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KingOfAthlum
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Hello everyone, I am leaving in a month and a half for BMT. As of now I quit my job and am focusing on training. But along with training I find myself bored out of my mind while waiting. So over the course of this month and a half up until the day before I leave I will be writing a chapter a day to post on DeviantArt and shall put the links here if need be, but I want YOU, the readers to be my characters. Some of you may remember I have done this before and was somewhat successful.

SOOO I need some volunteers to be a part of the story!!!!! Anyone who would like to participate, just leave a comment or pm me If I get enough responses by midnight Eastern Standard Time, I will post the first chapter tomorrow morning!!!

Any questions you may have feel free to voice in the comments or pm's.

Thanks in advance,

Your friendly neighborhood KoA.

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KingOfAthlum
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Sorry for the triple post, but I felt I needed to update everyone. I just put up both chapters 10 and 11.

Please enjoy them!!!

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I've just finished the first chapter. I think it's a well-written story and it makes me want to read more. Besides, I think it could be a good way to improve my vocabulary, as I don't usually read stories in English.

Could I be part of your story, please?

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Whee, thats awesome, I'm a sniper!

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Keep up the good work Bro, this story is just awesome. A very well written Sci Fi story. I salute to you, sir.

KingOfAthlum
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I've just finished the first chapter. I think it's a well-written story and it makes me want to read more. Besides, I think it could be a good way to improve my vocabulary, as I don't usually read stories in English.
Could I be part of your story, please?



You are more than welcome to join!!! I'm glad you are enjoying it and I am glad it is helping your vocabulary.

Whee, thats awesome, I'm a sniper!


I'm glad you like your role!!

Keep up the good work Bro, this story is just awesome. A very well written Sci Fi story. I salute to you, sir.


Thank you for the compliment!
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Unbelievably awesome. If I was a publisher, these chapters would be in a book store near you by the time you finished this sentence. Hard to believe you could capture such an image simply through use of a name.

KingOfAthlum
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That comment made my heart swell . I thank you immensely for it. I put a great deal of thought and detail into my characters on paper before I begin typing.

I am happy you are enjoying it too that is the important part.

KingOfAthlum
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Chapter 12 is finished, please enjoy everyone. This one is Ernie's and also a slight introduction to Kegaumongo!!!

kegaumongo
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Thanks for adding me

I haven't read the chapter where my character is introduced, but I can't wait to do so. The story is great and interesting. It is nicely written and not heavy to read at all. Besides, I like the way you're mixing the different stories.

As I said, I'm not used to read stories written in English, so I don't know if I'm wrong about this: I miss some commas. Not always, but sometimes I've thought "I'd add a comma here" just to make it easier to read... for me, but maybe this doesn't happen to other people. I don't know, it's just a thought... or maybe I'm just crazy about commas

KingOfAthlum
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As I said, I'm not used to read stories written in English, so I don't know if I'm wrong about this: I miss some commas. Not always, but sometimes I've thought "I'd add a comma here" just to make it easier to read... for me, but maybe this doesn't happen to other people. I don't know, it's just a thought... or maybe I'm just crazy about commas


I'll see about adding more commas!! Lol I shall go back and read over some of my work to see if I missed some.

I sometimes get carried away while writing and forget all about punctuation marks....I apologize if this bothered you.

I hope you like the intro it is not much, but your actual chapters are going to be explosive!!!!
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I love this story. And I agree with Salvidian, this deserves to be published.

KingOfAthlum
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I love this story. And I agree with Salvidian, this deserves to be published.



Thanks man, I'm glad you enjoy reading it as much as I love writing. I wish it were possible but I don't know, that would be amazing.

That compliment is second only to that you love it.
KingOfAthlum
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Chapter 13 is up!!! Killersup it has been too long since you were the star.

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Killersup teaming up with skelaton_pilot? nothing to say other then....bad....***.Wicked cool chapter.

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Killersup teaming up with skelaton_pilot? nothing to say other then....bad....***.Wicked cool chapter.


Just wait my friend....
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