer for you

jdoggparty
offline
jdoggparty
5,860 posts
Nomad

I want to try.

The sand is yellow
My camels very tired
They need a small pond
Over the hill we shall go
I hope they can walk longer

Ta-dah!

DrElmer
offline
DrElmer
552 posts
Shepherd

I agreed with Parsat on the syllable thing. I believe that a widely famous (among the poetry community) haiku, made by a master, has 6-7-5. 'Nuff said.


Look, I'm not going to complicate this contest. If the rules are that loose, it's like having no rules at all.

The only legitimate language that a syllable-following tanka can be written in is Japanese


It isn't hard to write a poem in English using the 5-7-5-7-7 scheme.

but I have used the syllable rule to write this poem in Chinese.


Thank you for that, but I'm afraid this contest states that every entry must be in English. I don't understand why you feel obligated to write a poem in Chinese, which isn't even a real language, when the rules clearly state that English is the only language allowed in the contest.

If I would freely write it in a poem that captures the essence in a more conventional style (in relation to original styles of composition):


This contest is not about "capturing the essence," so if you want to "capture the essence," go ahead, but that isn't what I created the contest for. I created it so people could be creative and write poetry in a certain theme. Unless you can "capture the essence" in a 5-7-5-7-7 scheme, don't bother entering.

When is judging?


I will judge tomorrow. The entries are now closed.
jdoggparty
offline
jdoggparty
5,860 posts
Nomad

Whooh perfect timing!

iamnotironman
offline
iamnotironman
1,287 posts
Nomad

Aw I had a perfect Tanka,I wish I could use it.

DrElmer
offline
DrElmer
552 posts
Shepherd

The judging is a bit short. I didn't have any time to make an elaborate judging sequence, so I just simplified my decision.

1) EnterOrion
2) Ernie15
3) Parsat
4) brianholmes
5) Teeheegirl123

Unfortunately, there is still no prize.

The next theme is Trees and the deadline is January 30.

EnterOrion
offline
EnterOrion
4,220 posts
Nomad

I win. Yay!

I think.

Trees . . . .

adios194
offline
adios194
818 posts
Nomad

Winding so slowly.
Ancient oaks crumble like soil.
Forever sitting.
When time began they were here.
They were here, winding slowly.

Ernie15
offline
Ernie15
13,344 posts
Bard

DrElmer has put me in charge of this contest. No rules are being changed; you just now have a new judge.

iamnotironman
offline
iamnotironman
1,287 posts
Nomad

Huge trees in the air,
No one knowing what's coming,
Trees about to fall,
People noticing running,
People not getting away.

Ernie15
offline
Ernie15
13,344 posts
Bard

Come on guys, only three entries? We can do better than that. This needs publicity.

Oh right, the announcement board...

Showing 16-30 of 68