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Posted Apr 1, '09 at 10:56am

WizardAgent23

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Hey mew here! x3

 

Posted Apr 2, '09 at 5:42am

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

Teaser time It's kinda abstract, but its a brief riddle-like synopsis.

Gone with the dusty wind,
Leaving just a skeletal grin.
The flames of revenge and hate,
Twist the hands of fate,
And open Heaven's Gates.

 

Posted Apr 2, '09 at 6:22am

knight_34

knight_34

14,235 posts

Gone with the dusty wind,
Leaving just a skeletal grin.
The flames of revenge and hate,
Twist the hands of fate,
And open Heaven's Gates.


Hurrah! Hurrah!

The teaser is here! The teaser is here!

When do you think you can finish GA II?
 

Posted Apr 2, '09 at 10:29am

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

As additional teaser notes, it's going to be longer than a thousand words.

 

Posted Apr 6, '09 at 7:43am

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

I'll post an enhanced version of Berry Pomeroy Castle.

Hopefully I can post stories every fortnightly or monthly. And you may get a double story on Halloween.

 

Posted Apr 6, '09 at 11:22am

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

I write mostly mystery and terror stories (duh?) that have supernatural elements in them. If you have any requests... I'll do them, but it'll be quite short.

 

Posted Apr 18, '09 at 12:49am

Gantic

Gantic

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Three weeks later.

Brief Overview

I've never done horror or mystery so I can't say much for how the story is told. Good stories, but there are multiple grammatical and punctuation errors amongst other things for "Berry Pomeroy Castle" and "The Bagpiper". Juxtaposition, punctuation, and unattributed dialogue cause occasional hiccups in comprehension. The prose can be tightened. It only holds the reader's attention with a firm grasp when it could secure the reader with a tight grip.

I haven't read "Guardian Angel" yet.

 

Posted May 2, '09 at 12:27pm

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

Ah, I'll just post a real and decent trailer. Instead of a poem. Short snippets of GAII.

Tears, He had none left to spare....

Those Soviets have asked for it...

The 5th Panzers were issued simple orders. Storm the area South of Stalingrad...

Roche burned with rage, his eyes blazed hot...

An almighty boom...a flash of bright light...darkness...

~~GA II~~

 

Posted May 3, '09 at 4:06am

knight_34

knight_34

14,235 posts

A real and decent trailer?

Real and decent are fitting words to describe your trailer.

Are you still writing GA II, or are you finished?

 

Posted May 3, '09 at 4:17am

nichodemus

nichodemus

13,573 posts

Knight

Are you still writing GA II, or are you finished?


Still writing the last paragraph sadly.
 
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