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best lyrics for a song contest! (Not whole song/i wont steal)

Posted Jan 12, '13 at 10:35pm

SeaTurtle

SeaTurtle

114 posts

Verse 1
don't know where im going
but i know what im leaving from
maybe you can help me
tell me what it is you want
and i cant quite remember what it is i wanted to forget
maybe its forever
maybe its just happiness

Chorus
well i know that you've
got much better things to do
and thats all right
love is a privilege
its not my right

Verse 2
remember when you told me
that you didnt care at all
and everyone around you
wondering when it is you'd fall
but me i never questioned
everyones sane, ive lost my mind
everybodys changing
why should it be different this time

Chorus

 

Posted Jan 12, '13 at 10:37pm

SeaTurtle

SeaTurtle

114 posts

^I have this all set to music and it flows very well. Its the first song ive written so far!

 

Posted Jan 12, '13 at 11:24pm

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

I thought any song?

 

Posted Jan 12, '13 at 11:53pm

pangtongshu

pangtongshu

8,704 posts

I thought any song?

OP asks for a song written by one's self

 

Posted Jan 13, '13 at 12:27am

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

My song:

Verse 1:
Sometime's life is flashing,every one is talking
You see that I am shining but every body's looking
You see me;Yeah!Yeah!

Chorus:
I see myself;in a mirror
And I see the one
inside of me
but when you I inside my heart
You can see the one;

 

Posted Jan 13, '13 at 5:48am

Reton8

Reton8

2,659 posts

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Everyone one is trying, trying really hard.
But me I'm shinin', sparklin', glowing like a star.

I'm Dewing me, being me, rising to the top.
Every one is thirsty, drinking me like soda-pop.

You're guzzlin', I'm bubblin, climbing the Mountain.
The Mountain Dew nation,
The Mountain Dew nation.

Lil' Dew-ezy, the Carter
welcome to the Dew charter...
of Mountain
Drink that fountain...
soda pop.

Dew the Dew and be you just like
Lil' Dew-ezy Dew.

 

Posted Jan 13, '13 at 8:44pm

kirks011

kirks011

181 posts

Rap for the 1st one, metal for the 2nd, hard rock for the 3rd.

Emp, I'd say the second lyrics would sound better with a hard rock type feel to it. I can't really imagine a guitar part for it right now, but a basic syncopated drum beat would be kinda cool under it.

 

Posted Jan 13, '13 at 8:48pm

kirks011

kirks011

181 posts

Verse 1:
Sometime's life is flashing,every one is talking
You see that I am shining but every body's looking
You see me;Yeah!Yeah!

Chorus:
I see myself;in a mirror
And I see the one
inside of me
but when you I inside my heart
You can see the one;

I think if you were to make this one into a full song you should make it alternative rock, sort of like linkin' park. It just sounds like a rock song but with some extra little effects. I'd say have a fast rythm running under the effects, but keep the effects at a moderate pace, nothing more than eights and try to keep rests where possible. I really like what im seeing in your song.

 

Posted Jan 14, '13 at 3:21am

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

Okay dude

 

Posted Jan 14, '13 at 3:31am

Lee_Blade

Lee_Blade

86 posts

Verse 1:
Sometime's life is flashing,every one is talking
You see that I am shining but every body's looking
You see me;Yeah!Yeah!

Chorus:
I see myself;in a mirror
And I see the one
inside of me
but when you Iook inside my heart
You can see the one;

Verse 2:
Yellow light is flashing everybody is talking
Yellow cabs are passing
but they don't care about me
But when i see my future and i say...

(CHORUS)

Verse 3:
I see the shining lights,
the fancy cars;
the tall buildings
what else you want;
but when you look inside my heart
you can see the real me Oh yeah;yeah yeah...

(CHORUS)

Rap:
Yeah I got it,
Everything I heard from my mom I got it
Everything she wanted from me I got it
Yeah I know moms can predict the future Oh yeah Oh yeah Oh yeah;

(CHORUS)[i]

Verse 4:
One day I be the biggest thing yeah!
Oh yeah,Oh yeah!
I'm gonna be the next biggest thing.

Do you guys like my song?

 
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