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jalex13
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One Hope Lost

One hope lost
At what cost?
Hope it's not you;
Hope help comes through.
Dreams are shattered;
Wind blows on,
Must pull through this eerie song.
Many lives are changed that day;
This barren place is here to stay.
The dream lives on in this city;
Even as the world speaks pity
Hope will come to save the day;
That is all I have to say.

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jalex13
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i would really appreciate it if someone took a minute or two to rate my poem.

Xzeno
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I assume it is free verse. I did enjoy reading it, though I found it rather... Sophomoric.

jalex13
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thanks, i am more of a free verse type of poet.

Xzeno
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I never liked free verse. I always thought of it as a cop-out. But regardless, it was readable and fairly good.

jalex13
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i am just a beginnner poet. I enjoy putting all my emotions and thoughts into pieces of literature.

I assume it is free verse. I did enjoy reading it, though I found it rather... Sophomoric.

I'll take that as a compliment.
flappybob999
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Nice poem. I like the rhythm.
*Correction!*
Free verse does not rhyme.

Yet another great poem. Not a lot of concept, though. 8/10.

jalex13
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thanks so much. i guess i have to say another sentence or so or this will be considered spam... so.. i guess ill be random. i like poems yay!

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this is a great poem! how about you visit my Zombie Apocalypse Story?

jalex13
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ok. i will visit the zombie story. what is that about?

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