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Posted Jun 7, '09 at 5:05pm

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

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Inspired by jezz.

You can't beat water. Not with fire. Land will only adsorb it, only to make devastating landslides. Ice only will make water tougher. The Kingdoms try and move it with their tin cans, only making a problem somewhere else. This is why, when i was on the brink of death, i chose water to empower me. Now, loneliness scares me more than death. Without Water, i would be another farmer, soon to be engulfed in floods. The castle can't protect themselves from my immense power, and what many brave knights don't understand, is that, I am immortal. Arrows go strait through me. Sword are useless. Even if they attack me while sleeping in my coastal hut, they can not kill me.

They do not understand why I am ruthless, why I constantly drown out the kingdom. It is because the King betrayed me. I had done him a job, working in his castle, and he treated me like a slave. Denied me ever working for him. So now I must kill him. So no one ever gets shunned like that again.

But I do not only plan my vengeance, with my powers comes forever caring for sea life. I am constantly asked to get a crab out of a fisherman's net or escort baby turtles into the waters.

But one day, i hear a rustling in the trees and out appear 5 heavily armored knights. Each with vibrant flags and horses, they yell "We have come under decree of King Andrew the IV, and are here to kill you." As they approach, I lift my hand up, and with it comes the whole sea behind me. "You prepared to come here with armor, you thought it would protect you, but with one million pounds of water on you, it will only kill you quicker. Back off now, I do not want to kill you. It is the king that i would like to release every shark and lobster on." They looked at each other, and one dressed in royal blue said "We accept you terms." And they whipped their horses and trotted away. I put the body of water down, and sat down. This happens every week or so, and I have become a master in the art of intimidation.

I am also well acquaintance with the sky, and receive messages of the kingdoms doings every so often. On day a dove comes to me and says "The kingdom's army is on its way here with 3 catapults and about 100 soldiers, heavily armed!" I thank the bird, a lay down. About 30 minutes later, I here something of a stampede of animals and see a giant projectile  on fire land about 60 yard from me. As i saunter closer into the woods, I see giant catapults firing towards me and 100 knights galloping towards me. I douse the ground with thousands of gallons of water so it is much like shallow quicksand. I fall back, and watch all the steeds get knee-deep in mud. The knight get off their horses, but are stuck too. Now for the catapults. Much of the forest around me is in flames, and more fire balls are coming. I quickly get about 100 square feet of water and throw it toward the catapults. The sheer force breaks them like saplings. The knight have taken off their armor now and are retreating. As for the horses, I will tend to them now. I put out the forrest fire, and take out all the water from the drenched ground. I set them free, and lay down on the beach once again. There is steam everywhere. Like I said, you can't beat water.

 

Posted Jun 7, '09 at 5:13pm

jezz

jezz

1,447 posts

I have become a master in the art of intimidation.

I love that line xD

Well.. the story is pretty epic. I like it. I can spot quite a few spelling and grammatical errors, but all in all, its very good.
It is your first story, right?
For a first story, it's done well.
I'm glad I inspired you and i'm glad you took my advice to post it!

 

Posted Jun 7, '09 at 5:17pm

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

2,594 posts

First story, yup. Yea, i had fun with it.

 

Posted Jun 7, '09 at 6:08pm

Pois0nArr0w

Pois0nArr0w

1,556 posts

Interesting story. Some gramactical errors, sentence structure malfunctions and such, but otherwise not bad.

 

Posted Jun 7, '09 at 6:14pm

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

2,594 posts

what sentence structure malfunctions?

 

Posted Jun 7, '09 at 6:16pm

Pois0nArr0w

Pois0nArr0w

1,556 posts

It just seemed a bit odd the way you put some of the paragraphs together. I assumed something was wrong with it, but then again. assumptions can be dangerous.

 

Posted Jun 8, '09 at 4:16pm

dudeguy45

dudeguy45

2,594 posts

Agreed. Next part of water-lord story coming.

 

Posted Jun 8, '09 at 9:24pm

sonam

sonam

693 posts

what is the point of this thread. its like your place for APs

 

Posted Jun 8, '09 at 9:29pm

Pois0nArr0w

Pois0nArr0w

1,556 posts

It's a thread he uses to post any art/writing stuff he might have made. Not for AP gain. If that were the purpose, then this thread would be a lock-target/spamfest.

 

Posted Jun 8, '09 at 9:38pm

the_manta

the_manta

3,006 posts

I did like it. seems threads like this are getting more and more popular. therefore, and call me a copycat if you must, I am making my own soon.

oof... need to stay on topic... just a few grammatical errors, but they didn't take away too much from the overall effect. generally good story, dude.

 
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