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hmm I like this,as it would go good as a song with the right rhythm in my mind,overall I like it,and its actually a decent poem.

hrm, I only get a decent?

*smacks with tattle cane*

But is there anything I could change which might make it better.

I like,but its just that its one of those annoying love type poems,so no there really isn't much I would change except the main theme,which I don't see happening in any way,so I shall say its good end of story.

Ok, well I suppose thats a good reson not to like it. I actually just wrote it trying to make something appear as a love poem, but mean something esle alltogether. I think I may have failed a tiny bit though....

Either something acoustic or piano accompanying it would be good. I would just call the title "roses"

After reading so many rhymes in the Rap Arena, I read this like a rapper. lol I love your style. I also agree that this could be a really good song with the right rhythm.

I actually just wrote it trying to make something appear as a love poem, but mean something else all together

Buy me a black flower baby, and wait for me

So that we can somehow love across space and time.

Hold me close, let our hearts beat together

Give me a single black flower
Then wait on my doorstep in the darkest hour.
I'll be there babe, just wait and see
Because there's nobody, nobody, for you but me
Sign it, seal it, steal a kiss
And pretend the end won't come like this...

Don't you understand what I'm asking of you?
Just come for me so I can see this is true.
Hold me, hold me tight let our hearts beat together
through the night.Even though I'm going, show me I'm in your heart.Prove to me just once we won't fall apart.

You're my regret, my power, my tears.
Without you I'll be nothing across the years.
Then babe, there's got to be some way I can stay.
Even when your away.Kiss me, kill me, but don't let me go.
I don't want to think, it's all too much, to know.

So bring me a black roses for my door
And sit there until I get up off the floor.
And come out and find you and make you mine
So that we can somehow love across space and time.
You're everything to me and a piece of my heart
And no matter how far I swear we won't be apart.

If there were any other way I wouldn't let you go
I'd hold you tight and make sure that you know
Everything that's going to happen is such a mystery
But even in all of this you break my misery.
If there were any way to be here I'd stay
To lose myself in you, your love your game.

Buy me a black flowers baby, and wait for me
Although someday I won't be here for you for free
Let's spend a last night forgetting who we are
And where we're going through night and day
Let's spend a night pretending I'm Somebody again
As together our two perfect hearts will blend.

Will you forget me or will you remember?
How we even got together
If you believe in all my words
And voice and spirit and times unheard
Then bring me a single black rose for memory
And hold me in your heart as all I could be.


This is just my version. This is just what it could be.

Give me a single black flower
Then wait on my doorstep in the darkest hour.
I'll be there babe, just wait and see
Because there's nobody, nobody, for you but me
Sign it, seal it, steal a kiss
And pretend the end won't come like this...
Don't you understand what I'm asking of you?
Just come for me so I can see this is true.
Hold me, hold me tight let our hearts beat together
through the night.Even though I'm going, show me I'm in your heart.Prove to me just once we won't fall apart.
You're my regret, my power, my tears.
Without you I'll be nothing across the years.
Then babe, there's got to be some way I can stay.
Even when your away.Kiss me, kill me, but don't let me go.
I don't want to think, it's all too much, to know.
So bring me black roses to my door
And sit there until I get up off the floor.
And come out and find you and make you mine
So that we can somehow love across space and time.
You're everything to me and a piece of my heart
And no matter how far I swear we won't be apart.
If there were any other way I wouldn't let you go
I'd hold you tight and make sure that you know
Everything that's going to happen is such a mystery
But even in all of this you break my misery.
If there were any way to be here I'd stay
To lose myself in you, your love your game.
Buy me black flowers baby, and wait for me
Although someday I won't be here for you for free
Let's spend a last night forgetting who we are
And where we're going through night and day
Let's spend a night pretending I'm Somebody again
As together our two perfect hearts will blend.
Will you forget me or will you remember?
How we even got together
If you believe in all my words
And voice and spirit and times unheard
Then bring me a single black rose for memory
And hold me in your heart as all I could be.